50評論
1.46
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
與他人分享您的想法
寫檢討
Now that's what I call perfection[img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую]
i wrote a 5 star review at first then checked and i saw you would delete it otherwise so here you go this is great work so far good job author i really like that he's trying to learn about spirits and i love the pairing
no se porque quiere 1 estrella pero aquí pongo mi grano de arena, asta ahora es bueno..................................................................
ugh i guess ill give a 1 star (how dare you author im unable to show my support jk) anywho this novel is top notch it invokes emotions to keep you invested and its well written enough that you don't feel as if you gotta keep reading to to get to the good part bad news: ive got one problem but we haven't gotten far enough for it to be a possibility the character is heavy regretful and most of his journy will be trying to come to terms with it BUT im just kinda worried that he will come to peace with it then he won't (ive seen it before) ALL IN ALL GOOD NOVEL READ IT!!
揭示劇透
The plot is not bad... But Azula? Maybe at least May or Toph. Certainly not Azula. [img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]
[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Respect for the one star thing. I like it. I love the concept and will be reading this.
This is a very serious review ok so mind your tone. What I don't like about this fanfic is that this story is inherently Anti-War, and a bit of Anti-Violence. I've become tired of reading Last Airbender fanfics that doesn't truly respect the theme of the original story or sometimes simply giving a middle finger towards it, and either just want to look cool by not killing a single person and look Pacifistic because 'it's a chad move', Saving underage girls, or both. So this is an attempt of this author writing this ATLA, And probably is going to go wrong at some point...
So the fanfiction is definitely different than the usuall. In a good way. I'm only on chapter 9 currently, but it has a pretty good start. A bit slow, but it all kinda comes together. If there's one thing to comment on, it's azula. I don't her father would go that far in her punishment. She's pretty much the reason why he was made to be crown prince. As his brother lost his child at war. Zuko, while could be a replacement, has already been established as the failure by his father. So I’m curious how that plays out. Will he call back Azula for coronation, will zuko just be the new azula? Or will they both be banished.
,............. ........................................................................ ...........................................................................
揭示劇透
My man, you wanted 1 star I give you mine 1 star. Your Fanfic is one of a kind (at least from what I saw) and I hope you won't drop.
Good Soup------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
.............................................................................................................................................................
揭示劇透
1 star you want, 1 star you get. Your other story is great by the way. I hope this one is too.
You want Only 1 Star,You get 1 Star from me.👍 Though I would've liked to give 5 Stars for It,Oh well,Anyway, Thanks for the Awesome ATLA Fic. MC could learn Martial Arts[Various of our Earth Martial Arts like KickBoxing,MMA,Krav Maga,Jiu-Jutsu,Karate,Taekwondo,Kung Fu,Renewal Taekwondo,Boxing,Sumo,Muay Thai,Capoeira,Savate,Judo,Eight Extremes Fist,Wrestling,Tai-Chi,Yoga,Acrobatics,Calisthenics etc.],Weapon Mastery[Bukijutsu,Bojutsu,Whips(LoS2C Gabriel&PoP3 Two Thrones,MCU Whiplash),Kendo,Western Swordsmanship,Dual Weilding,Daggers,Spear,Glaive,Naginata,Saber,Kunai,Bow&Arrows,Shuriken,Crossbow,Kanabo,Gauntlets&Greaves,Mace,Hammer,Nanchuck,Rope(Spider-Man&Wonder Woman),Bike(Dante),Guns(DMC4,Bayonetta& Wanted Movie) etc.],Reading & Writing(ATLA world language),Basic Scientific Knowledge,Navigation,Cooking,Wild Life Survival,Basic Medical Knowledge,Basic of Business Manegement,Meditation,Spirit Purifying,Chi Blocking,7 Chakras Opening,Mind Protection/Defence(from outside interference,manipulation&influence),gain Knowledge from Wan Shi Tong's Library,Seal "Vaatu" inside you instead of wannabe spirit "Chio" but get Strong enough Mind Protection/Defence to prevent manipulation(*MAYBE*),Fuse with Vaatu and get unique Avatar State and Transformation(similar to how during Harmonic Convergence Raava&Korra fused with each other in spirit world*If you get and merge with Vaatu*)[MAYBE]. (* Maybe is used cause I'm not sure about MC getting Vaatu*) Also Please include all ATLA and Avatar The Legend of Korra(*Maybe*) Episodes,Fillers arcs in this Fic. Anyway,Once again I ❤️ this fic so far.Please continue and don't Drop the fic.Also the above mentioned stuff are my Suggestions,so PLEASE don't be offended Author-san.
Now that's what I call perfection[img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую]
i wrote a 5 star review at first then checked and i saw you would delete it otherwise so here you go this is great work so far good job author i really like that he's trying to learn about spirits and i love the pairing
no se porque quiere 1 estrella pero aquí pongo mi grano de arena, asta ahora es bueno..................................................................
ugh i guess ill give a 1 star (how dare you author im unable to show my support jk) anywho this novel is top notch it invokes emotions to keep you invested and its well written enough that you don't feel as if you gotta keep reading to to get to the good part bad news: ive got one problem but we haven't gotten far enough for it to be a possibility the character is heavy regretful and most of his journy will be trying to come to terms with it BUT im just kinda worried that he will come to peace with it then he won't (ive seen it before) ALL IN ALL GOOD NOVEL READ IT!!
揭示劇透 The plot is not bad... But Azula? Maybe at least May or Toph. Certainly not Azula. [img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]
[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Respect for the one star thing. I like it. I love the concept and will be reading this.
This is a very serious review ok so mind your tone. What I don't like about this fanfic is that this story is inherently Anti-War, and a bit of Anti-Violence. I've become tired of reading Last Airbender fanfics that doesn't truly respect the theme of the original story or sometimes simply giving a middle finger towards it, and either just want to look cool by not killing a single person and look Pacifistic because 'it's a chad move', Saving underage girls, or both. So this is an attempt of this author writing this ATLA, And probably is going to go wrong at some point...
So the fanfiction is definitely different than the usuall. In a good way. I'm only on chapter 9 currently, but it has a pretty good start. A bit slow, but it all kinda comes together. If there's one thing to comment on, it's azula. I don't her father would go that far in her punishment. She's pretty much the reason why he was made to be crown prince. As his brother lost his child at war. Zuko, while could be a replacement, has already been established as the failure by his father. So I’m curious how that plays out. Will he call back Azula for coronation, will zuko just be the new azula? Or will they both be banished.
,............. ........................................................................ ...........................................................................
揭示劇透 My man, you wanted 1 star I give you mine 1 star. Your Fanfic is one of a kind (at least from what I saw) and I hope you won't drop.
Good Soup------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
.............................................................................................................................................................
揭示劇透 1 star you want, 1 star you get. Your other story is great by the way. I hope this one is too.
You want Only 1 Star,You get 1 Star from me.👍 Though I would've liked to give 5 Stars for It,Oh well,Anyway, Thanks for the Awesome ATLA Fic. MC could learn Martial Arts[Various of our Earth Martial Arts like KickBoxing,MMA,Krav Maga,Jiu-Jutsu,Karate,Taekwondo,Kung Fu,Renewal Taekwondo,Boxing,Sumo,Muay Thai,Capoeira,Savate,Judo,Eight Extremes Fist,Wrestling,Tai-Chi,Yoga,Acrobatics,Calisthenics etc.],Weapon Mastery[Bukijutsu,Bojutsu,Whips(LoS2C Gabriel&PoP3 Two Thrones,MCU Whiplash),Kendo,Western Swordsmanship,Dual Weilding,Daggers,Spear,Glaive,Naginata,Saber,Kunai,Bow&Arrows,Shuriken,Crossbow,Kanabo,Gauntlets&Greaves,Mace,Hammer,Nanchuck,Rope(Spider-Man&Wonder Woman),Bike(Dante),Guns(DMC4,Bayonetta& Wanted Movie) etc.],Reading & Writing(ATLA world language),Basic Scientific Knowledge,Navigation,Cooking,Wild Life Survival,Basic Medical Knowledge,Basic of Business Manegement,Meditation,Spirit Purifying,Chi Blocking,7 Chakras Opening,Mind Protection/Defence(from outside interference,manipulation&influence),gain Knowledge from Wan Shi Tong's Library,Seal "Vaatu" inside you instead of wannabe spirit "Chio" but get Strong enough Mind Protection/Defence to prevent manipulation(*MAYBE*),Fuse with Vaatu and get unique Avatar State and Transformation(similar to how during Harmonic Convergence Raava&Korra fused with each other in spirit world*If you get and merge with Vaatu*)[MAYBE]. (* Maybe is used cause I'm not sure about MC getting Vaatu*) Also Please include all ATLA and Avatar The Legend of Korra(*Maybe*) Episodes,Fillers arcs in this Fic. Anyway,Once again I ❤️ this fic so far.Please continue and don't Drop the fic.Also the above mentioned stuff are my Suggestions,so PLEASE don't be offended Author-san.