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De un momento muy particular y ciertamente de manera singular haciendo o no referencia a cierto diálogo que puede o no estar relacionada con algún hipotético muñeco para ser o no ser contabilizado como 150 caracteres así poder colocar lo que en un principio se podría suponer que se escribiría a continuación. Solo para poder finalizar, esta historia está... (Por los pelos debido a las actualizaciones)
I understand that there are some inconveniences but it's a fanfic and the story development is really great so far [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Bad writing, too much spelling mistakes and no proper grammar, the pace is so fast that you need to put double of brainpower to try and make sense of what is happening, there is plot convenience after convenience, in general just a bad fanfic.
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Since i wrote a long review before, but WN didn't upload it i will keep it short. Nice story, first chapters kinda ehh until you reach like chapter 8. Hope it isn't a harem. but if you decided to make it one, just keep it at 3 girl max, since more than that would ruin it. Now onto the fic itself, i agree with the other users, that he should go ssj4, since it has minimal KI drain, almost to none. Its great up till this point (Chapter 21). Getting the tail back somehow, through either a wish or regrow would be nice. Stand proud you can cook!
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I Caught up with the story. I want more! And doesn't look to be translated which makes it better.
This is quite good. The first 4 chapters are a bit flat but the writing gets better from the chapter 5. The story is quite simple but still an enjoyable read………………
If the main character is Gohan, you always have to see him at least and well, it is certainly a good fanfic. So far, I hope for more chapters, author. psdt: I support the harem if the author wants to include it
Maybe it gets better from chapter 4 but all the Dialogue and interactions feels forced and has no character behind them. I probably should have given it more of a chance but I just couldn't.
this story is really great, good writing , I appreciate that you don't rush it , like immediately op mc.. Keep going like that
Good story and interesting ideas It leave you wanting for more after each chapter 🦾
I don't normally write reviews, because it's too stressful. But I'll just say that this story deserves attention, just because it doesn't feel like a translation. At least I can be sure that it has potential.
Hey, if you're interested in this story, read it, don't wait for more chapters as I release a chapter everyday till 15 chapters, you reading and commenting gives me motivation....................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
De un momento muy particular y ciertamente de manera singular haciendo o no referencia a cierto diálogo que puede o no estar relacionada con algún hipotético muñeco para ser o no ser contabilizado como 150 caracteres así poder colocar lo que en un principio se podría suponer que se escribiría a continuación. Solo para poder finalizar, esta historia está... (Por los pelos debido a las actualizaciones)
I understand that there are some inconveniences but it's a fanfic and the story development is really great so far [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Bad writing, too much spelling mistakes and no proper grammar, the pace is so fast that you need to put double of brainpower to try and make sense of what is happening, there is plot convenience after convenience, in general just a bad fanfic.
[img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten]
Since i wrote a long review before, but WN didn't upload it i will keep it short. Nice story, first chapters kinda ehh until you reach like chapter 8. Hope it isn't a harem. but if you decided to make it one, just keep it at 3 girl max, since more than that would ruin it. Now onto the fic itself, i agree with the other users, that he should go ssj4, since it has minimal KI drain, almost to none. Its great up till this point (Chapter 21). Getting the tail back somehow, through either a wish or regrow would be nice. Stand proud you can cook!
揭示劇透 I Caught up with the story. I want more! And doesn't look to be translated which makes it better.
This is quite good. The first 4 chapters are a bit flat but the writing gets better from the chapter 5. The story is quite simple but still an enjoyable read………………
If the main character is Gohan, you always have to see him at least and well, it is certainly a good fanfic. So far, I hope for more chapters, author. psdt: I support the harem if the author wants to include it
Maybe it gets better from chapter 4 but all the Dialogue and interactions feels forced and has no character behind them. I probably should have given it more of a chance but I just couldn't.
this story is really great, good writing , I appreciate that you don't rush it , like immediately op mc.. Keep going like that
Good story and interesting ideas It leave you wanting for more after each chapter 🦾
I don't normally write reviews, because it's too stressful. But I'll just say that this story deserves attention, just because it doesn't feel like a translation. At least I can be sure that it has potential.
Hey, if you're interested in this story, read it, don't wait for more chapters as I release a chapter everyday till 15 chapters, you reading and commenting gives me motivation....................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................