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To start off with the first twenty five ish chapters have terrible writing quality, if you can’t make it past that I totally get it, but there are some redeeming points. The plot and MC of the fanfic are pretty good. The new 10 shadows are interesting and the writing quality is excellent after the shitty portion. There’s also realistic responses to MC instead of him having no real effect on the world before he starts changing the story. The author handles the absent father part well whilst giving the MC a reason to leave even if it’s not the best. In summary, it’s a good fic once you get to the point where the writing quality increases. Hope the author updates it more often.
Good start with amazing potential, but went down hill the second MC mom died. Basically following the plot of the show but MC goes to Africa
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this had so much potential, i loved the new ten shadows technique, and i loved the premise, but every thing else was lacking the plot was forced the interactions between the characters was iffy... i just couldn't continue reading it .
It follows the same old route where the MC is hit by truck-kun, dies and meets Kami Sama who gives him 3 wishes. Then reincarnation... Tadah! it's such an overused trope. I wish the writers became more creative or just skip the truck kun, the White room, Kami sama and the 3 wishes part. You already know the novel will be childish like anything from that trope.
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hey author for the final shikigami how about an Armor like incursion which gives him adaptation like mahoraga
hey guys after ch 23 the words gets better after I re read my novel i thought to my self that my writing sucks so i rely on chatgpt to make it better but don't worry I only just made chatgpt use some fancy words and correct the spelling on my story so rest assured that the story is not AI generated
The story itself starts out well written, but as time passes the quality of the writing only begins to decline...........................................
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The writing quality is just really bad from how it is written to spelling and grammar mistakes
it has potential but what particular thing I don't like is sometimes the chapters are short so I guess that's all I can say for now...
it's a great idea for jjk fan fic , but I hope you can make a chapter consisting of mc and his shikigami abilities and have it updated per chapter
It had the potential to be very good but it has a lot of bad points. So this novel is meh😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑
The idea for this story was great and it had lot of potential but sadly the author didn't deliver it well.The grammar and writing structure of this story is horrendous,the chapters are rushed and the characters feel like they are emotionless puppets.
To start off with the first twenty five ish chapters have terrible writing quality, if you can’t make it past that I totally get it, but there are some redeeming points. The plot and MC of the fanfic are pretty good. The new 10 shadows are interesting and the writing quality is excellent after the shitty portion. There’s also realistic responses to MC instead of him having no real effect on the world before he starts changing the story. The author handles the absent father part well whilst giving the MC a reason to leave even if it’s not the best. In summary, it’s a good fic once you get to the point where the writing quality increases. Hope the author updates it more often.
Good start with amazing potential, but went down hill the second MC mom died. Basically following the plot of the show but MC goes to Africa
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this had so much potential, i loved the new ten shadows technique, and i loved the premise, but every thing else was lacking the plot was forced the interactions between the characters was iffy... i just couldn't continue reading it .
It follows the same old route where the MC is hit by truck-kun, dies and meets Kami Sama who gives him 3 wishes. Then reincarnation... Tadah! it's such an overused trope. I wish the writers became more creative or just skip the truck kun, the White room, Kami sama and the 3 wishes part. You already know the novel will be childish like anything from that trope.
揭示劇透 hey author for the final shikigami how about an Armor like incursion which gives him adaptation like mahoraga
hey guys after ch 23 the words gets better after I re read my novel i thought to my self that my writing sucks so i rely on chatgpt to make it better but don't worry I only just made chatgpt use some fancy words and correct the spelling on my story so rest assured that the story is not AI generated
The story itself starts out well written, but as time passes the quality of the writing only begins to decline...........................................
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The writing quality is just really bad from how it is written to spelling and grammar mistakes
it has potential but what particular thing I don't like is sometimes the chapters are short so I guess that's all I can say for now...
it's a great idea for jjk fan fic , but I hope you can make a chapter consisting of mc and his shikigami abilities and have it updated per chapter
It had the potential to be very good but it has a lot of bad points. So this novel is meh😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑
The idea for this story was great and it had lot of potential but sadly the author didn't deliver it well.The grammar and writing structure of this story is horrendous,the chapters are rushed and the characters feel like they are emotionless puppets.