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寫檢討Tbh this story held promise at first , but it eventually ended up becoming copy and paste chapters repeating the same thing over and over making it cookie cutter and plain. 👎🏾
The story has potential but it's too fast paced. It shows a house's history from north. The character are well written but have really short or barely any screen time. Though some unique characters have good background stories. Now overall the story is not up to the mark. No offense but it's not good in the story development sort of way. Its like an Interlude more than a story. It can be made better. Like instead of writing it in a narrating style, it can be written like a journal or something. Or instead of writing it like a history narrative it can be shown from a single protagonist's prespective. If author decides to rewrite it ever again I think he should double or triple the chapters quantity to more thoroughly explain the whole picture surrounding the main character or characters. Anyways was a good short time story. Hope it was helpful.
please do not take offence author writing aint easy. So ill be straight this is just listing events no dialogue no character interactions boring bland not worth reading. You have a good home of a story but aint got no furniture no fixtures no fittings barely any lights but you have good foundation for something.
Tbh this story held promise at first , but it eventually ended up becoming copy and paste chapters repeating the same thing over and over making it cookie cutter and plain. 👎🏾
The story has potential but it's too fast paced. It shows a house's history from north. The character are well written but have really short or barely any screen time. Though some unique characters have good background stories. Now overall the story is not up to the mark. No offense but it's not good in the story development sort of way. Its like an Interlude more than a story. It can be made better. Like instead of writing it in a narrating style, it can be written like a journal or something. Or instead of writing it like a history narrative it can be shown from a single protagonist's prespective. If author decides to rewrite it ever again I think he should double or triple the chapters quantity to more thoroughly explain the whole picture surrounding the main character or characters. Anyways was a good short time story. Hope it was helpful.
please do not take offence author writing aint easy. So ill be straight this is just listing events no dialogue no character interactions boring bland not worth reading. You have a good home of a story but aint got no furniture no fixtures no fittings barely any lights but you have good foundation for something.
one of the best I've read love the time skips