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I am now up to date with the latest chapters and I can only say I want more, very interesting lore, unique world, believable characters, very good novelOnly thing i think is missing is a visual map of the world in the comments or in the glossary to properly understand where everything is in relations with the Verdant Vale, thank you and keep up the awesome work.
Other than the fact that a lot of it sounds as if it was copied directly from chatgpt, it is simply plain boring The story progression is abysmal with nothing to stimulate you and dont even get me started on character design … maybe next time build characters that actually have a personality For a first time novel it is decent i guess but it still is one of the most boring novels i have ever invested my time in
This book has potential, but honestly, the first few chapters are not that good. I myself like kindom building type of books and I am cool with it being the main gocus of the book but there needs to be logic also with the breathing techniques in the book as the knights who have less talent than him are faster in advancing in rank when his max ranked celestial technique that he got for defeating some random 150 enemies is slower. I understand that a few thos soilders might have some experience and advance faster than other but considering that there is a difference of 7 ranks in technique as they are using the rank 1 infenior ranked breathing technique and he is using the rank seven technique he should be multible times faster even if the technique makes it so that he makes a steonger foundation but it would still be faster than some technique tahts 7 ranks lower than it. Anyway, the idea is great, but I would recommend the author to reconsider the technique difference. Maybe give him a lower ranked technique as the task wasn't that hard as the future tasks will be. With the max ranked technique, I don't really have any more interest in reading as there won't be anything better to get in that field at least. It could also be that the celestial technique sets the foundation slower and is faster in the later stages. If I missed something let me know.
i would be lying if i say I'm not disappointed. 1. Mc got a strong breathing Technique but still cultivates slower than his subordinates who got worse techniques than his technique. 2. Mc is brain-dead 3. a lot of cringe chapters
I love this novel, it's exactly what I was looking for for a while. In my opinion, for anyone looking for a novel in which the protagonist is intelligent and knows how to govern, this is the right place
I like, I read. Will continue read. I will make sure Luna never overcome Asher in terms of popularity to the best of my ability. Overall, nice book.
read like 30chs to give it a shot because I like kingdom building novels , army etc. but the writing style is sometimes of way , the pace is fast paced . mc become king straight away he implements changes the time skips are quick like by ch 5 there was 6month time skip and shorter time skipps I think 2 in one chapter. he doesn't ease into changes due his system . like he give cultivation manuals makes up army and implements from his past life and the character just follow there is no logic. and the secondary characters are to 1d no depth. honestly if this was fleshed out more it could have been a solid read.
Pros:Probaby will barely satisfy your demand for some kingdom bulding actionCons:Chapters are shorter than anyone's dckMassive plot hole (It took 6 months for the MC to advance from rank 1 to rank 2 while his general already advanced from rank 5 to rank 10 in that timeframe, and MC uses the most OP breathing technique)Probably a rookie work
Thanks you for this wonderful novel keep going . I have a question after tier 1 kingdom will there be an empire . Can you please add a map
For now it is ok I wil tell my review later Typicalmcb. G&hhjjnnbvggbnjjhgggggg&vvvvggdddcfgghgfghhhhhhgfdddfggh;dbdbdndhjdndhdhdhdnrjrhdnnrhrhrjrhhrjrhrhrhrhrh
A good read if you're starting out on your web novel journey. It has the elements of classic kingdom-building isekai: a system, an average Earthling MC who becomes royalty, and a straightforward plot with some twists. if you're a veteran in this world, the novel has short chapters (~500 words at the start), flat plot, flat characters, cliches.
Will this story has potential, it give good description of background and ability for what the mc can buy. unfortunately the are some big flaws I can't ignore. one story seems rush. a lot of things are happening so fast, it doesn't seem realistic. midevil time building thing super fast with manpower shortage at the beginning. The character aren't developed well. Mc get a paragraph about himself, (beside stats update), all other characters bearly have a description, and are bots that just follow orders. also the feeling I get is his ruling is a small province not a country, and is only ruling town. it feels like a mobile game where you are constantly upgrade the town. Still I like the story. idea is there just need more detail, and thought.
started off really good but started getting more and more complicating , needs more story development instead of multiple knight orders with no valid reason for existing
It is a good novel and i feel like it has great potential. keep writing and keep improving and the novel will be great.
This novel has potential and I hope it continues to be consistently updated [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Nice for now, I can't waiting for next chapter 😁. It's good but for system it's too op u know, maybe u can downgrade for reward quest n shop. It's better be stable development, n u I want see a view point from some knight n people in their kingdom it's cool
first, this author has captured lightning in a bottle. the cultivation isn't anything groundbreaking but it doesn't have to be.if i had one wish it would be increased efforts for editing. after chapter 40, you'll find yourself editing misspelled words or eliminating unnecessary words in every chapter.
I am now up to date with the latest chapters and I can only say I want more, very interesting lore, unique world, believable characters, very good novelOnly thing i think is missing is a visual map of the world in the comments or in the glossary to properly understand where everything is in relations with the Verdant Vale, thank you and keep up the awesome work.
Other than the fact that a lot of it sounds as if it was copied directly from chatgpt, it is simply plain boring The story progression is abysmal with nothing to stimulate you and dont even get me started on character design … maybe next time build characters that actually have a personality For a first time novel it is decent i guess but it still is one of the most boring novels i have ever invested my time in
This book has potential, but honestly, the first few chapters are not that good. I myself like kindom building type of books and I am cool with it being the main gocus of the book but there needs to be logic also with the breathing techniques in the book as the knights who have less talent than him are faster in advancing in rank when his max ranked celestial technique that he got for defeating some random 150 enemies is slower. I understand that a few thos soilders might have some experience and advance faster than other but considering that there is a difference of 7 ranks in technique as they are using the rank 1 infenior ranked breathing technique and he is using the rank seven technique he should be multible times faster even if the technique makes it so that he makes a steonger foundation but it would still be faster than some technique tahts 7 ranks lower than it. Anyway, the idea is great, but I would recommend the author to reconsider the technique difference. Maybe give him a lower ranked technique as the task wasn't that hard as the future tasks will be. With the max ranked technique, I don't really have any more interest in reading as there won't be anything better to get in that field at least. It could also be that the celestial technique sets the foundation slower and is faster in the later stages. If I missed something let me know.
i would be lying if i say I'm not disappointed. 1. Mc got a strong breathing Technique but still cultivates slower than his subordinates who got worse techniques than his technique. 2. Mc is brain-dead 3. a lot of cringe chapters
I love this novel, it's exactly what I was looking for for a while. In my opinion, for anyone looking for a novel in which the protagonist is intelligent and knows how to govern, this is the right place
I like, I read. Will continue read. I will make sure Luna never overcome Asher in terms of popularity to the best of my ability. Overall, nice book.
read like 30chs to give it a shot because I like kingdom building novels , army etc. but the writing style is sometimes of way , the pace is fast paced . mc become king straight away he implements changes the time skips are quick like by ch 5 there was 6month time skip and shorter time skipps I think 2 in one chapter. he doesn't ease into changes due his system . like he give cultivation manuals makes up army and implements from his past life and the character just follow there is no logic. and the secondary characters are to 1d no depth. honestly if this was fleshed out more it could have been a solid read.
Pros:Probaby will barely satisfy your demand for some kingdom bulding actionCons:Chapters are shorter than anyone's dckMassive plot hole (It took 6 months for the MC to advance from rank 1 to rank 2 while his general already advanced from rank 5 to rank 10 in that timeframe, and MC uses the most OP breathing technique)Probably a rookie work
Thanks you for this wonderful novel keep going . I have a question after tier 1 kingdom will there be an empire . Can you please add a map
For now it is ok I wil tell my review later Typicalmcb. G&hhjjnnbvggbnjjhgggggg&vvvvggdddcfgghgfghhhhhhgfdddfggh;dbdbdndhjdndhdhdhdnrjrhdnnrhrhrjrhhrjrhrhrhrhrh
A good read if you're starting out on your web novel journey. It has the elements of classic kingdom-building isekai: a system, an average Earthling MC who becomes royalty, and a straightforward plot with some twists. if you're a veteran in this world, the novel has short chapters (~500 words at the start), flat plot, flat characters, cliches.
Will this story has potential, it give good description of background and ability for what the mc can buy. unfortunately the are some big flaws I can't ignore. one story seems rush. a lot of things are happening so fast, it doesn't seem realistic. midevil time building thing super fast with manpower shortage at the beginning. The character aren't developed well. Mc get a paragraph about himself, (beside stats update), all other characters bearly have a description, and are bots that just follow orders. also the feeling I get is his ruling is a small province not a country, and is only ruling town. it feels like a mobile game where you are constantly upgrade the town. Still I like the story. idea is there just need more detail, and thought.
started off really good but started getting more and more complicating , needs more story development instead of multiple knight orders with no valid reason for existing
It is a good novel and i feel like it has great potential. keep writing and keep improving and the novel will be great.
This novel has potential and I hope it continues to be consistently updated [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Nice for now, I can't waiting for next chapter 😁. It's good but for system it's too op u know, maybe u can downgrade for reward quest n shop. It's better be stable development, n u I want see a view point from some knight n people in their kingdom it's cool
first, this author has captured lightning in a bottle. the cultivation isn't anything groundbreaking but it doesn't have to be.if i had one wish it would be increased efforts for editing. after chapter 40, you'll find yourself editing misspelled words or eliminating unnecessary words in every chapter.