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- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
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寫檢討
Greedy Idiot MC. He doesn't understand the consequences of his actions and makes himself a massive target with no way to defend himself. He's supposed to be a reincarnation, yet he acts as if his total life experience is less than he should have in *either* life. His thought process is basically "MONEY MAEK FAST GO GO GO" After making himself a massive target, guaranteeing a hostile response and closing shop early, he goes home and rather than considering the consequences ore accepting "More than enough is enough" for the defenseless orphans, he goes and opens shop again for a second day. BTW, the defenseless orphan pulled in nearly $100k USD equivalent in the first day. Yeah... IRL? His brother and sister would be held for ransom - even in a first world country. He's literally begging for his entire family to get murderized.
well it's fanfic so that instantly capes it's potential,second the system is issue.it may get around explaining things but that leaves the fanfic hallow also.the MCs iq is too low to be enjoyable
Greedy Idiot MC. He doesn't understand the consequences of his actions and makes himself a massive target with no way to defend himself. He's supposed to be a reincarnation, yet he acts as if his total life experience is less than he should have in *either* life. His thought process is basically "MONEY MAEK FAST GO GO GO" After making himself a massive target, guaranteeing a hostile response and closing shop early, he goes home and rather than considering the consequences ore accepting "More than enough is enough" for the defenseless orphans, he goes and opens shop again for a second day. BTW, the defenseless orphan pulled in nearly $100k USD equivalent in the first day. Yeah... IRL? His brother and sister would be held for ransom - even in a first world country. He's literally begging for his entire family to get murderized.
well it's fanfic so that instantly capes it's potential,second the system is issue.it may get around explaining things but that leaves the fanfic hallow also.the MCs iq is too low to be enjoyable
Its more money making than Pokémon adventures.