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MY GREATEST ENEMY

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作者: wilfredbedrin

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Antoinette was a old friend of Ruth and it’s been ages the seen each other until one day them came across themselves and had a conversation from there. Antoinette was going through the most hardship of life until she met her old friend Ruth and from there Ruth decided to help her out, but upon the help Ruth did for Antoinette, she did Ruth evil at the end…. see how life is so blurry sometimes

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Oh, I like where this is going! It's clear from Scene 1 that there's a bit of mystery surrounding Antoinette, which definitely piques my curiosity. The dialogue feels natural and it's easy to picture the school setting and the characters' interactions. In Scene 2, I can sense the warmth in Ruth's family, and the mention of Wisdom's interest in inventions is a nice touch. It adds depth to his character and could be a cool plot point if the story explores that further. I'm intrigued by Antoinette's situation. Why does she seem troubled? And I'm curious about Ruth's reaction to her friend's distress. It seems like there's a story there waiting to unfold!

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