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Yo I love the idea of your fic But the issue with the fic for me is what he asked for as compensation. Why would any body make that kind of wish, I thought that a sane person that wants to go to the one piece world and could think of the possible dangers of a time fruit could make a better wish than that, like come on!! Why can't he think of a way to safe guard his safety first then think about a fruit ( for example : wishing for a fully controlled personal space that contains the toki-toki nomi so the mc can customize it to what ever he wants be it future tech/something else or since the mc is so obsessed with the potential danger of the fruit just outright destroy the fruit ) Anyways author thats my complain about your fic aside from that u are doing well
Yo I love the idea of your fic But the issue with the fic for me is what he asked for as compensation. Why would any body make that kind of wish, I thought that a sane person that wants to go to the one piece world and could think of the possible dangers of a time fruit could make a better wish than that, like come on!! Why can't he think of a way to safe guard his safety first then think about a fruit ( for example : wishing for a fully controlled personal space that contains the toki-toki nomi so the mc can customize it to what ever he wants be it future tech/something else or since the mc is so obsessed with the potential danger of the fruit just outright destroy the fruit ) Anyways author thats my complain about your fic aside from that u are doing well