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Born as the emperor's first-born child. An abomination twice over, the Order of Bene Gesserit would move to kill this anomaly. Prophets aren't so easy to kill, especially a false one.
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寫檢討Peak fiction, as it was written, lisan al gaib. Do not drop, we must see the golden path. My one critique is that you post too slowly, I am impatient. Your healing asoiaf fanfic was great too.
this has a great premise. i saw how on another side this story got a bit target by people critizing its"realism" and all. Which is funny when you are talking about a fictional universe in the first place... So to the author: dont listen to the trolls. You are writing a solid developing story that makes me check daily for updates!
I liked it so far. I've only watched the movies, haven't read the comics or novel, and one thing stood out to me: there are many references to Arabic culture and Muslims (words like: kazaab, al mahadi...).
It’s an ok fic, no more than that. Mc is the son of the emperor and bene gesserit and gets sent to arrakis when he’s about a couple months old, becomes fremen freedom fighter and then leader, also hates the prophecy and fights against it. Makes technology like odm gear from attack on titan, shield for the planet, etc. Grammar is barely passable, sometimes you can read it, and then other times you can’t. The person talking will be written her 10x, and then you find out it was actually a guy the whole time. It confuses me when you can’t even properly gender whoever is currently talking at the time, and makes this fic annoying to try to read and understand. Plot is just meh, reading for fun.
Plot given enough time to unravel, and mc motives are justified. Some typos here and there, but nothing too devastating. So far very promising.
a great story with intriguing writing and an excellent plot. i really hope you keep going with this.
Drkest Great Fanfic Keep up the great work you can do this Dune fanfic idea immediately after DUNE-A False Haerach-(SI into brother of Irulan) Dune: Saiyan Prince A soul has been reborn into the world of Dune as a Saiyan Prince. Artwork can be found on DeviantArt Harem Lady Jessica Princess Irulan Fasha Gine Caulifla Kale Gaius Helen Mohiam looks : Very Huge B (118) by AndBuk Wanna Marcus Margot Fenring Dejah Thoris Kaileena Shahdee
Well a good fic from Bum author.. Well bum one can destroy this fic like ll the other's. ..............................................................................................................................
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Your other books should be replaced with full attention to this book im by far more invested in this book. That being said keep up the good work drkest.
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I think this story is very good, however I tried reading this before watching dune and it literally made zero sense to me, (maybe cuz I’m stupid) but regardless unfriendly to people who haven’t watched or read dune, besides that it’s a quality story as long as you have knowledge on the world
Story is exciting and well written, there are few grammar mistakes here and there but they are negligible, Only problem is update schedule is very irregular
That story is great, really good. There are some mistakes, but nothing major. I just don't like the protagonist, but everything else is pretty cool.
作者 Drkest
PLEASE READ,I never leave reviews as they are not helpful to readers only writers but I must see this creation prosper. So far, the story has been great, with the only Grammer being the misuse of a word or two and forgetting to use the plural version instead of singular.