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The story idea is good. The only downside is the constant errors. From mixing words up (eg: unsullied is changed to flawless mid paragraph) and changing character’s names mid paragraph. Execution needs a bit of work. Otherwise the idea is good.
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ni bueno ni mala solo tengo un problema. el autor es gay (no tengo nada encontra de los gay ) o es mujer, porque, por su fanatismo por Jon snow( por poco y vuelve gay al MC) y su odio/repudio por dayniras, nose como se escribe. lo demás esta bien aunque la actitud del prota con las mujeres es mm.. no se como explicarlo (creo qué a hora envés de gay o mujer el autor es misogino)
Basically a bad MC done right. He's not an untracked coward, he's not a border lord, and he's still human enough to understand. Sometimes you hate Damien, sometimes you love him. The hero Westeros might need but would never ask for. All in all, a great read, with hilarious outtakes signed by the author sprinkled in for good measure.
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İf he is not stuck with beign jons loyal dog in the future.This story is very exciting for me
The story idea is good. The only downside is the constant errors. From mixing words up (eg: unsullied is changed to flawless mid paragraph) and changing character’s names mid paragraph. Execution needs a bit of work. Otherwise the idea is good.
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ni bueno ni mala solo tengo un problema. el autor es gay (no tengo nada encontra de los gay ) o es mujer, porque, por su fanatismo por Jon snow( por poco y vuelve gay al MC) y su odio/repudio por dayniras, nose como se escribe. lo demás esta bien aunque la actitud del prota con las mujeres es mm.. no se como explicarlo (creo qué a hora envés de gay o mujer el autor es misogino)
Basically a bad MC done right. He's not an untracked coward, he's not a border lord, and he's still human enough to understand. Sometimes you hate Damien, sometimes you love him. The hero Westeros might need but would never ask for. All in all, a great read, with hilarious outtakes signed by the author sprinkled in for good measure.
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İf he is not stuck with beign jons loyal dog in the future.This story is very exciting for me
200 gems for an extra chapter.