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your trying to keep off the whole kill all the enemies that a lot of other stories do but the way you did it was way to fast and forced it was like he went instantly to that conclusion it would have been better for him to start it off like that now it just feels disappointing and honestly boring especially in the avatar world like he might be special because of his martial arts but his character won't feel unique and he is honestly boring and uninteresting
I will say this i thought this fanfic will be like the actual martial unity fanfic not like wuxia even then i don't like the mc the story is great but not the main character in terms of attitude he is just like any other standard protagonist
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hopefully update will be frequent. this a great ff. one of the good ones these past few weeks
good story about martial art , the connection to avatar story just few early chapter . after that just grinding level in martial art , slow pace story need to wait for chapter to stack up to read again because till last chapter the MC still a kid 5-6 years old that hunting a bandits.. Good read tough 👍🏻
The story is very interesting and finally someone trying something that is not cannon the only other story that comes close to this one is the madara in the avatar world(forgot the name of the story) it has great potential but no chapter i put a bookmark on it will come back in a month or so but if its only like 10 new chapters then its better to put this next year read list
This story is great . I am loving it. pls update regularly... k;lm;l;m;;m;;m;m;m;;klklklmk klknk nk j j kn k k k kk j jm l kk fv dcv d x
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The first chapter is good, continue the fanfic [img=In a daze][img=Cries][img=Out of it][img=Sigh][img=In a daze][img=Loving it][img=Speechless][img=Mad][img=Relaxed][img=Unalived][img=Mad][img=Sigh]
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your trying to keep off the whole kill all the enemies that a lot of other stories do but the way you did it was way to fast and forced it was like he went instantly to that conclusion it would have been better for him to start it off like that now it just feels disappointing and honestly boring especially in the avatar world like he might be special because of his martial arts but his character won't feel unique and he is honestly boring and uninteresting
I will say this i thought this fanfic will be like the actual martial unity fanfic not like wuxia even then i don't like the mc the story is great but not the main character in terms of attitude he is just like any other standard protagonist
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Ɓbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbggrtyjjhggddrthhjkkucfhjnvfrhhkkiyyvnkiyhjkiyghjkuyhj指环王我有一个我的世界轻小说系统 solo para poner 4 estrellas Ytffhjkkuyttfgvbkkiuyrrygghjjjj
hopefully update will be frequent. this a great ff. one of the good ones these past few weeks
good story about martial art , the connection to avatar story just few early chapter . after that just grinding level in martial art , slow pace story need to wait for chapter to stack up to read again because till last chapter the MC still a kid 5-6 years old that hunting a bandits.. Good read tough 👍🏻
The story is very interesting and finally someone trying something that is not cannon the only other story that comes close to this one is the madara in the avatar world(forgot the name of the story) it has great potential but no chapter i put a bookmark on it will come back in a month or so but if its only like 10 new chapters then its better to put this next year read list
This story is great . I am loving it. pls update regularly... k;lm;l;m;;m;;m;m;m;;klklklmk klknk nk j j kn k k k kk j jm l kk fv dcv d x
No romance with kioshi please No romance with kioshi please No romance with kioshi please No romance with kioshi please No romance with kioshi please No romance with kioshi please No romance with kioshi please No romance with kioshi please No romance with kioshi please
The first chapter is good, continue the fanfic [img=In a daze][img=Cries][img=Out of it][img=Sigh][img=In a daze][img=Loving it][img=Speechless][img=Mad][img=Relaxed][img=Unalived][img=Mad][img=Sigh]
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