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I didn't like the beginning of the story, but I have to say that it got better. In the last chapters I was really convinced and liked the development of the story as well as the MC. MC doesn't just have the Homelander powers, he's getting stronger which I think is good because otherwise his goal/mission would be hard to achieve.
Not worth losing time for reading, if whoever takes a time to use a little bit of brain power while reading the ff will know that nothing about makes sense.
Greatly improved I’m not going to lie I’m super impressed with the story so far it’s starts of okay but later in the story it looks good great work improvement with the story
Just hand wave anything you want into existence. Then, the author creates new things just to progress the "story". Has no logical connections at all. Small example here. He leaves wherever he starts from, possibly New York( Don't believe it's mentioned) and just so happens to go to Mystic Falls but has no idea about anything Vampire Diaries related. It's literally a small town like any other. Why did he stop here of all places, and you know not one of the 100s of other small towns on the way there? Handwaved because the author said so. Continuity? story flow? That's not needed here.
Five stars anyday, very well-written story. Capturing every aspect of homlander...good and bads. Well-developed story characters explained in really good detail. I love the story, do give it a read.[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I like the Novel Continue This I will send 2 power Stones daily. Don't Drop Like Other's Ok Try To read Other Novel's and Try to not end story too early
The story was beautiful it was well done. I have read so many books on here and yours was just perfect
You are doing something great here man. I like the progress. I only wonder why he is always in conflict with himself and his powers. But overall, MC is chill, I enjoy his emphasis on self control. Please, upload faster.
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The story started nice but at some point it turned from an anti-hero to something dark and not fun to read anymore. I have read till chapter 19 and lost interest when it only focused on the secondary character. I know the author probably wanted to expand his world and not focus only on the MC but for me it felt boring. The grammar was okay though so that and Updating Stability will get five stars from me.
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I thought the first part was good in started going down hill when he got really emo and homelander like. then the story went even more down hill with the oc you used taking not only fore front in the story but being part of the most likely main villian. This is NOT an i have homlander powers in marvel fanfic that was a straight lie. This is a multi crossover with a face lift fanfic and i can smell the chaos coming off this story. I have kinda a big problem when u mix anime and american comics it just doesnt work most of the time unless ur really good. This is just too random and becoming really edgy which is not really what was advertised.
Great potential, good grammar. The story is a good read. Would ask the author to make the chapters longer in exchange for slower updates, makes the reading experience better. Strong advice to keep continuing the story.[img=update]
I don't know how to feel about this. Writitng is good but gives off watpad vibe, I dont understand MC motivation and i don't even know how his power work, It redundant to say he have homelander and new order power when its totally differnt and have limitation and uses thats totally unrelated, More like author is making it up as they go so with each new chapter the setting from last one become useless.
MC is a maniac who want control everything, his powers don't write how work(And i read to 27 chapter and don't understand how work his 2nd power ).
Grammar need alot of work, the story development is not good, the character design could be better, the world background is meh all in all a meh story
my very first story with homelander si that i somewhat liked. i mean i don't like boys series but i always thought of writing an si with homelander powers this one is good.
Ok. Thor here. Writing this review because it is a marvel story. So basically, I can say that this story has high potential. Integration of Homelander in the storyline is also ok. Grammar can be improved but I think since your are an Indian, English isn't your first language. Overall it is a good story. Nice work.
I like this story very much, the mc is also great for an op character not just one dimensional.
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This is a good story, I'm really enjoying it. I'd just like the MC to be less mental, I get that it's probably for character development, but it's slowly becoming tedious to read. I suggest you just have the MC use his reality warping to remove all mental illness/ mental problems from himself since you've shown he's able to use it on himself.
its a good story so far with definite emotional depth that mc's in stories don't really have and there's also emotional depth to the other character shown so far. The mc is not the perfect being with no problems and I assume will get character development from the way it's going, and character development is always the best in a story otherwise it gets bland with no mental and emotional growth so expect that. The mc has good powers, op as well which is what you look for in this pic and also knows how to use his powers well not like most of the idiotic op mc's out there where the author can't use the powers correctly. Updates are extremely consistent. The world background is marvel with mutants and the whole of it with maybe even potential mini crossovers that I'm seeing, nothing major though so it doesn't ruin the story. overall, a good story so far and looking forward to more.
the mc is not homelander power wise. theres more but I don't like complaining, maybethe author can improve.
Id personally like to see the MC more human dont mind him having new order as long as the hard limits are there. i think a chapter on the long term goal would be a good idea. Shows more empathy also. There are a bunch of story lines you could do like recruiting the fantastic 4 to the eventual team if they exist. the more he devlops this heroic persona maybe he could start to realise oh shit the world is really starting to see me as this symbol. Like superman in the past has shown that people are relying on me to protect them how am i going to do that. if you do go through the process of recruits maybe make it clear what type of people he is looking for I don't recommend pulling a justice league and just recruiting everyone. Like dont just recruit all the X-Men have characteric requirements. overall i dont think its bad i just think him being like oh i should give back to the world the least i can do is protect it now i have these power is a good idea if you follow through with the idea of oh people are now seeing me as there symbol of hope type thing i cant abandon this.
The story is a good idea, I like the sound of someone with Homelanders abilities and New Order but the MCs actions after the plane jacking incident have felt a bit whimsical. Personally I'd like to see him with a bit more empathy and not trying to control everything and set a goal for how he actually wants to live this life. He said previously he didn't want to see those children tortured and didn't want to become Homelander but he seems to be drifting further down the rabbit hole making me think the Villain tag should be there. 👀 That said in the recent chapter he seems to have noticed this and hopefully will change now. 👀 His public appearance in front of people and helping them was a good touch though, I enjoyed those chapters.
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Wrote It when i got an Idea. Seems like it is headed towards great Succes. Though I irge you to check my other stories they're different from this one but great stories ive poured my heart into nonetheless.
I didn't like the beginning of the story, but I have to say that it got better. In the last chapters I was really convinced and liked the development of the story as well as the MC. MC doesn't just have the Homelander powers, he's getting stronger which I think is good because otherwise his goal/mission would be hard to achieve.
Not worth losing time for reading, if whoever takes a time to use a little bit of brain power while reading the ff will know that nothing about makes sense.
Greatly improved I’m not going to lie I’m super impressed with the story so far it’s starts of okay but later in the story it looks good great work improvement with the story
Just hand wave anything you want into existence. Then, the author creates new things just to progress the "story". Has no logical connections at all. Small example here. He leaves wherever he starts from, possibly New York( Don't believe it's mentioned) and just so happens to go to Mystic Falls but has no idea about anything Vampire Diaries related. It's literally a small town like any other. Why did he stop here of all places, and you know not one of the 100s of other small towns on the way there? Handwaved because the author said so. Continuity? story flow? That's not needed here.
Five stars anyday, very well-written story. Capturing every aspect of homlander...good and bads. Well-developed story characters explained in really good detail. I love the story, do give it a read.[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I like the Novel Continue This I will send 2 power Stones daily. Don't Drop Like Other's Ok Try To read Other Novel's and Try to not end story too early
The story was beautiful it was well done. I have read so many books on here and yours was just perfect
You are doing something great here man. I like the progress. I only wonder why he is always in conflict with himself and his powers. But overall, MC is chill, I enjoy his emphasis on self control. Please, upload faster.
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The story started nice but at some point it turned from an anti-hero to something dark and not fun to read anymore. I have read till chapter 19 and lost interest when it only focused on the secondary character. I know the author probably wanted to expand his world and not focus only on the MC but for me it felt boring. The grammar was okay though so that and Updating Stability will get five stars from me.
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揭示劇透 I thought the first part was good in started going down hill when he got really emo and homelander like. then the story went even more down hill with the oc you used taking not only fore front in the story but being part of the most likely main villian. This is NOT an i have homlander powers in marvel fanfic that was a straight lie. This is a multi crossover with a face lift fanfic and i can smell the chaos coming off this story. I have kinda a big problem when u mix anime and american comics it just doesnt work most of the time unless ur really good. This is just too random and becoming really edgy which is not really what was advertised.
Great potential, good grammar. The story is a good read. Would ask the author to make the chapters longer in exchange for slower updates, makes the reading experience better. Strong advice to keep continuing the story.[img=update]
I don't know how to feel about this. Writitng is good but gives off watpad vibe, I dont understand MC motivation and i don't even know how his power work, It redundant to say he have homelander and new order power when its totally differnt and have limitation and uses thats totally unrelated, More like author is making it up as they go so with each new chapter the setting from last one become useless.
MC is a maniac who want control everything, his powers don't write how work(And i read to 27 chapter and don't understand how work his 2nd power ).
Grammar need alot of work, the story development is not good, the character design could be better, the world background is meh all in all a meh story
my very first story with homelander si that i somewhat liked. i mean i don't like boys series but i always thought of writing an si with homelander powers this one is good.
Ok. Thor here. Writing this review because it is a marvel story. So basically, I can say that this story has high potential. Integration of Homelander in the storyline is also ok. Grammar can be improved but I think since your are an Indian, English isn't your first language. Overall it is a good story. Nice work.
I like this story very much, the mc is also great for an op character not just one dimensional.
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This is a good story, I'm really enjoying it. I'd just like the MC to be less mental, I get that it's probably for character development, but it's slowly becoming tedious to read. I suggest you just have the MC use his reality warping to remove all mental illness/ mental problems from himself since you've shown he's able to use it on himself.
its a good story so far with definite emotional depth that mc's in stories don't really have and there's also emotional depth to the other character shown so far. The mc is not the perfect being with no problems and I assume will get character development from the way it's going, and character development is always the best in a story otherwise it gets bland with no mental and emotional growth so expect that. The mc has good powers, op as well which is what you look for in this pic and also knows how to use his powers well not like most of the idiotic op mc's out there where the author can't use the powers correctly. Updates are extremely consistent. The world background is marvel with mutants and the whole of it with maybe even potential mini crossovers that I'm seeing, nothing major though so it doesn't ruin the story. overall, a good story so far and looking forward to more.
the mc is not homelander power wise. theres more but I don't like complaining, maybethe author can improve.
Id personally like to see the MC more human dont mind him having new order as long as the hard limits are there. i think a chapter on the long term goal would be a good idea. Shows more empathy also. There are a bunch of story lines you could do like recruiting the fantastic 4 to the eventual team if they exist. the more he devlops this heroic persona maybe he could start to realise oh shit the world is really starting to see me as this symbol. Like superman in the past has shown that people are relying on me to protect them how am i going to do that. if you do go through the process of recruits maybe make it clear what type of people he is looking for I don't recommend pulling a justice league and just recruiting everyone. Like dont just recruit all the X-Men have characteric requirements. overall i dont think its bad i just think him being like oh i should give back to the world the least i can do is protect it now i have these power is a good idea if you follow through with the idea of oh people are now seeing me as there symbol of hope type thing i cant abandon this.
The story is a good idea, I like the sound of someone with Homelanders abilities and New Order but the MCs actions after the plane jacking incident have felt a bit whimsical. Personally I'd like to see him with a bit more empathy and not trying to control everything and set a goal for how he actually wants to live this life. He said previously he didn't want to see those children tortured and didn't want to become Homelander but he seems to be drifting further down the rabbit hole making me think the Villain tag should be there. 👀 That said in the recent chapter he seems to have noticed this and hopefully will change now. 👀 His public appearance in front of people and helping them was a good touch though, I enjoyed those chapters.
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Wrote It when i got an Idea. Seems like it is headed towards great Succes. Though I irge you to check my other stories they're different from this one but great stories ive poured my heart into nonetheless.