/ Book&Literature / Harry Potter: Toji Potter
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Toji (jjk) read Hp as a kid once and after death against Gojo he finds himself in Harry Potter's Body.
All characters are from the Books/Movies of Harry Potter by J.K. Rowling, so unfortunately I don’t own them and same goes for Toji Fushiguro from Jujutsu Kaisen by Gege Akutami.
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寫檢討ok so I have thoughts. first this is your story you do you. having said that a couple things stand out. one is that there is no detail on the how or why of the matter, just he "did it". I've only got to chapter ten and can see several loopholes. first, how did he get to the leaky cauldron, how did he get the respect of the goblins, how did he immediately identify Daphne. so on and so fourth. there is no how. on the other hand. the actions of the background charaters make no sense. like at all. not at any point have I seen a reaction beyond " OMG HE AMAZING". not that that can't happen but it goes back to WHY. what is the thought process of them making there, kinda ridiculous, choices. I think the premise of the story as huge potential. but needs more thought put into it. I think you can make a real entertaining story with a little more time and practice.
So coollllll 🥰😍😌😌😉😍🥰😘😘😍🙃🙂😊☺️☺️😊🙂🙂😇😊😊☺️☺️💕💗💗💗🙏🏻 Please update don’t stop ✋ . . . . . . Gh❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
it reads like a mix between a ff .net novel and AI generated. harry potter goes to Gringotts, gets his heritage tested (and gets multiple lordships of course)and horcrux removed, all things you see a million times on ff .net. acts like a young master and hates dumbledore. again, it just reads like a weirdly written bashing fic. if you know you know.
Just your average OP reincarnate fanfic with confusing story developments. It also seems like it’s also a harem.
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作者 WRizz1
The entire story feels rushed and practically screams ai generated