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pretty good! but ive only read the first chapter. some grammatical errors, maybe can build world a bit better, yup! have to fill out characters lol
this is a pretty incredible novel i must say. i went into this not thinking to much and i can honestly say I'm really impressed. i love your style of writing and the word building you've done and i will props stick around if you decide to continue this to the end. thanks for giving me something to look forward to : )
I love the work, keep it up. I hope you balance your school life and this novel. Some minor issues but they don't shy away the greatness of this novel.
Love the potential of the novel, it has great thought behind it. I love it so far. While the past tense does sometimes slip, it doesn't distract from the overall emotions. For a High School Student great work, I recommend that you read this.
some parts of the story could be improved, but overall it is good. The characters suit their personality really well, I do think that you should work on some grammar and some words are used in weird context. Overall a good read.
Interesting concept and nice world building. First few chapters seem a little slow and doesn't flow well. Overall would recommend a read. Not for everyone.
This book is a bit more fancy than others (which I personally prefer). Plot is good so far, it builds on more and more information and it gets kinda interesting later on. Suspenseful, Characters are pretty cool and as a shipper, I will do Wallace x Isla.
这是个十分有趣的故事，这个故事的情节犹如天马行空，是个关于冒险，玄幻热血的故事。我十分的敬佩这位作者的丰富想象力，这故事丰富的开拓了读者的想象力和思维能力，其中的情节更能把人带入其中，让人乐此不疲。个人非常喜欢这个故事情节，十分推荐对于那些喜欢玄幻故事的人阅读。希望作者可以继续写出更多类似的故事，本人十分期待下一部作品。
Very good book, however the first few chapters could have a more better delivery, as it is confusing in come parts of the story. Anyways HALO
Solid work. It's considered on the long end but it's a different kind of read. It's pretty unique in writing style Nice job. I think chapters should be split up a bit more e.g. around 1.5k to 2.5k but take this as a pinch of salt. Overall, good so far.
This is so good for a high schooler good job. Make sure to keep going and enjoy yourself while writing don’t tire yourself out trying to put as many chapters as possible.
Hi, I'm the Author of this book. I want to first say that I appreciate all of your continued support for this book🙏. To my dedicated readers, I appreciate all your feedback and the time you've given to this story in order for me to improve. This novel was started 3 years ago as a passion project and I will continue doing so. This book that I'll be writing will have a mix of action, romance, adventure and mystery. There's a lotta lore behind this, so feel free to investigate or search terms up yourself if you don't understand anything. PS: Marcus and Clara say Hello! 👋
pretty good! but ive only read the first chapter. some grammatical errors, maybe can build world a bit better, yup! have to fill out characters lol
this is a pretty incredible novel i must say. i went into this not thinking to much and i can honestly say I'm really impressed. i love your style of writing and the word building you've done and i will props stick around if you decide to continue this to the end. thanks for giving me something to look forward to : )
I love the work, keep it up. I hope you balance your school life and this novel. Some minor issues but they don't shy away the greatness of this novel.
Love the potential of the novel, it has great thought behind it. I love it so far. While the past tense does sometimes slip, it doesn't distract from the overall emotions. For a High School Student great work, I recommend that you read this.
some parts of the story could be improved, but overall it is good. The characters suit their personality really well, I do think that you should work on some grammar and some words are used in weird context. Overall a good read.
Interesting concept and nice world building. First few chapters seem a little slow and doesn't flow well. Overall would recommend a read. Not for everyone.
This book is a bit more fancy than others (which I personally prefer). Plot is good so far, it builds on more and more information and it gets kinda interesting later on. Suspenseful, Characters are pretty cool and as a shipper, I will do Wallace x Isla.
这是个十分有趣的故事，这个故事的情节犹如天马行空，是个关于冒险，玄幻热血的故事。我十分的敬佩这位作者的丰富想象力，这故事丰富的开拓了读者的想象力和思维能力，其中的情节更能把人带入其中，让人乐此不疲。个人非常喜欢这个故事情节，十分推荐对于那些喜欢玄幻故事的人阅读。希望作者可以继续写出更多类似的故事，本人十分期待下一部作品。
Very good book, however the first few chapters could have a more better delivery, as it is confusing in come parts of the story. Anyways HALO
Solid work. It's considered on the long end but it's a different kind of read. It's pretty unique in writing style Nice job. I think chapters should be split up a bit more e.g. around 1.5k to 2.5k but take this as a pinch of salt. Overall, good so far.
This is so good for a high schooler good job. Make sure to keep going and enjoy yourself while writing don’t tire yourself out trying to put as many chapters as possible.
Hi, I'm the Author of this book. I want to first say that I appreciate all of your continued support for this book🙏. To my dedicated readers, I appreciate all your feedback and the time you've given to this story in order for me to improve. This novel was started 3 years ago as a passion project and I will continue doing so. This book that I'll be writing will have a mix of action, romance, adventure and mystery. There's a lotta lore behind this, so feel free to investigate or search terms up yourself if you don't understand anything. PS: Marcus and Clara say Hello! 👋