/ Anime & Comics / A Gamer Multiversal Defence
摘要
A tragic story. A orphan. A hater. This is what you can call our Luke. And now, what to do when you're the lucky one to be a defensor of the world?
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So far it's confusing and not very enticing to read a confusing mess I'd tell the author to try to fix the grammar and actually get to the point instead of tangling his words trying to embellish the story, this isn't your school assignment where you need more words, we need to be able to read it coherently but it doesn't seem like he knows what grammarly or other programs for helping grammar are since he still hasn't done it Oh well, no loss, the story is confusing and I can't say it's anywhere near decent but it could've been worse too so It's a 2/5 I guess
Like it..coool...so much potential.. Make the MC exactly like the player from solo leveling....a literal one man OP muther****er!...If this is in dxd universe no fucking peerage.....dont make MC some good two shoes..make him neutral...Add romance but unlike typical dxd fanfic dont make MC go after taken women..thats just sad..also dont separate lovers..good luck. SUMMARY: -OP/GODLIKE MC [one man army..no training others..**** others] -no bitchy MC -proper romance instead of some basic love at first **** or you know cheating angst ****. -No peerage