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Love it please don't drop it. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Don;t know where to start author just assume everything , no consistency of thought , no character of mc , rapid narration change. ..........
Okay, I like this work. Maybe the first two chapters you won't like. But after that, it gets better. Like everyone else, the Author gets better with every chapter, and I hope to see more of it. Great job Author-san.
Its fine nothing crazy about it seems forced in a way. the writting feels plain like no emotions from anyone and its hard to write like that idek how. and then mc telling koneko about kuroka is forced. And theb mc acting like he wasn't intreasted in rias to dating is to big of an change you can hold on and not force it which you did and thats where i seen this fic being meh not great or very bad.
It’s not great or really good the author has a lot to work on the narration isn’t great and the mc is an even worse version of the already abysmal original anos
Damn, people are too negative bro. Support the author so he can improve and do better. Author-sama I recommend you to delete reviews that are just plain stupid.
Only interesting thing was Anos but the narration is literally just bad...simply bad enough to tire someone out🙄
I’ve only read up to chapter 3 as of the moment of making this review Below are just some of the reasons of why i think this fic is bad and its only from the first 2 chapters Sudden 18 year time skip with no transition Human mom suddenly developing a disease unique to devils How could his human mom know his real parents were looking for him if she doesn’t know who they are Human mom hasn’t been given a name yet The way Mc acquired Ano’s power is dumb, due to said reason Ano’s soul was injured leading to the mc personality being the dominant one Mc also thinks it’s weird and doesn’t think it was by chance and feels anos somehow bonded with him?? Mc says he has almost everything anos has but then states he only has memories of his magic cause most of anos memories are destroyed except for the ones about magic Rapid pov switching with no warning or transition Mc’s inconsistent knowledge of the supernatural Inconsistent narration Mc inconsistent about weather he wants a relationship or not and why he’s even wants to date Rias even though he’s shown literally no interest in wanting to date her Mc is supposedly handsome but we have no clue or indication of what he looks like MC’s appearance changed when he “woke up in this body” but has no idea what he looked like before so him knowing his appearance changed doesn’t make sense and it is a completely stupid statement with no reason to exist Somehow infers that Aika has the unique power to tell the size of a guy’s manhood just because she was shocked when she saw him and looked at his lower body Somehow infers that Issei has the boosted gear because of his dragon aura and his character Rias fell in love with the mc at first sight Mc can’t cure his mom’s mystery disease cause somehow even with Ano’s power he just can’t I could go on about chapter 3 but this shit ain’t worth the effort of explaining why its bad in meticulous detail
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It’s like author is speedrunning the story no substance no unique details just McDonald’s fast food of fanfics, mc is “op” but cant use most of his stregth cause he too powerful has all of anos healing but cant solve sleeping disease for his human mother? Says he watches anime knows nothing bout dxd yet finds out everything bout everyone upon first seeing them, has one conversation with rias then thinks he’s in love with her like in the nicest way possible maybe rewrite it to make stuff coherent at least
Love it please don't drop it. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Don;t know where to start author just assume everything , no consistency of thought , no character of mc , rapid narration change. ..........
Okay, I like this work. Maybe the first two chapters you won't like. But after that, it gets better. Like everyone else, the Author gets better with every chapter, and I hope to see more of it. Great job Author-san.
Its fine nothing crazy about it seems forced in a way. the writting feels plain like no emotions from anyone and its hard to write like that idek how. and then mc telling koneko about kuroka is forced. And theb mc acting like he wasn't intreasted in rias to dating is to big of an change you can hold on and not force it which you did and thats where i seen this fic being meh not great or very bad.
It’s not great or really good the author has a lot to work on the narration isn’t great and the mc is an even worse version of the already abysmal original anos
Damn, people are too negative bro. Support the author so he can improve and do better. Author-sama I recommend you to delete reviews that are just plain stupid.
Only interesting thing was Anos but the narration is literally just bad...simply bad enough to tire someone out🙄
I’ve only read up to chapter 3 as of the moment of making this review Below are just some of the reasons of why i think this fic is bad and its only from the first 2 chapters Sudden 18 year time skip with no transition Human mom suddenly developing a disease unique to devils How could his human mom know his real parents were looking for him if she doesn’t know who they are Human mom hasn’t been given a name yet The way Mc acquired Ano’s power is dumb, due to said reason Ano’s soul was injured leading to the mc personality being the dominant one Mc also thinks it’s weird and doesn’t think it was by chance and feels anos somehow bonded with him?? Mc says he has almost everything anos has but then states he only has memories of his magic cause most of anos memories are destroyed except for the ones about magic Rapid pov switching with no warning or transition Mc’s inconsistent knowledge of the supernatural Inconsistent narration Mc inconsistent about weather he wants a relationship or not and why he’s even wants to date Rias even though he’s shown literally no interest in wanting to date her Mc is supposedly handsome but we have no clue or indication of what he looks like MC’s appearance changed when he “woke up in this body” but has no idea what he looked like before so him knowing his appearance changed doesn’t make sense and it is a completely stupid statement with no reason to exist Somehow infers that Aika has the unique power to tell the size of a guy’s manhood just because she was shocked when she saw him and looked at his lower body Somehow infers that Issei has the boosted gear because of his dragon aura and his character Rias fell in love with the mc at first sight Mc can’t cure his mom’s mystery disease cause somehow even with Ano’s power he just can’t I could go on about chapter 3 but this shit ain’t worth the effort of explaining why its bad in meticulous detail
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It’s like author is speedrunning the story no substance no unique details just McDonald’s fast food of fanfics, mc is “op” but cant use most of his stregth cause he too powerful has all of anos healing but cant solve sleeping disease for his human mother? Says he watches anime knows nothing bout dxd yet finds out everything bout everyone upon first seeing them, has one conversation with rias then thinks he’s in love with her like in the nicest way possible maybe rewrite it to make stuff coherent at least