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The story looks good, but the name changes make it wierd to read and try to guess whow is the character that is speaking or is being talked to. I will bookmark it, but probably only read after a re-write that fixes what i said before.
Please go through it and fix it please this fiction has potential but it really needs to be fixed
Was not able to get through the first chapter what shite is this? Is this just machine translation from Ping Pong because it is not chinese translation
The story looks good, but the name changes make it wierd to read and try to guess whow is the character that is speaking or is being talked to. I will bookmark it, but probably only read after a re-write that fixes what i said before.
Please go through it and fix it please this fiction has potential but it really needs to be fixed
Was not able to get through the first chapter what shite is this? Is this just machine translation from Ping Pong because it is not chinese translation