Re:HP-A New Life

LV 11

_asdfghjkl2021

I expected improvement as this was supposed to be a "rewrite", but alas, I'm very much disappointed. A lot of plot holes and massively unbelievable shit going on in this story (eg. (1) Ollivander just giving thr elder wand to the mc, because it doesn't work for Dumbledore anymore; (2) aside from Harry and his twin, Rose, they supposedly twin younger sibs, but they literally got erased in the story once Lillian was introduced; (3) Charlus, the grandfather of Harry didn't know that his wife (Dorea) was sorted in Slytherin....and other bizarre shit in the story)

LV 4

No_1_islookin

over all, I love the plot. But if you cut out the padding of info dumping on your magical theory , your first release would 20 chapters less. I'm pretty sure J.K learned something from it for her next books. Please just keep writing the compelling plot that keeps us wanting more. Please let me change this to a 5 out of 5.

LV 5

Lucifer101

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