Honkai Star Rail - Isekai'd With A Stellaron Within

this my opinion after read first 20 chapter. there is so much that can improve in this fiction: - to fast pace so fast that you barely understand emotion or even action of character, barely can feel mc frustration or anything with short and weak build up. - lack of explanation and absurdity it breaks the suspension of disbelief, suddenly a mundane guy made a sword out of junk and fought silvermane guard with pipe, even with the crew the fact he held himself against them makes no sense. - his interaction with other characters has no weight, most of his interaction feels forced so other characters think mc matters and mc dialogue feels either made so it can move quickly to the next part or fans try to insert their own opinion in the middle of the scene. - mc interaction and action feel like someone excited entering a game, skipping boring things and interjecting in part he wants to be involved in, feel like someone playing than someone lives inside the story. - talk big about changing things but by the end of the day just follow the original plot and only try to enter himself in the plot, his existence seems meaningless, still in the end he gets what he wants because that's how suppose to be in this story.

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