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The story is very entertaining, if I had to criticize something it would be that the protagonist is a little naive and very trusting with the information, but those small details do not ruin the reading, in my opinion.
Hi there i have been reading this book and i think it is a fantastic book that has the potential to grow a lot more so if you are interested in publishing this fanfic to my platform please contact me and we can further negotiations details. this is my Instagram [yurichi_adrenaline]
all right, I'm on chapter 45. Mc is still 8 y/o. This is a good slow burn, with a strong foundation. Idk if the writer is planning a time skip. Mc plains of becoming the harem king, but so far, there are only three maybes and one loveable psycho snake-lady. BTW, idk Moagi had wood release, so thanks writer-san for the info.
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I like this mc but he just look like he doesnt want to effect the story . but story are to my liking
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This story is bloody brilliant! The grammar is good and the pacing of the story is nicely done. If you can make an auxiliary chapter explaining his powers that would be helpful. Is it his golden finger that allows him to retain bloodline powers? Not only sharingan but other kekkai genkai could be retained by absorbing bodies? Looking forward to reading more.
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Is it a harem? I'm really enjoying the story so far, but I honestly hate harems, so if so, please tell me not to get my hopes up. ㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤ
here take my stones. This is what you get if you get me addicted to a story......
The story is good, the author has a lot of knowledge about the world of Naruto and respects its rules and standards, many Naruto fanfic authors don't know anything about the functions of chakra, my only criticism is that the dialogues could be better worked and detailed, as well as the space where the MC is located could also be more detailed because this enriches the story.
Amazing story so far💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚
Lovely story so far. I hope you don't create too many love interests, but instead develop the character(s) to a large extent.
Good start. hope u don't go the Pokemon line down. i don't get the puppets... totally useless! puppets who look like Ino and Tenten, MHH! update following
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Okay. I'm invested. I'm locked in for the long run and eagerly awaiting the next update. I just hope you don't make me wait to long. I'm not very patient.
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Great start author please continue this book, Aramaki fruit is really OP hope mc uses it well.
The story is very entertaining, if I had to criticize something it would be that the protagonist is a little naive and very trusting with the information, but those small details do not ruin the reading, in my opinion.
Hi there i have been reading this book and i think it is a fantastic book that has the potential to grow a lot more so if you are interested in publishing this fanfic to my platform please contact me and we can further negotiations details. this is my Instagram [yurichi_adrenaline]
all right, I'm on chapter 45. Mc is still 8 y/o. This is a good slow burn, with a strong foundation. Idk if the writer is planning a time skip. Mc plains of becoming the harem king, but so far, there are only three maybes and one loveable psycho snake-lady. BTW, idk Moagi had wood release, so thanks writer-san for the info.
ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga ooga booga
I like this mc but he just look like he doesnt want to effect the story . but story are to my liking
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This story is bloody brilliant! The grammar is good and the pacing of the story is nicely done. If you can make an auxiliary chapter explaining his powers that would be helpful. Is it his golden finger that allows him to retain bloodline powers? Not only sharingan but other kekkai genkai could be retained by absorbing bodies? Looking forward to reading more.
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Is it a harem? I'm really enjoying the story so far, but I honestly hate harems, so if so, please tell me not to get my hopes up. ㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤ
here take my stones. This is what you get if you get me addicted to a story......
The story is good, the author has a lot of knowledge about the world of Naruto and respects its rules and standards, many Naruto fanfic authors don't know anything about the functions of chakra, my only criticism is that the dialogues could be better worked and detailed, as well as the space where the MC is located could also be more detailed because this enriches the story.
Amazing story so far💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚
Lovely story so far. I hope you don't create too many love interests, but instead develop the character(s) to a large extent.
Good start. hope u don't go the Pokemon line down. i don't get the puppets... totally useless! puppets who look like Ino and Tenten, MHH! update following
[img=proud][img=proud][img=proud][img=proud][img=proud][img=proud][img=proud][img=proud][img=proud][img=proud][img=proud][img=proud][img=proud][img=proud][img=proud][img=proud][img=proud][img=proud][img=proud][img=proud][img=nervous][img=nervous][img=nervous][img=nervous][img=nervous][img=nervous][img=nervous][img=nervous][img=update][img=gift][img=faceslap]
Okay. I'm invested. I'm locked in for the long run and eagerly awaiting the next update. I just hope you don't make me wait to long. I'm not very patient.
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Great start author please continue this book, Aramaki fruit is really OP hope mc uses it well.
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