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Ну, очень неоднозначная история, первые главы это методы пыток над маленьким мальчиком который страдает аутизмом. Потом гг взрослеет и бежит быстрым бегом по сюжету ванпис. В какой то момент гг переносится в другой мир и это выглядит чертовски резко и отрывисто будто автору стало лень писать и он захотел поскорее отправить гг в другой мир. Вообще работа была интересной по описанию, я думал что будет более лёгкая работа, в плане отношения гг к окружающим, что он будет ходить в разные миры и делать что-нибудь прикольное, что работа будет больше ориентирована на юмор. Но работа просто рассказывает о том как Будда путешествует и все это в стиле серьезных рассказов с элементами темных историй, что сильно отталкивает при прочтении. В итоге это тяжело читать, становится не интересно, главы выходят короткими и с большим интервалом. Моя оценка как фанфику 3/5. На любителя....
I like this fic 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
Mc has zero personality, even with “essences” author can’t explain very well what the difference is between a robot and what the ability entails. Mc has no description, no ambition of any sorts, grammar is okay. Author will randomly have people interact with mc with no explanation and then just ignore them as if they disappeared, unless it’s convenient to the plot. World building is lacking, author only gives short descriptions of the places mc is at, it’s like you’re just skipping scenes to get it over with. Overall is just meh, underwhelming, only recommend for casual readers that wouldn’t care about these things.
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Basically because he has no desires of his own no love or family or friends ect.. You have made a character who is no longer human. And worse hes not ailen either. Because you have made a character that i has a personality of a god who is above mortals it takes away the possibility or makes any possibility of a story that is his and his alone, meaningless. beacuae he has no love or hope or dreams. he also has nothing that is his and his alone. Hes the honored one but hes not even special. Every human in the world is more special cause they have something different that is thiers and thiers alone. A mind that can dream that can hope that can feel. basically this will become a fix-it novel where he goes around the world fixing things he thinks are wrong. Never having family or friends becaus if he doesn't then all that BS about enlightenment will mean nothing and be hypocrisy.
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All i have to say is i love this and wish there where more fics like this 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁😁👍😁😁👍👍😁 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁😁👍😁😁👍👍😁 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁😁👍😁😁👍👍😁 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁😁👍😁😁👍👍😁 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁😁👍😁😁👍👍😁
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15 chapters in and i cant read anymore whats the point in reading a story when the MC has ZERO personality, a tea spoon has more personality than him he has no hopes no dreams no drive or ambition how can you have a story with a MC like that and find it enjoyable to read, you cant, without these things no reader can relate or be drawn into the story it might be interesting at first but as the story progresses it will become more and more boring
This book is dope it took an interesting beginning for this is the first time I see a one piece fanfic starting in Roger's era I'm waiting for more chapters thanks
it's good in its own way. first half of already released chapters are kinda disturbing but after that there is something I liked
sinceramente, uma da melhores (se não a melhor) fanfic que já li, se tá doido e muito bom
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good writting and everything else you just need to know more about Past,present and future tense better
Ну, очень неоднозначная история, первые главы это методы пыток над маленьким мальчиком который страдает аутизмом. Потом гг взрослеет и бежит быстрым бегом по сюжету ванпис. В какой то момент гг переносится в другой мир и это выглядит чертовски резко и отрывисто будто автору стало лень писать и он захотел поскорее отправить гг в другой мир. Вообще работа была интересной по описанию, я думал что будет более лёгкая работа, в плане отношения гг к окружающим, что он будет ходить в разные миры и делать что-нибудь прикольное, что работа будет больше ориентирована на юмор. Но работа просто рассказывает о том как Будда путешествует и все это в стиле серьезных рассказов с элементами темных историй, что сильно отталкивает при прочтении. В итоге это тяжело читать, становится не интересно, главы выходят короткими и с большим интервалом. Моя оценка как фанфику 3/5. На любителя....
I like this fic 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
Mc has zero personality, even with “essences” author can’t explain very well what the difference is between a robot and what the ability entails. Mc has no description, no ambition of any sorts, grammar is okay. Author will randomly have people interact with mc with no explanation and then just ignore them as if they disappeared, unless it’s convenient to the plot. World building is lacking, author only gives short descriptions of the places mc is at, it’s like you’re just skipping scenes to get it over with. Overall is just meh, underwhelming, only recommend for casual readers that wouldn’t care about these things.
Garbage Because:I don’t like MC .👎👎👎🏼👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏿👎🏾👎🏽👎🏼👎🏻👎👎🏻👎🏼👎🏽👎🏾👎🏻👎🏼👎🏼👎👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏻👎🏾👎🏾👎🏾👎🏾👎🏾👎🏾👎🏾👎🏾👎🏾👎🏾👎🏾👎🏾👎🏾👎🏾👎🏾👎🏾
Basically because he has no desires of his own no love or family or friends ect.. You have made a character who is no longer human. And worse hes not ailen either. Because you have made a character that i has a personality of a god who is above mortals it takes away the possibility or makes any possibility of a story that is his and his alone, meaningless. beacuae he has no love or hope or dreams. he also has nothing that is his and his alone. Hes the honored one but hes not even special. Every human in the world is more special cause they have something different that is thiers and thiers alone. A mind that can dream that can hope that can feel. basically this will become a fix-it novel where he goes around the world fixing things he thinks are wrong. Never having family or friends becaus if he doesn't then all that BS about enlightenment will mean nothing and be hypocrisy.
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All i have to say is i love this and wish there where more fics like this 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁😁👍😁😁👍👍😁 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁😁👍😁😁👍👍😁 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁😁👍😁😁👍👍😁 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁😁👍😁😁👍👍😁 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁👍👍😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁😁👍😁😁👍👍😁
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15 chapters in and i cant read anymore whats the point in reading a story when the MC has ZERO personality, a tea spoon has more personality than him he has no hopes no dreams no drive or ambition how can you have a story with a MC like that and find it enjoyable to read, you cant, without these things no reader can relate or be drawn into the story it might be interesting at first but as the story progresses it will become more and more boring
This book is dope it took an interesting beginning for this is the first time I see a one piece fanfic starting in Roger's era I'm waiting for more chapters thanks
it's good in its own way. first half of already released chapters are kinda disturbing but after that there is something I liked
sinceramente, uma da melhores (se não a melhor) fanfic que já li, se tá doido e muito bom
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don't drop 😍😍 ... .