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It's good but it's weird we didn't get a lot of explanation and we have 2 story in the first chapter so im lost
this story identical with "unparalled comprehension begins with using my lifespan". i dont know which one that copy the other.
Introduction of using Murim like elements/korean names and how he appeared in a place where its seem like a training ground, It seems when he used to the body too quick especially when swifty moving around in this dark forest. The action scenes from chapter 1 to 3 are well paced, some missing "" dialogue the slow introduction of his golden finger may not be satisfying enough, as it appears later on in dark forest arc. There is no explaination of why he has low life span in chapter 3, maybe you can foreshadow it in later chapters? I feel like chapter 5 is a little too early too tell with the whole bet thing. Everything else from chapter 8 onwards I consider it fine for a reader who likes to enjoy spending time without nitpicking on loopholes or plot too much. I don't think character design was really protrayed him, maybe its up to us readers to view how they look but the slow world building is great in an aspect for cliffhangers. I also see consistence updates of every 2 days nearly Its also good how each pill has fixed days of lifespan, however I think its still unexplained how the pills made, maybe in later chapter you will have him become a pill alchemist?
揭示劇透
This author has invested great talent, effort, and critical thinking into their work. The story makes it evident that it has been meticulously written with the intent of entertaining you to your fullest desire. Highly recommend. The concept is fire and the characters are well written. Little to no grammar mistakes. Keep it up author!
It's good but it's weird we didn't get a lot of explanation and we have 2 story in the first chapter so im lost
this story identical with "unparalled comprehension begins with using my lifespan". i dont know which one that copy the other.
Introduction of using Murim like elements/korean names and how he appeared in a place where its seem like a training ground, It seems when he used to the body too quick especially when swifty moving around in this dark forest. The action scenes from chapter 1 to 3 are well paced, some missing "" dialogue the slow introduction of his golden finger may not be satisfying enough, as it appears later on in dark forest arc. There is no explaination of why he has low life span in chapter 3, maybe you can foreshadow it in later chapters? I feel like chapter 5 is a little too early too tell with the whole bet thing. Everything else from chapter 8 onwards I consider it fine for a reader who likes to enjoy spending time without nitpicking on loopholes or plot too much. I don't think character design was really protrayed him, maybe its up to us readers to view how they look but the slow world building is great in an aspect for cliffhangers. I also see consistence updates of every 2 days nearly Its also good how each pill has fixed days of lifespan, however I think its still unexplained how the pills made, maybe in later chapter you will have him become a pill alchemist?
揭示劇透 This author has invested great talent, effort, and critical thinking into their work. The story makes it evident that it has been meticulously written with the intent of entertaining you to your fullest desire. Highly recommend. The concept is fire and the characters are well written. Little to no grammar mistakes. Keep it up author!
Story is not bad, need to be more impressive.