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Everything his good except When tried to kill someone just cause he doesn’t like them
The idea behind the fanfic is very good, unfortunately it has too much self insert by the author, The author projects himself a lot into the main character, he tried to be "unique" in a horrendous way, his MC is too annoying, if he were more neutral the novel would be readable, I wish someone could take the idea behind this fic and make a better story with a good mc.
Whilst I'll admit it isn't the greatest fic on here, it is very entertaining, it isn't the most serious fic, but for me that adds to the charm, it feels like the author actually is enjoying to write this as much as I enjoy reading I. For me, this is a fic I actually get excited about if there's a new chapter because it's my comfort fic. The only issue I have is that it drags on a little bit, and the MC is a bit bland,but other than that, I would recommend you to read
This is a great wish fulfilment story the likes of which I have seen precious few times before. I am excited about the future progression and development of it. I also wouldn't mind if you updated this one faster.
i only read like 4 chapters before leaving i really dont like this kind of mc who has so much pride of himself, and too many complaints about other people because he read it or watch it in anime. he judge them base on the anime he knows, then call the others simp.
I like the concept but could not come to like the MC( too judgemental, Cringe and has too much unnecessary pride).
Just great. It's the first time I've read a Minecraft fanfic and I loved it.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Made it to chapter 23. It's a good fanfic, but not for me. In my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.
The story is decent. a lot of good aspects but its all overshadowed by bland humor. boring and very elementary. it definitely hinders this story's potential. The MC, infected by this bland humor, is sub par at best. he prejudged everyone based on their anime counterpart. he doesn't treat this world as his own reality but more like its a game. I dont mind him being a hypocrite because everyone is in someway even if this MC is on the extreme end. as I said, the humor just falls short so the MCs actions come off as dumb instead of funny. he acts like he's worked for his powers too which is definitely funny when you see him act better than anyone else. he has really biased opinions that show how Pathetic he was as a human in his first life. could say more but thats enough. read it and find out.
Continue assim, ta indo muito bem meu nobre ....................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
It's a pretty good novel so far, the MC is a pretty good guy and I like how creative his powers are. He's able to change the future of adventuring yet he takes it slowly.
Sorry for my horrible English, but I hope it's at least readable for whoever reads this future analysis... And well, if you're hoping for a story in which both the protagonist's way of thinking and the world itself are serious and its consequences, unfortunately this story should not be for you. Really, the writing, the world of Danmachi, the central idea is awesome (even if it's an overpowering power) the problem is that it doesn't make sense for him to say he's going to hide this power, and magically the Loki family appears in the Dungeon and he beyond to help them, show MANY of their powers. Like, couldn't you have waited a little and focused on him adapting in Orario, and simply talking to some characters and simple things for the readers to adapt and then ONLY THEN start showing his powers to others? I believe that this initial interaction will ruin all future work, because in addition to everyone knowing his level now, probably as various rumors will be spread, there is no way to have a normal interaction again without it seeming forced (with people he will know). . Anyway, about the aspect of him being the strongest or anything like that, I have no problems because I expected that from the beginning in this story, it just makes me angry how lightly both his powers and the people of Danmachi are taken, or you're going to tell me that in the MIDDLE OF THE LOKI FAMILY CAMP IN THE DUNGEON, he says he's better than everyone, contradicts the captain, beats everyone, makes the monsters in the dungeon look like plastic dolls and is taken as if it were normal (A The way they react initially makes sense, the problem is that soon everyone accepts and then he shows more strength and they open their mouths again, and then they accept). I seriously think that if this work was remade in a more serious way overall and slower it would be much better than it is currently (personal opinion). So far I can understand that I didn't like the aspects above, but is that a reason for me to give a positive review? It depends on your point of view, but honestly I'm more so because of how the girls are liking him so easily (I don't know if there will be a harem, but so far some of the ''main girls'' are already starting to dislike him already) , like Tiona even goes, but Ais? Why make him almost committed to both? If it's just the two of them, you can develop this ''relationship'', but if there is a harem (apparently there will be) it will be another story that will be ruined by the harem. This romance thing will probably limit the story a lot, especially now that it's at the beginning and he's committed to TWO GIRLS... (Is there a way to exchange me with him? ahahah)-----Honestly, this is a real concern-- ---- I hope my ideas weren't confusing, as I'm just typing what I'm thinking and not analyzing much of what I'm saying. Anyway, the story is for those who don't care so much about inconsistencies and accept things lightly (I think I should start doing that too ahahah), unfortunately I'm not like that and I'm giving my opinion and I'm about to share them with you. Thank you for ''listening'' to me so far :)
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.............................................................Power fantasy written in the worse way possible.................................................
i going say, the sinopse make me curious, so, when I read, i going to review this... with my attention...
I like the whole concept it’s just not that unique Mod yet and I don’t know if he has respond and keep inventory no I like what you were doing with the dungeon to make more mobs so far I liked it I just hope you keep on updating it As steady you are right now
good fanfic overalls maybe lack some things but hey its a great story to read with a good concept
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Good story,and till now it's 10 ,but hust one question No Harem?(please).Or just no romance but if you do please make it natural and not like the relation that the mc as with Tiona, because with no offense if Tiona is your waifu ,and yes she is a amazon but that doesn't make her a simp just because someone is strong.Overall keep going no pressure just getting my opinion out.
I made it to chapter 4, and I couldn't handle the constant middle school jokes. if you're looking for an even semiserious fic then this not for you. people might not even see this because I've seen talk of the author deleting negative reviews. Hope that just talk though. This might be entertaining to some people but for me the attitude of the story seems obnoxious.
good fan fic based on danmachi.but I think you have to stick to own word.you said mc will be kept low profile but in the end of 8 th chapter mc preaching words of man of culture with orario's most famous familia.
Quite interesting at the moment, although I expected the worst. I hope there will be more details and everyday life in future chapters. Although it is at a good level.[img=recommend][img=recommend]
Always loved when this combo came up. You are doing great so far. Keep up the good work. ❤️👍🏻
Everything his good except When tried to kill someone just cause he doesn’t like them
The idea behind the fanfic is very good, unfortunately it has too much self insert by the author, The author projects himself a lot into the main character, he tried to be "unique" in a horrendous way, his MC is too annoying, if he were more neutral the novel would be readable, I wish someone could take the idea behind this fic and make a better story with a good mc.
Whilst I'll admit it isn't the greatest fic on here, it is very entertaining, it isn't the most serious fic, but for me that adds to the charm, it feels like the author actually is enjoying to write this as much as I enjoy reading I. For me, this is a fic I actually get excited about if there's a new chapter because it's my comfort fic. The only issue I have is that it drags on a little bit, and the MC is a bit bland,but other than that, I would recommend you to read
This is a great wish fulfilment story the likes of which I have seen precious few times before. I am excited about the future progression and development of it. I also wouldn't mind if you updated this one faster.
i only read like 4 chapters before leaving i really dont like this kind of mc who has so much pride of himself, and too many complaints about other people because he read it or watch it in anime. he judge them base on the anime he knows, then call the others simp.
I like the concept but could not come to like the MC( too judgemental, Cringe and has too much unnecessary pride).
Just great. It's the first time I've read a Minecraft fanfic and I loved it.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Made it to chapter 23. It's a good fanfic, but not for me. In my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.
The story is decent. a lot of good aspects but its all overshadowed by bland humor. boring and very elementary. it definitely hinders this story's potential. The MC, infected by this bland humor, is sub par at best. he prejudged everyone based on their anime counterpart. he doesn't treat this world as his own reality but more like its a game. I dont mind him being a hypocrite because everyone is in someway even if this MC is on the extreme end. as I said, the humor just falls short so the MCs actions come off as dumb instead of funny. he acts like he's worked for his powers too which is definitely funny when you see him act better than anyone else. he has really biased opinions that show how Pathetic he was as a human in his first life. could say more but thats enough. read it and find out.
Continue assim, ta indo muito bem meu nobre ....................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
It's a pretty good novel so far, the MC is a pretty good guy and I like how creative his powers are. He's able to change the future of adventuring yet he takes it slowly.
Sorry for my horrible English, but I hope it's at least readable for whoever reads this future analysis... And well, if you're hoping for a story in which both the protagonist's way of thinking and the world itself are serious and its consequences, unfortunately this story should not be for you. Really, the writing, the world of Danmachi, the central idea is awesome (even if it's an overpowering power) the problem is that it doesn't make sense for him to say he's going to hide this power, and magically the Loki family appears in the Dungeon and he beyond to help them, show MANY of their powers. Like, couldn't you have waited a little and focused on him adapting in Orario, and simply talking to some characters and simple things for the readers to adapt and then ONLY THEN start showing his powers to others? I believe that this initial interaction will ruin all future work, because in addition to everyone knowing his level now, probably as various rumors will be spread, there is no way to have a normal interaction again without it seeming forced (with people he will know). . Anyway, about the aspect of him being the strongest or anything like that, I have no problems because I expected that from the beginning in this story, it just makes me angry how lightly both his powers and the people of Danmachi are taken, or you're going to tell me that in the MIDDLE OF THE LOKI FAMILY CAMP IN THE DUNGEON, he says he's better than everyone, contradicts the captain, beats everyone, makes the monsters in the dungeon look like plastic dolls and is taken as if it were normal (A The way they react initially makes sense, the problem is that soon everyone accepts and then he shows more strength and they open their mouths again, and then they accept). I seriously think that if this work was remade in a more serious way overall and slower it would be much better than it is currently (personal opinion). So far I can understand that I didn't like the aspects above, but is that a reason for me to give a positive review? It depends on your point of view, but honestly I'm more so because of how the girls are liking him so easily (I don't know if there will be a harem, but so far some of the ''main girls'' are already starting to dislike him already) , like Tiona even goes, but Ais? Why make him almost committed to both? If it's just the two of them, you can develop this ''relationship'', but if there is a harem (apparently there will be) it will be another story that will be ruined by the harem. This romance thing will probably limit the story a lot, especially now that it's at the beginning and he's committed to TWO GIRLS... (Is there a way to exchange me with him? ahahah)-----Honestly, this is a real concern-- ---- I hope my ideas weren't confusing, as I'm just typing what I'm thinking and not analyzing much of what I'm saying. Anyway, the story is for those who don't care so much about inconsistencies and accept things lightly (I think I should start doing that too ahahah), unfortunately I'm not like that and I'm giving my opinion and I'm about to share them with you. Thank you for ''listening'' to me so far :)
揭示劇透 .............................................................Power fantasy written in the worse way possible.................................................
i going say, the sinopse make me curious, so, when I read, i going to review this... with my attention...
I like the whole concept it’s just not that unique Mod yet and I don’t know if he has respond and keep inventory no I like what you were doing with the dungeon to make more mobs so far I liked it I just hope you keep on updating it As steady you are right now
good fanfic overalls maybe lack some things but hey its a great story to read with a good concept
揭示劇透 Good story,and till now it's 10 ,but hust one question No Harem?(please).Or just no romance but if you do please make it natural and not like the relation that the mc as with Tiona, because with no offense if Tiona is your waifu ,and yes she is a amazon but that doesn't make her a simp just because someone is strong.Overall keep going no pressure just getting my opinion out.
I made it to chapter 4, and I couldn't handle the constant middle school jokes. if you're looking for an even semiserious fic then this not for you. people might not even see this because I've seen talk of the author deleting negative reviews. Hope that just talk though. This might be entertaining to some people but for me the attitude of the story seems obnoxious.
good fan fic based on danmachi.but I think you have to stick to own word.you said mc will be kept low profile but in the end of 8 th chapter mc preaching words of man of culture with orario's most famous familia.
Quite interesting at the moment, although I expected the worst. I hope there will be more details and everyday life in future chapters. Although it is at a good level.[img=recommend][img=recommend]
Always loved when this combo came up. You are doing great so far. Keep up the good work. ❤️👍🏻
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