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摘要
In Universe 7 there are many powerful beings, to such an extent that they challenge even the gods, these are composed of a remarkable species, the Saiyajin, to such an extent that there is not even a debate when discussing who is the most powerful of the Universe outside the God of Destruction, but what if someone appeared who challenges this Status Quo to turn their hegemony and be able to compete against them and even overcome them?
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Slight AU: Starts 2 years before "The Battle of the Gods"
MC x ??? (For now)
UPDATES: Mondays
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4評論
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
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Just the shameless review of my work, check it out, it has it all, fights, drama, saiyans and lazy Gods.
I like this premise as well but for now I will wait until you get at least 30 chapters before I read.I hope this motivates you
Overall the writing is good, the only thing that brings the story down is the main character. Firstly, he doesn’t seem that emotionally mature, even after all the training he went through. Secondly, he seems like more of a fanboy than anything. He isn’t trying to make a place for himself in the story. Lastly, character interaction and a love interest was introduced way too early. The MC didn’t get to learn anything about himself or try to get stronger, and the love with 18 seemed kinda forced even if it meant nothing in the end,
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