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this feels like a game where ur always stuck at the tutorial. too much handholding. i mean author always has the need to explain what each interaction means for the characters, what his intentions are for this and that part of the plot. readers find meaning differently from the writer. even more so because each reader is different, we understand things in our own unique perspective. its ok author, u can let us do that. u dont have to explain urself just do ur best. so far i find it decent for a first shot at writing. i bet my balls theres worse out there. at least author did 50+ chapters of this fic compared to others
It is trash the Mc is a Gojo fanboy and does things to act like Gojo and the system hands everything to him without any work and the first 18+ scene has a non virgin who is his maid and the author said he did this for “realism”.
The Mc is a Gojo fan body which is fine but the Mc is such a fan he forcefully acts like Gojo. Everything is handed to him by the system. Then the first 18* scenes is with a random servant but the author makes it so she is not a virgin which is more of a preference but if the vary first girl he does it with isn’t even a virgin because the author says that it’s normal which I agree with but when reading a wish fulfillment it just seams like the author has a c*ck fetish because that was the only realistic thing about his novel. But most importantly the way the mc acts is extremely cringe.
still wating for the hiatus to finish..............................,.........................................................................................................................................................,.........................................................................................................................................................,.........................................................................................................................................................,.........................................................................................................................................................,.........................................................................................................................................................,.........................................................................................................................................................,.........................................................................................................................................................,.........................................................................................................................................................,...........................................................................................................................
You're a toy brother, at least finish this fanfic, I was looking forward to seeing the end man......................................................
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My name is Yoshikage Kira. I'm 33 years old. My house is in the northeast section of Morioh, where all the villas are, and I am not married. I work as an employee for the Kame Yu department stores, and I get home every day by 8 PM at the latest. I don't smoke, but I occasionally drink. I'm in bed by 11 PM, and make sure I get eight hours of sleep, no matter what. After having a glass of warm milk and doing about twenty minutes of stretches before going to bed, I usually have no problems sleeping until morning. Just like a baby, I wake up without any fatigue or stress in the morning. I was told there were no issues at my last check-up. I'm trying to explain that I'm a person who wishes to live a very quiet life. I take care not to trouble myself with any enemies, like winning and losing, that would cause me to lose sleep at night. That is how I deal with society, and I know that is what brings me happiness. Although, if I were to fight I wouldn't lose to anyone.
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Yeah, it's like reading a messy beginner's fanfic. Maybe for me the characters are too childish and the writing is too messy. Maybe because I've seen better system fanfics so if I see the bad ones I can already see them. Well, for me, this fanfic has no potential, it's just to fulfill the creator's wishes. Touch the grass bro!
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The story is very entertaining, it amuses me a lot and I find the concept of reincarnating as Satoru Gojo interesting, not in an anime world different from that of the character but in that of the character, all the stories I had read were about Satoru in different worlds of anime but none in the world of jujutsu kaisen and that's why I found it interesting. The only bad thing for me would be the small number of chapters, because the rest is very good, of course it is not a literary work but at least in my opinion it is very good, I am eager to see how the author will develop the story.
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Good series so far(41 chapters in) Originally it was a bit slow but it gained my interest later in the story and it's been good ever since. It does need some touches here and there mostly in the beginning but so far it's been a pretty good read,very much worth the wait. Though it's dragging a bit and I want to see Hidden Inventory it's a good FanFic. The only problem I have is Pieck isn't in the story and that although I gave it a 4.6, imo without Pieck What is Attack On Titan, and to remove such a... Fundamental character like her over Annie is wild but yeah good story, bit of a slow starter but good.
I just found this fanfic as I was searching for gojo fanfics in webnovel I guess I found A really good one🤭 The scenes are great everything is good .job author
I saw the title and you had my curiosity then I saw a Daki on the main cover and you have my undivided attention
Great story so far! This novel is the perfect example of when something happens in your favorite show/manga/movie where you just think to yourself "I could write that better." The author did exactly that and managed to bring one of my favorite characters from JJK justice. The MC is really great so far and I love his energy! Also, it's fairly refreshing to see solid first-person view writing, since usually, authors do it wrong and constantly switch between first person and third person. But the author stays consistent with it! It's fun reading all of the tropes and references to anime thrown in and you can tell it was written by a true fan of the medium. Overall, so far, I've gotten to chapter 10 and the system is super unique considering the name "animeverse" I'm assuming the MC might travel to other anime worlds or potentially be able to use powers from other anime worlds. It's a very refreshing idea and honestly, it's every weeb's dream, but has never been fully realized in the form of a story, before now! But that's just speculation!
Author-san here! Just wanna tell you guys that this is my 1st novel and I don't even know why I am doing this but, but be sure the story is going to be a fun ride with some beautiful chaps, some wishfullfilling moments, some op fights while also having some dark twist and turns !! If you have any sujjs. or some ques. you can ask me here .
this feels like a game where ur always stuck at the tutorial. too much handholding. i mean author always has the need to explain what each interaction means for the characters, what his intentions are for this and that part of the plot. readers find meaning differently from the writer. even more so because each reader is different, we understand things in our own unique perspective. its ok author, u can let us do that. u dont have to explain urself just do ur best. so far i find it decent for a first shot at writing. i bet my balls theres worse out there. at least author did 50+ chapters of this fic compared to others
It is trash the Mc is a Gojo fanboy and does things to act like Gojo and the system hands everything to him without any work and the first 18+ scene has a non virgin who is his maid and the author said he did this for “realism”.
The Mc is a Gojo fan body which is fine but the Mc is such a fan he forcefully acts like Gojo. Everything is handed to him by the system. Then the first 18* scenes is with a random servant but the author makes it so she is not a virgin which is more of a preference but if the vary first girl he does it with isn’t even a virgin because the author says that it’s normal which I agree with but when reading a wish fulfillment it just seams like the author has a c*ck fetish because that was the only realistic thing about his novel. But most importantly the way the mc acts is extremely cringe.
still wating for the hiatus to finish..............................,.........................................................................................................................................................,.........................................................................................................................................................,.........................................................................................................................................................,.........................................................................................................................................................,.........................................................................................................................................................,.........................................................................................................................................................,.........................................................................................................................................................,.........................................................................................................................................................,...........................................................................................................................
You're a toy brother, at least finish this fanfic, I was looking forward to seeing the end man......................................................
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My name is Yoshikage Kira. I'm 33 years old. My house is in the northeast section of Morioh, where all the villas are, and I am not married. I work as an employee for the Kame Yu department stores, and I get home every day by 8 PM at the latest. I don't smoke, but I occasionally drink. I'm in bed by 11 PM, and make sure I get eight hours of sleep, no matter what. After having a glass of warm milk and doing about twenty minutes of stretches before going to bed, I usually have no problems sleeping until morning. Just like a baby, I wake up without any fatigue or stress in the morning. I was told there were no issues at my last check-up. I'm trying to explain that I'm a person who wishes to live a very quiet life. I take care not to trouble myself with any enemies, like winning and losing, that would cause me to lose sleep at night. That is how I deal with society, and I know that is what brings me happiness. Although, if I were to fight I wouldn't lose to anyone.
It a good 👍 fanfiction I'm looking forward for it to.[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=recommend[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]]
揭示劇透 Yeah, it's like reading a messy beginner's fanfic. Maybe for me the characters are too childish and the writing is too messy. Maybe because I've seen better system fanfics so if I see the bad ones I can already see them. Well, for me, this fanfic has no potential, it's just to fulfill the creator's wishes. Touch the grass bro!
please 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🙏🥺🙏🙏🙏 don't drop it 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
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揭示劇透 The story is very entertaining, it amuses me a lot and I find the concept of reincarnating as Satoru Gojo interesting, not in an anime world different from that of the character but in that of the character, all the stories I had read were about Satoru in different worlds of anime but none in the world of jujutsu kaisen and that's why I found it interesting. The only bad thing for me would be the small number of chapters, because the rest is very good, of course it is not a literary work but at least in my opinion it is very good, I am eager to see how the author will develop the story.
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Good series so far(41 chapters in) Originally it was a bit slow but it gained my interest later in the story and it's been good ever since. It does need some touches here and there mostly in the beginning but so far it's been a pretty good read,very much worth the wait. Though it's dragging a bit and I want to see Hidden Inventory it's a good FanFic. The only problem I have is Pieck isn't in the story and that although I gave it a 4.6, imo without Pieck What is Attack On Titan, and to remove such a... Fundamental character like her over Annie is wild but yeah good story, bit of a slow starter but good.
I just found this fanfic as I was searching for gojo fanfics in webnovel I guess I found A really good one🤭 The scenes are great everything is good .job author
I saw the title and you had my curiosity then I saw a Daki on the main cover and you have my undivided attention
Great story so far! This novel is the perfect example of when something happens in your favorite show/manga/movie where you just think to yourself "I could write that better." The author did exactly that and managed to bring one of my favorite characters from JJK justice. The MC is really great so far and I love his energy! Also, it's fairly refreshing to see solid first-person view writing, since usually, authors do it wrong and constantly switch between first person and third person. But the author stays consistent with it! It's fun reading all of the tropes and references to anime thrown in and you can tell it was written by a true fan of the medium. Overall, so far, I've gotten to chapter 10 and the system is super unique considering the name "animeverse" I'm assuming the MC might travel to other anime worlds or potentially be able to use powers from other anime worlds. It's a very refreshing idea and honestly, it's every weeb's dream, but has never been fully realized in the form of a story, before now! But that's just speculation!
Author-san here! Just wanna tell you guys that this is my 1st novel and I don't even know why I am doing this but, but be sure the story is going to be a fun ride with some beautiful chaps, some wishfullfilling moments, some op fights while also having some dark twist and turns !! If you have any sujjs. or some ques. you can ask me here .