摘要
* This is a reset of my story that I decided to recount. *
An ordinary young man is forced by a powerful, unknown entity to live in a new world. Without any acquaintances and blessed with the gift of alchemy, received from Ed and Al, the young man begins to follow a dark path, looking for a way to return to his world.
* English is not my native language, so I ask you to be patient about possible spelling errors.
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5 useless chapters right of the bat. Could've been in a single chapter and then grammar sucks. Simple as that. .
As an author, it is my obligation to give 5 entries. This time I promise a better quality story. Will this be the best story you’ve ever read? Maybe yes, maybe no, but I promise it will be fun and interesting.
OMG! Full Metal Alchemist x Harry Potter! 5 Stars just for the idea! [img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
this is vary good! that intro was a bit jarring but i fond myself on the edge of my seat reading this wanting to know what would happen next and what this crazy MC will do next. its a dark story so if you are not in to that kind of thing you may not want to read it but i think its vary well written up to the point were i have read and i look forward to reading more :)
Muy buena historia de lo poco legible que hay en este sitio. Los personajes tienen un buen desarrollo por lo que va de historia (13caps) así que el futuro parece prometedor.
Its good so far, the updates are consistant and there arent too many grammatical mistakes. The MC is really dark but that was expected from the synopis.
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This work is great until now and its really promising. keep going my man and do not listen to the useless haters comment. u can add world travel to this novel as well.
pretty good story so far, spelling could use some work (oh well). plot has been consistent so far, characters have been progressing slowly in development, (not too slowly mind you). just wondering if he's going to change the main cast into humongulous (spell check won't help) or not. so far, absolutely great story
I really want to like this and I will continue to read this story, but the MC is SOOO unlikable.