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I didint liked maeby others will liked. It is to much like chinese cultivation novels.
Aimless and confusing. After reading over 47 chapters I can say that this novel is not good. First of all, there is no aim or objectives, there is no rhyme or reason for whatever actions the MC does. He's almost a soulless husk derived of a power hungry OP wish-fulfilling protagonist. Yes, we are told in the synopsis that the MC is a slow burn, that he gets strong slowly, that he's not OP.... In the early chapters he can spam a mana bomba capable of killing enemies that Wanda and other sorcerer's were having trouble with. Adam (MC) has a system that allows him to cultivate points to be stronger, whenever he reaches a milestone he's able to make a new spell,... Now, this has 0 impact at all. It is the center of the novel, it is the "thing", but it may as well doesn't exist, because the novel it's written in such a way that it is meaningless as MC always wins and has always the answer for everything. Now, I said before that he seems a soulless husk, he never interacts with anyone or if he does (which is implied) is never written. All that its written is: Adam woke up, trained, fought, Adam woke up, trained, fought - ad infinitum. reading this felt like a slog, there's no substance, no charm, it almost feels like one of those auto clicker games that you get bored in an hour. Not recommended.
I like the different take on a marvel fanfic, it’s much more unique than the massive amounts of MCU stories and Spiderman stories and the fact it is more supernatural based than superpower based is really cool especially since it’s not the normal go learn from the sanctum stuff.
I don’t feel the integrity of your story, each chapter looks torn and disconnected from the previous one. correct this shortcoming and send him on a long quest, otherwise superficial periodic skirmishes with local bigwigs do not cause a wow effect. and I like that you don’t push your character to the forefront of the whole world by making him non-violent and popular from the very beginning. Я исправлю обзор когда почувствую улучшения
An interesting take with a lot of potential. I would love to see where the story leads to 15 chapters from now.
I didint liked maeby others will liked. It is to much like chinese cultivation novels.
Aimless and confusing. After reading over 47 chapters I can say that this novel is not good. First of all, there is no aim or objectives, there is no rhyme or reason for whatever actions the MC does. He's almost a soulless husk derived of a power hungry OP wish-fulfilling protagonist. Yes, we are told in the synopsis that the MC is a slow burn, that he gets strong slowly, that he's not OP.... In the early chapters he can spam a mana bomba capable of killing enemies that Wanda and other sorcerer's were having trouble with. Adam (MC) has a system that allows him to cultivate points to be stronger, whenever he reaches a milestone he's able to make a new spell,... Now, this has 0 impact at all. It is the center of the novel, it is the "thing", but it may as well doesn't exist, because the novel it's written in such a way that it is meaningless as MC always wins and has always the answer for everything. Now, I said before that he seems a soulless husk, he never interacts with anyone or if he does (which is implied) is never written. All that its written is: Adam woke up, trained, fought, Adam woke up, trained, fought - ad infinitum. reading this felt like a slog, there's no substance, no charm, it almost feels like one of those auto clicker games that you get bored in an hour. Not recommended.
I like the different take on a marvel fanfic, it’s much more unique than the massive amounts of MCU stories and Spiderman stories and the fact it is more supernatural based than superpower based is really cool especially since it’s not the normal go learn from the sanctum stuff.
I don’t feel the integrity of your story, each chapter looks torn and disconnected from the previous one. correct this shortcoming and send him on a long quest, otherwise superficial periodic skirmishes with local bigwigs do not cause a wow effect. and I like that you don’t push your character to the forefront of the whole world by making him non-violent and popular from the very beginning. Я исправлю обзор когда почувствую улучшения
An interesting take with a lot of potential. I would love to see where the story leads to 15 chapters from now.