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This is a translation so meh i’ll give it 3 stats since the fic itself is not that good
If you want be in the top, should writting more chapter (1 for day or 1 for 2 in 3 days) the history is interesting but the chapters short, chapters more large or add chapters all the days
This is just a translation so dont believe whatever the "Author" is saying. he cant change anything even if you guys give ideas because this isnt even his own work
Moar and is it harem? ..................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
pretty good so far as of chapter 11 hopefully later on you will explain the main characters powers and abilities and not be vague as you're doing currently,
It has great potential can't wait to see more. I like how the MC has to see character use their curse technique before he can actually use them at least for the ten shadows for now and six eye i don't know about blood manipulation yet.
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now that jjk is about to end it would be good to watch fan fictions i hope you do a good job
The synopsis doesn't do this fanfic justice. In fairness there is only a handful of chapters as of right now, but what I've seen so far is worth committing this book to my library. There's some writing errors with improper capitalization and punctuation (and calls Yuji "Torako" in one sentence?), and the humor is not my cup of tea, but those are miniscule issues. The author adapts their concept incredibly well, it's not just some power fantasy where the MC flexes his power on everyone, it's far more subdued and natural. The MC's character is really compelling to follow and is actions are very interesting. The story's pacing is perfect as of right now. Highest review I've given something in a while, keep it up.
This is a translation so meh i’ll give it 3 stats since the fic itself is not that good
If you want be in the top, should writting more chapter (1 for day or 1 for 2 in 3 days) the history is interesting but the chapters short, chapters more large or add chapters all the days
This is just a translation so dont believe whatever the "Author" is saying. he cant change anything even if you guys give ideas because this isnt even his own work
Moar and is it harem? ..................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
pretty good so far as of chapter 11 hopefully later on you will explain the main characters powers and abilities and not be vague as you're doing currently,
It has great potential can't wait to see more. I like how the MC has to see character use their curse technique before he can actually use them at least for the ten shadows for now and six eye i don't know about blood manipulation yet.
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now that jjk is about to end it would be good to watch fan fictions i hope you do a good job
The synopsis doesn't do this fanfic justice. In fairness there is only a handful of chapters as of right now, but what I've seen so far is worth committing this book to my library. There's some writing errors with improper capitalization and punctuation (and calls Yuji "Torako" in one sentence?), and the humor is not my cup of tea, but those are miniscule issues. The author adapts their concept incredibly well, it's not just some power fantasy where the MC flexes his power on everyone, it's far more subdued and natural. The MC's character is really compelling to follow and is actions are very interesting. The story's pacing is perfect as of right now. Highest review I've given something in a while, keep it up.
Mf continue this shit where tf r u huhhhhh