49評論
3.72
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
與他人分享您的想法
寫檢討
Buddy has the chance to get the otsutsuki Bloodline and doesn’t take it… immortality? Nah I didn’t get enough oxygen at birth >MC.
Story ist wierd.... At First He almost lost to Sasuke in the chunin Exam and the Readers didn't Like how He randomly buffed Sasuke to keep Up with a quite powerful MC(even thought He still barly wins His Fights...) so now It Fells Like He (author) is overreacting so He Just pretty much Had the MC wipe the floor with danzo and leaves the Village bcs there ist nothing for him to get stronger. Fells all kinda forced edgelord Style.
揭示劇透
it’s like you just put character with ten shadow in Naruto’s plot, and it’s like self-fulfillment story too, with how suddenly have a system then give him aspect from losing opponents, that part is fine, but don’t you think how you shape is sound too convinient? and also how skewed you make JJK Ability Scale is in naruto’s setting like Tsunade punch can obliterate mountains, then Mahoraga can tank that? without his adaptation? sure if you want to glaze mahoraga that much then Great Ox knocking away Urashiki? Alien Consuming Planet’s life Energy who can hoping dimension? and blackflash damaging the same guy?
you know there's always bound to be some negative comments in every story when they aren't to some people's likings but I can say with absolute certainty that for this story... they are all justified. it's not even a story... it feels like a report or something like, this happened and that happened and I will do this, things like that. the interactions are cringe, the romance is forced and the ideas are just downright ridiculous. If this author were to write the fight between Sukuna and Gojo, it would have probably taken him one chapter to finish.
L'histoire et bonne y'a une bonne écriture il respecte le l'aure et la personnalité des perço le seul défaut pour moi ses la longueur des chapitre qui est extrêmement court ses abusif.
the character is actually using the ten shadows to its fullest ability and not only relying on maharaga finally i hate when people dont realise how versatile is the ten shadows
incredible, a great story, very entertaining, the protagonist is good, the story develops at a good pace and is not just another one of the bunch, keep it up author :D.
too bad , this had potential but his first c rank mission is pure forced plot , idiotic decision making and honestly pure bullshit conclusion as the author completely distorted reality to make it end that way.
Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss
揭示劇透
So far so good don't see any manor problems work it, keep ur jobs done and stay healty and please dont drop this fate fic like before again!
Entertaining read, you should try reading this naruto ff and stop reading comments/reviews. Trust me [img=Feeling it]
I gotta the author really improved their writing on this fiction compared to the Minato one. The characters feel engaging and fun, the fights also fun and I can feel the Mc impact on the story. oh, but the romance still bad and cringe though, if the romance could improve or just get scrap, the story would be much better.
Well its alright, though each chapters are quite short but the update rate made up for it, i also dont like how he got the sharingan, it would make things weirder in the story
揭示劇透
Author has a habit to repeat the same thing again and again to the point it is irritating. He extends the story for no reason, after saying this fight is going to end he goes on to write 13 more chapters. And it had the overused sharingan plot
Actually if you were to give him the ten shadow technique, you could have modified them more to suit the Naruto world, full application & potential of this technique has not been revealed in JJK, so you could have created your own version. For eg - Ten Shadows Technique: Using shadows as an intermediary, this technique allows the user to summon ten different shikigami. One can store things or people in shadows, use shadows to manipulate others, can bind other's soul with shadows to create shikigami. Use shadows to exchange places or injuries. One fuse with shadows to gain their strength and abilities. One can also fuse multiple shadows together to create a chimera beast. One can also seal others in shadow & absorb their energies via shadows. 1. Twin Dogs : Wind - Can ride winds & create storms. 2. Snake : Earth - Can Phase through anything, petrify others and control gravity. 3. Toad : Poison - Their tongues can stretch to a very long distances very fast (eg- divine spear from bleach), they can secrete many types of poisons, and jump at long distances. 4. Deer : Heal - Deer can heal any injury, trauma or purify any negative effect. It can also boost others powers. 5. Rabbit : Fire - It can create copies of itself, the copies can expode and generate huge heat, the rabbits can move very fast & size of explosion depends on the amount of energy given to the copy. huge energy, huge rabbit, huge explosion. 6. Elephant : Water - can control water and shoot fast streams of water which can cut diamonds, it is very heavy, and can absorb attacks & shocks via water. 7. Bull : Physical - Has huge strength, can crush anything, can create shockwaves, and It can only move in a straight line, but the longer its charge, the more powerful it is. 8. Tiger : Spiritual - Can create illusions & nightmares. Can attack mind and soul. Can read someones mind & thoughts. 9. Nue : Thunder - Can take others to fly, create and unleash lightning attacks, launch feathers as knives, can use wings as a shield & has powerful eyesight. 10. Mahoraga : Evolution - It is the most powerful shikigami available to be summoned. It is armed with the Sword of Extermination (can purify others), as well as the ability to adapt to any and all phenomena. MC can acquire the ability of his summons - • Dogs - Sensitive nose, Sharp claws & fangs • Snake - Flexible Body, heat sense & petrification gaze • Toad - frog tongue, enhanced jumps & poison • Deer - healing, boosting & purification abilities • Rabbit - enhanced speed, clones & explosion • Elephant - water control • Bull - brute force • Tiger - mental attacks • Nue - lightning control, can shoot hair like needles • Mahoraga - can adapt & evolve continuously Powerbof jiraya, tsunade, orochimaru, kiba & itachi, with Mahoraga being his ticket to six paths, imagine him evolving to six paths while fighting six paths madara.
......................................................................................................................................................
A história é bastante interessante, eu recomendaria focar na quantidade enorme de combinações para os Shikigamis e tentar usar o conceito de invocação parcial, como invocar só as asas do Nue para voar, a língua do Sapo como um chicote e até o uso das habilidades das invocações pelo próprio usuário
hmmm good needs a bit more work .....................................................................................................................
This is good, and I like it. Everything about the story is good, but I don't like how Hinata likes Shika and forgets about Naruto, whom she should have liked for years. Once again, I like this book a lot. Take this as constructive criticism. Other than that, I love the book. Thank you for writing it!
揭示劇透
Good writing with a lot of smarts, you can tell especially with the fights because they are so good. I also like the MC a lot. Very recommendable.
man i just loved it only because sasuke and shaku fight which is captivating yo read
Este fanfic es una joya. Un fanfic que captura la esencia de Naruto con giros originales de jujutsu kaisen , buen desarrollo de personajes y una trama atrapante. Ideal para fans del manga.
Nunca he dado una reseña mi opinión espero le sirva a alguien la historia en si tenía una muy buena idea pero los capítulos se alargan innecesariamente no avanza nada y te aburre a la mitad alomejor me equivoco por que no la termine pero en general se me hizo aburrida y una perdida de tiempo pero si lo que buscas es una historia para matar el tiempo lo más probable es que te guste la abandone en el capítulo 65 gracias por leer.
buen comienzo pero es absurdo como hace una misión de rango c y acaba en asuntos de orochimaru y luego hace otra misión de rango c y acaba en el problema de la pelicular del país de la nieve y se hace el héroe intentando salvar a la princesa cuando en la pelicular lo lograron con mucha ayuda de kakashi pero este gennin lo hace solo es absurdo
Great novel! Why does this fanfic score 3.5, while others are 4 or higher? Give this book a shot, and you will not regret it! This was my last comment on this fanfic. But in 15 chapters or less, the author succeeds in making me lose interest in this. The problem is forcing the story
Buddy has the chance to get the otsutsuki Bloodline and doesn’t take it… immortality? Nah I didn’t get enough oxygen at birth >MC.
Story ist wierd.... At First He almost lost to Sasuke in the chunin Exam and the Readers didn't Like how He randomly buffed Sasuke to keep Up with a quite powerful MC(even thought He still barly wins His Fights...) so now It Fells Like He (author) is overreacting so He Just pretty much Had the MC wipe the floor with danzo and leaves the Village bcs there ist nothing for him to get stronger. Fells all kinda forced edgelord Style.
揭示劇透 it’s like you just put character with ten shadow in Naruto’s plot, and it’s like self-fulfillment story too, with how suddenly have a system then give him aspect from losing opponents, that part is fine, but don’t you think how you shape is sound too convinient? and also how skewed you make JJK Ability Scale is in naruto’s setting like Tsunade punch can obliterate mountains, then Mahoraga can tank that? without his adaptation? sure if you want to glaze mahoraga that much then Great Ox knocking away Urashiki? Alien Consuming Planet’s life Energy who can hoping dimension? and blackflash damaging the same guy?
you know there's always bound to be some negative comments in every story when they aren't to some people's likings but I can say with absolute certainty that for this story... they are all justified. it's not even a story... it feels like a report or something like, this happened and that happened and I will do this, things like that. the interactions are cringe, the romance is forced and the ideas are just downright ridiculous. If this author were to write the fight between Sukuna and Gojo, it would have probably taken him one chapter to finish.
L'histoire et bonne y'a une bonne écriture il respecte le l'aure et la personnalité des perço le seul défaut pour moi ses la longueur des chapitre qui est extrêmement court ses abusif.
the character is actually using the ten shadows to its fullest ability and not only relying on maharaga finally i hate when people dont realise how versatile is the ten shadows
incredible, a great story, very entertaining, the protagonist is good, the story develops at a good pace and is not just another one of the bunch, keep it up author :D.
too bad , this had potential but his first c rank mission is pure forced plot , idiotic decision making and honestly pure bullshit conclusion as the author completely distorted reality to make it end that way.
Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss Deredredssss
揭示劇透 So far so good don't see any manor problems work it, keep ur jobs done and stay healty and please dont drop this fate fic like before again!
Entertaining read, you should try reading this naruto ff and stop reading comments/reviews. Trust me [img=Feeling it]
I gotta the author really improved their writing on this fiction compared to the Minato one. The characters feel engaging and fun, the fights also fun and I can feel the Mc impact on the story. oh, but the romance still bad and cringe though, if the romance could improve or just get scrap, the story would be much better.
Well its alright, though each chapters are quite short but the update rate made up for it, i also dont like how he got the sharingan, it would make things weirder in the story
揭示劇透 Author has a habit to repeat the same thing again and again to the point it is irritating. He extends the story for no reason, after saying this fight is going to end he goes on to write 13 more chapters. And it had the overused sharingan plot
Actually if you were to give him the ten shadow technique, you could have modified them more to suit the Naruto world, full application & potential of this technique has not been revealed in JJK, so you could have created your own version. For eg - Ten Shadows Technique: Using shadows as an intermediary, this technique allows the user to summon ten different shikigami. One can store things or people in shadows, use shadows to manipulate others, can bind other's soul with shadows to create shikigami. Use shadows to exchange places or injuries. One fuse with shadows to gain their strength and abilities. One can also fuse multiple shadows together to create a chimera beast. One can also seal others in shadow & absorb their energies via shadows. 1. Twin Dogs : Wind - Can ride winds & create storms. 2. Snake : Earth - Can Phase through anything, petrify others and control gravity. 3. Toad : Poison - Their tongues can stretch to a very long distances very fast (eg- divine spear from bleach), they can secrete many types of poisons, and jump at long distances. 4. Deer : Heal - Deer can heal any injury, trauma or purify any negative effect. It can also boost others powers. 5. Rabbit : Fire - It can create copies of itself, the copies can expode and generate huge heat, the rabbits can move very fast & size of explosion depends on the amount of energy given to the copy. huge energy, huge rabbit, huge explosion. 6. Elephant : Water - can control water and shoot fast streams of water which can cut diamonds, it is very heavy, and can absorb attacks & shocks via water. 7. Bull : Physical - Has huge strength, can crush anything, can create shockwaves, and It can only move in a straight line, but the longer its charge, the more powerful it is. 8. Tiger : Spiritual - Can create illusions & nightmares. Can attack mind and soul. Can read someones mind & thoughts. 9. Nue : Thunder - Can take others to fly, create and unleash lightning attacks, launch feathers as knives, can use wings as a shield & has powerful eyesight. 10. Mahoraga : Evolution - It is the most powerful shikigami available to be summoned. It is armed with the Sword of Extermination (can purify others), as well as the ability to adapt to any and all phenomena. MC can acquire the ability of his summons - • Dogs - Sensitive nose, Sharp claws & fangs • Snake - Flexible Body, heat sense & petrification gaze • Toad - frog tongue, enhanced jumps & poison • Deer - healing, boosting & purification abilities • Rabbit - enhanced speed, clones & explosion • Elephant - water control • Bull - brute force • Tiger - mental attacks • Nue - lightning control, can shoot hair like needles • Mahoraga - can adapt & evolve continuously Powerbof jiraya, tsunade, orochimaru, kiba & itachi, with Mahoraga being his ticket to six paths, imagine him evolving to six paths while fighting six paths madara.
......................................................................................................................................................
A história é bastante interessante, eu recomendaria focar na quantidade enorme de combinações para os Shikigamis e tentar usar o conceito de invocação parcial, como invocar só as asas do Nue para voar, a língua do Sapo como um chicote e até o uso das habilidades das invocações pelo próprio usuário
hmmm good needs a bit more work .....................................................................................................................
This is good, and I like it. Everything about the story is good, but I don't like how Hinata likes Shika and forgets about Naruto, whom she should have liked for years. Once again, I like this book a lot. Take this as constructive criticism. Other than that, I love the book. Thank you for writing it!
揭示劇透 Good writing with a lot of smarts, you can tell especially with the fights because they are so good. I also like the MC a lot. Very recommendable.
man i just loved it only because sasuke and shaku fight which is captivating yo read
Este fanfic es una joya. Un fanfic que captura la esencia de Naruto con giros originales de jujutsu kaisen , buen desarrollo de personajes y una trama atrapante. Ideal para fans del manga.
Nunca he dado una reseña mi opinión espero le sirva a alguien la historia en si tenía una muy buena idea pero los capítulos se alargan innecesariamente no avanza nada y te aburre a la mitad alomejor me equivoco por que no la termine pero en general se me hizo aburrida y una perdida de tiempo pero si lo que buscas es una historia para matar el tiempo lo más probable es que te guste la abandone en el capítulo 65 gracias por leer.
buen comienzo pero es absurdo como hace una misión de rango c y acaba en asuntos de orochimaru y luego hace otra misión de rango c y acaba en el problema de la pelicular del país de la nieve y se hace el héroe intentando salvar a la princesa cuando en la pelicular lo lograron con mucha ayuda de kakashi pero este gennin lo hace solo es absurdo
Great novel! Why does this fanfic score 3.5, while others are 4 or higher? Give this book a shot, and you will not regret it! This was my last comment on this fanfic. But in 15 chapters or less, the author succeeds in making me lose interest in this. The problem is forcing the story