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TA gucci....,............,............................................,.................................................... ⠄⠄⠄⢰⣧⣼⣯⠄⣸⣠⣶⣶⣦⣾⠄⠄⠄⠄⡀⠄⢀⣿⣿⠄⠄⠄⢸⡇⠄⠄ ⠄⠄⠄⣾⣿⠿⠿⠶⠿⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣦⣤⣄⢀⡅⢠⣾⣛⡉⠄⠄⠄⠸⢀⣿⠄ ⠄⠄⢀⡋⣡⣴⣶⣶⡀⠄⠄⠙⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣴⣿⣿⣿⢃⣤⣄⣀⣥⣿⣿⠄ ⠄⠄⢸⣇⠻⣿⣿⣿⣧⣀⢀⣠⡌⢻⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠿⠿⠿⣿⣿⣿⠄ ⠄⢀⢸⣿⣷⣤⣤⣤⣬⣙⣛⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡿⣿⣿⡍⠄⠄⢀⣤⣄⠉⠋⣰ ⠄⣼⣖⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⢇⣿⣿⡷⠶⠶⢿⣿⣿⠇⢀⣤ ⠘⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣽⣿⣿⣿⡇⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣷⣶⣥⣴⣿⡗ ⢀⠈⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡟⠄ ⢸⣿⣦⣌⣛⣻⣿⣿⣧⠙⠛⠛⡭⠅⠒⠦⠭⣭⡻⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡿⠃⠄ ⠘⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡆⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠹⠈⢋⣽⣿⣿⣿⣿⣵⣾⠃⠄ ⠄⠘⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠄⣴⣿⣶⣄⠄⣴⣶⠄⢀⣾⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠃⠄⠄ ⠄⠄⠈⠻⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡄⢻⣿⣿⣿⠄⣿⣿⡀⣾⣿⣿⣿⣿⣛⠛⠁⠄⠄⠄ ⠄⠄⠄⠄⠈⠛⢿⣿⣿⣿⠁⠞⢿⣿⣿⡄⢿⣿⡇⣸⣿⣿⠿⠛⠁⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄ ⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠉⠻⣿⣿⣾⣦⡙⠻⣷⣾⣿⠃⠿⠋⠁⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⢀⣠⣴ ⣿⣿⣿⣶⣶⣮⣥⣒⠲⢮⣝⡿⣿⣿⡆⣿⡿⠃⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⣠⣴⣿⣿⣿
protagonist quickly becomes powerful, yet not overpowered. he's also pretty smart, willing to put down his pride and act out a play for better results, but is equally as vengeful. yes, there is a harem, pretty extensive too, but not to the extent of Swarm System. the translation has few issues, overall, I'd rate it as basically all you could ask for from an independent translator who's probably just doing this as a hobby. Well done.
this fic is the perfect description of something that is extremely satisfying and at the same time extremely unsatisfying, on the one hand mc lives up to the name of the fic and on the other hand the harem completely ruins the story (I like harems but here it is extremely poorly done, it is tedious and annoying but if you like the harem a lot, then... welcome) giving us garbage and meaningless episodes that have nothing to do with the plot, the time jumps are abrupt and the beginning of the story is quite lazy and slow since mc does nothing, it is after a while that the complete satisfaction of revenge against Danzo and Hiruzen arrives, it is orgasmic, mc is extremely rotten and the fic has some elements of comedy and daily life that are somewhat boring and irrelevant. Conclusion: 50/50, on the one hand it is very good and on the other hand it is very bad, everything is at your discretion, I personally recommend it, I am even reading directly from Chinese
Kinda nice .,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,
Opportunities my balls, it was what I believed, a virgin protagonist who only wants to join Akatsuki for Konan, there is nothing more virgin than your decisions becoming based on a girl you don't know personally, how pathetic.
Sinceramente no sé porque se ponen calificaciones tan bajas digo si tiene tendencia de querer conquistar todo lo que se mueve pero por lo menos ya que creció hasta ahora se ve que cambio algo, además me gusta que si cambie algo la historia, aunque sigo sin entender eso de los hijos de danzó y asuma,
Good Fanfic...................................................................................................................................
This text is of historical and literary interest, and judging by the analysis of the auto-translation of the original work made on the basis of the material found, we can conclude that the translator's work is of high quality.
Honestly if you want to read this ff just skip the first four chapters and just know he an orphan he isn’t from a clan and his parents were chinobi, he saved Izmu during the Nine tail incident and become best friends his cheat is a choice based system and his first pick was a technique colled God steps or sum the name doesn’t matter cause it changes every 5 chapters 🤣 but it basically gives him a sage mode more op that the normal one, he also gain Aiden’s zanpakuto but he weak so obly chatter for now and from the title you can see he hates Danzo and Hiruzen
It is more beautiful and elegant writing style want more Chapters mc is doing well with his zanpakuto and his harem I hope the author keeps this pace well
why are there missing chapters?[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
This is good, I almost had a stroke reading the missing chapter, though. Ignore the negative spam review.
O livro é lindo, com uma edição muito bem cuidada. O conteúdo está superando minhas expectativas! Mais uma vez, contar com a LL é garantia de um produto de qualidade! Agradeço!
Pretty good! MC is quite murderous when pushed too far but the humiliation in chapter 60 is hilarious. I kinda wish there was an actual description of "God's Breath" and where it comes from. Unless I just missed it.
...........................................................................one of my best Naruto fanfics........... ..................................................................
IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII NNNNNNNNNEEEEEEEEEEEDDDDDDDDDDDDDD MMMMMMMMMMOOOOOOOOOOORRRRRRRRRRRRRRRREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
So far its a really good fic!!! (till chapter 44) Congrats to the author!! [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
This has to be one of the worst titles/synopsis combo I have seen. I almost skipped it because of how bad it is. It reeks of terrible chinese novel from a mile away but if you give a chance it is pretty good.
Let see how long you can preserve 🤡🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊👺📠📠📠📠📠📠📠🖨️🖨️💳💶💳🧾🖱️🖱️🖱️🖱️🖱️🖱️🖱️🖲️💽🪙🧮🪟🧱🏮🧱🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🪧
This is good man, i was finding a fanfic where mc joins akatsuki and I got one. so what's the MTL??
⣿⣿⣿⣻⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣵⣿⣿⣿⠿⡟⣛⣧⣿⣯⣿⣝⡻⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠋⠁⣴⣶⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣦⣍⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⢷⠄⣾⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣏⢼⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⢹⣿⣿⢻⠎⠔⣛⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡏⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⢸⣿⣿⠇⡶⠄⣿⣿⠿⠟⡛⠛⠻⣿⡿⠿⠿⣿⣗⢣⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⠐⣿⣿⡿⣷⣾⣿⣿⣿⣾⣶⣶⣶⣿⣁⣔⣤⣀⣼⢲⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⠄⣿⣿⣿⣿⣾⣟⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡿⣿⣿⣿⢟⣾⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⠄⣟⣿⣿⣿⡷⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣮⣽⠛⢻⣽⣿⡇⣾⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⠄⢻⣿⣿⣿⡷⠻⢻⡻⣯⣝⢿⣟⣛⣛⣛⠝⢻⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⠄⠸⣿⣿⡟⣹⣦⠄⠋⠻⢿⣶⣶⣶⡾⠃⡂⢾⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⠄⠄⠟⠋⠄⢻⣿⣧⣲⡀⡀⠄⠉⠱⣠⣾⡇⠄⠉⠛⢿⣿⣿⣿ ⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠈⣿⣿⣿⣷⣿⣿⢾⣾⣿⣿⣇⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠉⠉ ⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠸⣿⣿⠟⠃⠄⠄⢈⣻⣿⣿⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄ ⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⢿⣿⣾⣷⡄⠄⢾⣿⣿⣿⡄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄ ⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠸⣿⣿⣿⠃⠄⠈⢿⣿⣿⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄. . 🇷🇺=❤️🔥
TA gucci....,............,............................................,.................................................... ⠄⠄⠄⢰⣧⣼⣯⠄⣸⣠⣶⣶⣦⣾⠄⠄⠄⠄⡀⠄⢀⣿⣿⠄⠄⠄⢸⡇⠄⠄ ⠄⠄⠄⣾⣿⠿⠿⠶⠿⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣦⣤⣄⢀⡅⢠⣾⣛⡉⠄⠄⠄⠸⢀⣿⠄ ⠄⠄⢀⡋⣡⣴⣶⣶⡀⠄⠄⠙⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣴⣿⣿⣿⢃⣤⣄⣀⣥⣿⣿⠄ ⠄⠄⢸⣇⠻⣿⣿⣿⣧⣀⢀⣠⡌⢻⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠿⠿⠿⣿⣿⣿⠄ ⠄⢀⢸⣿⣷⣤⣤⣤⣬⣙⣛⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡿⣿⣿⡍⠄⠄⢀⣤⣄⠉⠋⣰ ⠄⣼⣖⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⢇⣿⣿⡷⠶⠶⢿⣿⣿⠇⢀⣤ ⠘⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣽⣿⣿⣿⡇⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣷⣶⣥⣴⣿⡗ ⢀⠈⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡟⠄ ⢸⣿⣦⣌⣛⣻⣿⣿⣧⠙⠛⠛⡭⠅⠒⠦⠭⣭⡻⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡿⠃⠄ ⠘⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡆⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠹⠈⢋⣽⣿⣿⣿⣿⣵⣾⠃⠄ ⠄⠘⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠄⣴⣿⣶⣄⠄⣴⣶⠄⢀⣾⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠃⠄⠄ ⠄⠄⠈⠻⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡄⢻⣿⣿⣿⠄⣿⣿⡀⣾⣿⣿⣿⣿⣛⠛⠁⠄⠄⠄ ⠄⠄⠄⠄⠈⠛⢿⣿⣿⣿⠁⠞⢿⣿⣿⡄⢿⣿⡇⣸⣿⣿⠿⠛⠁⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄ ⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠉⠻⣿⣿⣾⣦⡙⠻⣷⣾⣿⠃⠿⠋⠁⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⢀⣠⣴ ⣿⣿⣿⣶⣶⣮⣥⣒⠲⢮⣝⡿⣿⣿⡆⣿⡿⠃⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⣠⣴⣿⣿⣿
protagonist quickly becomes powerful, yet not overpowered. he's also pretty smart, willing to put down his pride and act out a play for better results, but is equally as vengeful. yes, there is a harem, pretty extensive too, but not to the extent of Swarm System. the translation has few issues, overall, I'd rate it as basically all you could ask for from an independent translator who's probably just doing this as a hobby. Well done.
this fic is the perfect description of something that is extremely satisfying and at the same time extremely unsatisfying, on the one hand mc lives up to the name of the fic and on the other hand the harem completely ruins the story (I like harems but here it is extremely poorly done, it is tedious and annoying but if you like the harem a lot, then... welcome) giving us garbage and meaningless episodes that have nothing to do with the plot, the time jumps are abrupt and the beginning of the story is quite lazy and slow since mc does nothing, it is after a while that the complete satisfaction of revenge against Danzo and Hiruzen arrives, it is orgasmic, mc is extremely rotten and the fic has some elements of comedy and daily life that are somewhat boring and irrelevant. Conclusion: 50/50, on the one hand it is very good and on the other hand it is very bad, everything is at your discretion, I personally recommend it, I am even reading directly from Chinese
Kinda nice .,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,
Opportunities my balls, it was what I believed, a virgin protagonist who only wants to join Akatsuki for Konan, there is nothing more virgin than your decisions becoming based on a girl you don't know personally, how pathetic.
Sinceramente no sé porque se ponen calificaciones tan bajas digo si tiene tendencia de querer conquistar todo lo que se mueve pero por lo menos ya que creció hasta ahora se ve que cambio algo, además me gusta que si cambie algo la historia, aunque sigo sin entender eso de los hijos de danzó y asuma,
Good Fanfic...................................................................................................................................
This text is of historical and literary interest, and judging by the analysis of the auto-translation of the original work made on the basis of the material found, we can conclude that the translator's work is of high quality.
Honestly if you want to read this ff just skip the first four chapters and just know he an orphan he isn’t from a clan and his parents were chinobi, he saved Izmu during the Nine tail incident and become best friends his cheat is a choice based system and his first pick was a technique colled God steps or sum the name doesn’t matter cause it changes every 5 chapters 🤣 but it basically gives him a sage mode more op that the normal one, he also gain Aiden’s zanpakuto but he weak so obly chatter for now and from the title you can see he hates Danzo and Hiruzen
It is more beautiful and elegant writing style want more Chapters mc is doing well with his zanpakuto and his harem I hope the author keeps this pace well
why are there missing chapters?[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
This is good, I almost had a stroke reading the missing chapter, though. Ignore the negative spam review.
O livro é lindo, com uma edição muito bem cuidada. O conteúdo está superando minhas expectativas! Mais uma vez, contar com a LL é garantia de um produto de qualidade! Agradeço!
Pretty good! MC is quite murderous when pushed too far but the humiliation in chapter 60 is hilarious. I kinda wish there was an actual description of "God's Breath" and where it comes from. Unless I just missed it.
...........................................................................one of my best Naruto fanfics........... ..................................................................
IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII NNNNNNNNNEEEEEEEEEEEDDDDDDDDDDDDDD MMMMMMMMMMOOOOOOOOOOORRRRRRRRRRRRRRRREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
So far its a really good fic!!! (till chapter 44) Congrats to the author!! [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
This has to be one of the worst titles/synopsis combo I have seen. I almost skipped it because of how bad it is. It reeks of terrible chinese novel from a mile away but if you give a chance it is pretty good.
Let see how long you can preserve 🤡🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊🔊👺📠📠📠📠📠📠📠🖨️🖨️💳💶💳🧾🖱️🖱️🖱️🖱️🖱️🖱️🖱️🖲️💽🪙🧮🪟🧱🏮🧱🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🗄️🪧
This is good man, i was finding a fanfic where mc joins akatsuki and I got one. so what's the MTL??
⣿⣿⣿⣻⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣵⣿⣿⣿⠿⡟⣛⣧⣿⣯⣿⣝⡻⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠋⠁⣴⣶⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣦⣍⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⢷⠄⣾⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣏⢼⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⢹⣿⣿⢻⠎⠔⣛⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡏⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⢸⣿⣿⠇⡶⠄⣿⣿⠿⠟⡛⠛⠻⣿⡿⠿⠿⣿⣗⢣⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⠐⣿⣿⡿⣷⣾⣿⣿⣿⣾⣶⣶⣶⣿⣁⣔⣤⣀⣼⢲⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⠄⣿⣿⣿⣿⣾⣟⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡿⣿⣿⣿⢟⣾⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⠄⣟⣿⣿⣿⡷⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣮⣽⠛⢻⣽⣿⡇⣾⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⠄⢻⣿⣿⣿⡷⠻⢻⡻⣯⣝⢿⣟⣛⣛⣛⠝⢻⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⠄⠸⣿⣿⡟⣹⣦⠄⠋⠻⢿⣶⣶⣶⡾⠃⡂⢾⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⠄⠄⠟⠋⠄⢻⣿⣧⣲⡀⡀⠄⠉⠱⣠⣾⡇⠄⠉⠛⢿⣿⣿⣿ ⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠈⣿⣿⣿⣷⣿⣿⢾⣾⣿⣿⣇⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠉⠉ ⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠸⣿⣿⠟⠃⠄⠄⢈⣻⣿⣿⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄ ⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⢿⣿⣾⣷⡄⠄⢾⣿⣿⣿⡄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄ ⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠸⣿⣿⣿⠃⠄⠈⢿⣿⣿⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄. . 🇷🇺=❤️🔥