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worst same ending as canon mc is not needed in this story at all and daemon's marriage happened at 97 ac the year rhaenyra born. The reason we read fan fiction in the first place is we are not satisfied with original version.
This is peak. Absolute fanfic. Thank you Mr. Author for creating this masterpiece👏👏👏
I understand the criticisms and even support some of them. Still, the story is entertaining, immersive and realistic... In the sense that the main character is a HoTD character and not a modern SI. Anyway, I found it to be a good story, very varied with very well constructed scenes that really excite and sadden, that's why I really liked the story, I would give it 5 stars but I'm sorry, Rhaenys died, I won't say anything else about it.
One of the best asoiaf story’s on here if you’ve read cornbearers work you love this one. I usually don’t review stories but I felt I’d be doing this a disservice if I didn’t if your thinking of reading this and see my review it’s a definite read
Writing Quality: 5 Stars It's one of the best HOTD fiction I've read. A lot of people who rate this novel low genuinely doesn’t have taste. The MC is not the usual perfectionist or young master MC that people read to make themselves feel better because they can't make their parents proud. But he is a character with flaws and weaknesses. The MC is the greatest warrior to have ever lived in the lore of ASOIAF, which the author has integrated well. In which the quality of the story shows. Also, the fact that it connects to the author other story, "The Black Lord," is very cool and shows how well the author connects the verses. Story Development: 5 Stars The author gets this right in a way that I've seen people rarely do. The MC at the start is a child, and he grows conflicted in terms of the sides and the risks he has to take in the dance. Every challenge he is put into isn't easy. He is the strongest warrior, but he has weaknesses and flaws and tries to overcome them. We see the MC go from an honorable person to someone who is willing to do anything to get his Rhaenyra on the throne. He follows his oath and absolutely destroys the Greens. He is the strongest in all of the world and all time in the world of ASOIAF in this fiction. Character Design: 5 Stars Its very descriptive and we already know what most of the people look like in the world of HOTD. Update Stability: 5 Stars This novel has been completed but before it was updating frequently but the author took some breaks and that's fine. World Background: 5 Stars We all know the world of ASOIAF, but the author manages to capture the political and other landscapes well. The way he describes the world and interactions with it really is a masterpiece.
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Mc is a cuckhold and submissive with 3 bastard children with no ambitions. His wife wants the throne not him, he’s just going along and is fighting for the throne for his cucked children to sit on. The mc is not a self insert or reincarnated or transmigrated? (If you don’t remember the plot I consider it basically an original native character) Just a beta AU character that does little to change the story. If he’s not going to be special in any way besides forced plot armor might as well make the story timeline interesting, but the plot is basically the same. What’s the point of the character?
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Continue, I liked your style and organization of events. In my opinion, this is the best Game of Thrones story. What I liked most is your continuous uploading of chapters and not delaying the upload. I hope you continue and do not stop or rush the end.
*Spanish message*: Señor autor, me quedé esperando su respuesta en el capítulo "visión II", sobre el destino del primogénito del la reina, rhaenyra targaryen.
Simply the best hotd fanfic I've ever read, don't be in a rush to read the work, as its construction is slow and gradual so just enjoy[img=In a daze][img=In a daze][img=In a daze][img=In a daze][img=In a daze][img=In a daze][img=In a daze][img=In a daze]
started out good with an interesting character but turns to shit when he marrys rhaenyra
It is NOT another isekai reincarnation, interest story plot some might say mc is placing daemon and maybe true in some things but not completely. MC personality is much more realistic, Best part about it regular updates. what i didnt like is daemon's personality he is shown stupid and someone who can be manipulated my some witch or unknown person.
"The story is great, but I have one doubt: who is the father of Queen Rhaenyra Targaryen's first three children?"
I will say that the concept of the story is wonderful and the writer is doing well, but I find MC very submissive at the beginning of the story. He accepts everything without objection. He seems like a puppet that they give instructions to. But what really disappointed me was Damon and how he killed his mother, and then he comes back and tells the hero that he is sorry, and so on. This is nonsense, and MC is like an idiot after 16. A year gives him a scar and we are done. The writer did not leave room for the hero to know the true story, as no one knows how she really died. This is what disappointed me, even though the writer was very good.
The biggest problem with the story is the main character. He has no purpose other than to obey others and in most cases he is useless.
The best, HOTD ff around. Thanks for dishing out chapters at the rat you do author nim.
The story has a few time jumps tht may seem odd but necessary to the overall enjoyment, while the MC is dull at first, as the story progress you can see his personality and inner struggle between Nature and upbringing. Finally not many like an "ambitionless" protagonist, specially on a GoT setting x however I disagree, is refreshing to see someone who's ambition doesn't revolve around the "I'll be the new conqueror" Kingdom building that we are used to see in this type of stories (so far as ch 64.) instead his ambition is about duty and family.
so far everything is great, mc is well written, characters are well rounded, and the fight scenes well get your heart racing. keep going strong mister author
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A good story. The Protagonist is very likable and skilled. The story and writing is great I felt very immersed into it. This story if chapters are released daily could grow and be one of the best HOTD stories ever.
Really good novel to be honest.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!![img=recommend]
mc is the most pathetic character ever written he has no dream, ambition, or any future planning he is simply following people command with no objection he simply feels like a dog who is carving for his owners attention I don't recommend for people to read this thrash
a awesome read highly recommend i enjoy the beef between father and son but as well as the longing the author portrays this difficult relationship exceptionally well for those who have had a parent walk out on them understand the feeling of wanting to meet that person but so have animosity for them leaving
the story feels lackluster not because of the writing but because of mc himself it feels like mc is just moving and attaching itself with anyone he is ordered too he should have just created another force for the throne ik it feels pretty overused but it is better than this again i dont hate author i just feel this story is lackluster conpared to other fanfics
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This story is amazing. Despite the time jumps and the lack of some scenes that would have been nice to see, this story is easily one of my favorites so far. Keep going, good stories are hard to find these days.
MC and story started good and interesting but then there was some weird OC black magic which completely ruins the story.
worst same ending as canon mc is not needed in this story at all and daemon's marriage happened at 97 ac the year rhaenyra born. The reason we read fan fiction in the first place is we are not satisfied with original version.
This is peak. Absolute fanfic. Thank you Mr. Author for creating this masterpiece👏👏👏
I understand the criticisms and even support some of them. Still, the story is entertaining, immersive and realistic... In the sense that the main character is a HoTD character and not a modern SI. Anyway, I found it to be a good story, very varied with very well constructed scenes that really excite and sadden, that's why I really liked the story, I would give it 5 stars but I'm sorry, Rhaenys died, I won't say anything else about it.
One of the best asoiaf story’s on here if you’ve read cornbearers work you love this one. I usually don’t review stories but I felt I’d be doing this a disservice if I didn’t if your thinking of reading this and see my review it’s a definite read
Writing Quality: 5 Stars It's one of the best HOTD fiction I've read. A lot of people who rate this novel low genuinely doesn’t have taste. The MC is not the usual perfectionist or young master MC that people read to make themselves feel better because they can't make their parents proud. But he is a character with flaws and weaknesses. The MC is the greatest warrior to have ever lived in the lore of ASOIAF, which the author has integrated well. In which the quality of the story shows. Also, the fact that it connects to the author other story, "The Black Lord," is very cool and shows how well the author connects the verses. Story Development: 5 Stars The author gets this right in a way that I've seen people rarely do. The MC at the start is a child, and he grows conflicted in terms of the sides and the risks he has to take in the dance. Every challenge he is put into isn't easy. He is the strongest warrior, but he has weaknesses and flaws and tries to overcome them. We see the MC go from an honorable person to someone who is willing to do anything to get his Rhaenyra on the throne. He follows his oath and absolutely destroys the Greens. He is the strongest in all of the world and all time in the world of ASOIAF in this fiction. Character Design: 5 Stars Its very descriptive and we already know what most of the people look like in the world of HOTD. Update Stability: 5 Stars This novel has been completed but before it was updating frequently but the author took some breaks and that's fine. World Background: 5 Stars We all know the world of ASOIAF, but the author manages to capture the political and other landscapes well. The way he describes the world and interactions with it really is a masterpiece.
揭示劇透 Mc is a cuckhold and submissive with 3 bastard children with no ambitions. His wife wants the throne not him, he’s just going along and is fighting for the throne for his cucked children to sit on. The mc is not a self insert or reincarnated or transmigrated? (If you don’t remember the plot I consider it basically an original native character) Just a beta AU character that does little to change the story. If he’s not going to be special in any way besides forced plot armor might as well make the story timeline interesting, but the plot is basically the same. What’s the point of the character?
揭示劇透 Continue, I liked your style and organization of events. In my opinion, this is the best Game of Thrones story. What I liked most is your continuous uploading of chapters and not delaying the upload. I hope you continue and do not stop or rush the end.
*Spanish message*: Señor autor, me quedé esperando su respuesta en el capítulo "visión II", sobre el destino del primogénito del la reina, rhaenyra targaryen.
Simply the best hotd fanfic I've ever read, don't be in a rush to read the work, as its construction is slow and gradual so just enjoy[img=In a daze][img=In a daze][img=In a daze][img=In a daze][img=In a daze][img=In a daze][img=In a daze][img=In a daze]
started out good with an interesting character but turns to shit when he marrys rhaenyra
It is NOT another isekai reincarnation, interest story plot some might say mc is placing daemon and maybe true in some things but not completely. MC personality is much more realistic, Best part about it regular updates. what i didnt like is daemon's personality he is shown stupid and someone who can be manipulated my some witch or unknown person.
"The story is great, but I have one doubt: who is the father of Queen Rhaenyra Targaryen's first three children?"
I will say that the concept of the story is wonderful and the writer is doing well, but I find MC very submissive at the beginning of the story. He accepts everything without objection. He seems like a puppet that they give instructions to. But what really disappointed me was Damon and how he killed his mother, and then he comes back and tells the hero that he is sorry, and so on. This is nonsense, and MC is like an idiot after 16. A year gives him a scar and we are done. The writer did not leave room for the hero to know the true story, as no one knows how she really died. This is what disappointed me, even though the writer was very good.
The biggest problem with the story is the main character. He has no purpose other than to obey others and in most cases he is useless.
The best, HOTD ff around. Thanks for dishing out chapters at the rat you do author nim.
The story has a few time jumps tht may seem odd but necessary to the overall enjoyment, while the MC is dull at first, as the story progress you can see his personality and inner struggle between Nature and upbringing. Finally not many like an "ambitionless" protagonist, specially on a GoT setting x however I disagree, is refreshing to see someone who's ambition doesn't revolve around the "I'll be the new conqueror" Kingdom building that we are used to see in this type of stories (so far as ch 64.) instead his ambition is about duty and family.
so far everything is great, mc is well written, characters are well rounded, and the fight scenes well get your heart racing. keep going strong mister author
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A good story. The Protagonist is very likable and skilled. The story and writing is great I felt very immersed into it. This story if chapters are released daily could grow and be one of the best HOTD stories ever.
Really good novel to be honest.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!![img=recommend]
mc is the most pathetic character ever written he has no dream, ambition, or any future planning he is simply following people command with no objection he simply feels like a dog who is carving for his owners attention I don't recommend for people to read this thrash
a awesome read highly recommend i enjoy the beef between father and son but as well as the longing the author portrays this difficult relationship exceptionally well for those who have had a parent walk out on them understand the feeling of wanting to meet that person but so have animosity for them leaving
the story feels lackluster not because of the writing but because of mc himself it feels like mc is just moving and attaching itself with anyone he is ordered too he should have just created another force for the throne ik it feels pretty overused but it is better than this again i dont hate author i just feel this story is lackluster conpared to other fanfics
揭示劇透 This story is amazing. Despite the time jumps and the lack of some scenes that would have been nice to see, this story is easily one of my favorites so far. Keep going, good stories are hard to find these days.
MC and story started good and interesting but then there was some weird OC black magic which completely ruins the story.