/ Video Games / A RipperDoc in Cyberpunk
摘要
In the neon-lit streets of Night City, Daniel Lane, a brilliant surgeon from our Earth, finds himself reincarnated as a ripperdoc in a dystopian future. Haunted by memories of his past life, Daniel yearns for a second chance to rebuild what was lost. His skills in cyberware manipulation have made him a sought-after figure, but his true longing is for the life he once had.
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I like the story, but I would’ve been better the author when more in-depth about the main character like telling us how he got to this point. How did he feel when he got there, how did he get setup as a riverdock, and the thing he did to live and get his name out there that he’s the best to go to.
I enjoyed the premise, but the story feels like they put it in chatgpt about these set pript of what the story is about and nothing else. It is everything to build a good story, but it is missing a big flavor. That of which is just flavor. This pulls as much as a piece of plain wheat bread.But in all seriousness, it just needs to step back and flesh out all the ideas here, like the failed doctor and the edgerunner. Show me and put me in their shoes of how they are something and not just give me a they are this with no background. It was like dexter DeShawn showing up and saying he is the best fixer in nightcity while being a nomad. I don't know them other than what we got, and that is very little. However like previously stated, it is a good canvas of a story they just need more meat to them, and I'm glad about seeing cyberpunk fanfics. And I hope to see more growth out of this author and their other works and this one.
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This was a cool idea for a cyberpunk fic, it’s well written with little to no grammar issues I noticed, but I couldn’t read past the fifth chapter as I wasn’t interested in the mc. By that I mean his introduction felt like “This is the MC… anyway blah blah blah” and because of this there was no build up, no person to picture if that makes sense. When they were retrieving the woman from the Blackwall I actually forgot who the MC was for a moment. Al in all I feel like if you went back and fixed this this fic would grow in leaps and bounds.
Either I'm suffering from a seizure or this is a A.I story because the sentences repeating over and over. Still if you want to experience seizures yourself please enjoy.
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seems more like a basic outline of a story than an actual story