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This story reads like a 4 year old child is telling it. Grammer is all over the place, the MC practically becomes a God creating OP jutsu like Rasenshuriken at 3 years old. All in all this is kind of awful right now. I will give it 20 chapters to see if it improves. I am on ch. 10 when writing this.
This story reads like a 4 year old child is telling it. Grammer is all over the place, the MC practically becomes a God creating OP jutsu like Rasenshuriken at 3 years old. All in all this is kind of awful right now. I will give it 20 chapters to see if it improves. I am on ch. 10 when writing this.