Reviews of The Grind (And Helping Heather Potter) [Book 2] by Daddy - Webnovel

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SURPASSEDEMPEROR

the Grind AU came to read the novel only for one thing GAMER fic, persevered enough to reach chapter 9 but I can say I am done. Nice system idea, but the story is so thick with the smell of plot and cringe shit that I needed 2 days to just read 9 chaps which according to author should be around 45k words. Smut is there fine it's just that this being AU the author twisted the personality of some character to such a level that it kind of surprised me(not in a good way but more in a this can't be happening). Read at your own risk, better to read this first i on your journey to fanfiction be it gamer or hp if not you will just due of cringe. I may comeback someday to finish the story but let's just hope I don't skip the story at that time.

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Danule
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I love all of your stories. they each have a little trouble starting off but when you get going you get freaking going

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Djabilong

It's awful. Initial rating was 3/5 since, despite absolutely insufferable protag, the story itself was (initially) written pretty well overall. But then everything good it had went downhill and everything that was already bad became even worse. 1) System is pointless and is actually a detriment, considering that rise in stats means nothing (there's literally no difference between having social skills like Speech/Persuasion/Negotiation at zero or at fifty - mc still acts like a brainless stuttering nob with a foot in his mouth regardless) and fourth year mudblood brats somehow have higher stats than a pureblood adult with a system who graduated a year ago and studied his entire life; 2) there is everything wrong with main char without a single redeemable quality; 3) any stupid decision is handwaved with "it's AU"; 4) tone of the story is straight up schizophrenic - one moment it's serious, then it's suddenly a pure smut story, then it's a crackfic with random unexplained asspulls that come and go, <...>. Sucks away your soul harder than any dementor could dream of.

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Zobemaru_II

Система играет некоторую роль лишь в самом начале истории. В дальнейшем же это просто гарем (с элементами порно) с составом участниц на любой вкус и цвет. Второй том и игра престолов? Убежал, как только понял новую тему. Нам не по пути

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Azazeal

one of the best storys's. that just keeps getting better. brilliant work

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Wolcrawler12

Uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii

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Tenoutof10r

hell yeah never expected a book two but I can't wait

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Logan_Smith_0665

I really liked this story if you do a crossover DXD or DC would work great. if world hopping then that is great too.

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Queen_Karina

One of the best Harry Potter fics on here. The author does so well when writing different personalities. This is a must read

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Erick200

Melhor fanfic de Harry Potter que já li, espero que o autor realmente faça o livro 2 dessa história ....................... .........................................................

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Ding_Bong

This is one of the only HP fanfics I’ve read where Ron finally just gets booted(thank you). Also Heather felt very genuine compared to other Fanfic where female potters feel like Harry under a gender-bend potion, if that made any sense. Overall one of the better stories I’ve read, and the “plot” is very well spaced and not thrown in your face too much. Besides that, fleur got a little annoying.

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The_Dark_Hydrax

Please, oh, great benevolent Author, bestow upon us a new arc of this wonderful story that may include multiversal travel or maybe even a mash-up world or something like that since gamer systems are literally designed to make their hosts multiversal powerhouses and whatnot so in a way this guy's journey just started so pretty please with a cherry on top?

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striker45

Loved the story, had different character traits no one seemed one dimensional has some flare too The pacing was too farst for me but other than that enjoyed it a lot

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AvidReader962

Great story! The MC is hard working, intelligent, and eventually very powerful, as well as very likable. The story has a great plot with excellent lemons interspersed throughout, with the relationships being very well done. 10 out of 10, highly recommend.

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JoseOfTerrasen

Una bonita historia, con todas las escenas eroticas que uno querria sin quitar el hecho de que hay una historia que contar. Buen trabajo. ----------------------------------------------------------------- -------------------------------------- ------------------

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ArgosYesu

Definitely one of, if not the, best HP fanfic. It’s not even a joke that it gets all five stars. MC is fun, the harem is fun, Dumbledore is hilarious and definitely the best version of himself, and the grind has been grinded. Hope for a continuation of this in some form after it finishes. And yes, it has a clean finish.

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BurglarOfTurds

only 3 chapters in but it's very well written especially for a fanfiction on this app lol.honestly just digging the interactions and the characters feel pretty real to me. but it might just be because he petted his cat and gave her friskies so 10/10

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Twasasetup

Some random guy gets the gamer system and starts banging all the chicks while claiming to have some inexplicable bond to each and everyone of them since their first meeting. The End.

1yr
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NoonStar99

Best quality HP story I have read then came out of left field when it was technically finished. I look forward to seeing your next works you could say I have my eye on you :)

1yr
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HalfazHipocrite

As with most harem novels never enough time for character development with so many gals jumping headfirst into it. Very nice spicy scenes. Luna is the best!

1yr
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Kaheem_Edmonds

I love the creativity and how you got rid of some the more questionable characters such as Malloy but kept the crazy misguided Bella and a smarter harry potter im female form and if is to get the black family magic make sure he the tanks has to but with out the clumsiness that comes with if his is a dog and mother is a cat what will his animagus be that is the question

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MagusTheSupreme

great great great great great great great great great

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jeiquer

I sincerely hope that the story goes further than the tournament since from what we have seen it does not seem like it, which would be very disappointing. The truth is, it is one of the best Harry Potter fan-fics that I have read (Google Translator)

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Jose_matos

I would like to like this story but the mc is way to passive and easily dominated by all the girls with romantic interest in him. They just push him around an he accepts it like it’s normal. Everything he does is because of the girls.

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Jetboy76

I absolutely love the little interactions with all the characters especially Dumbledore he is so funny I have died laughing so many times highly recommend!

1yr
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DaoistyQNGiX

One of the worst MCs in any Harry Potter fanfic story that I have ever read. Pathetic, dumb, super beta MC so do not bother unless you love stories like that.

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mastermanking

it's OK, I liked it at first but it's kinda meh now for me, especially the yuri element I'm seeing so good story just not my taste

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The_Bored_Immortal

It's annoying how good this is, I usually dislike OC and lemon heavy fics but this is genuinely entertaining and engaging, with amazing grammar

1yr
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SURPASSEDEMPEROR

the Grind AU came to read the novel only for one thing GAMER fic, persevered enough to reach chapter 9 but I can say I am done. Nice system idea, but the story is so thick with the smell of plot and cringe shit that I needed 2 days to just read 9 chaps which according to author should be around 45k words. Smut is there fine it's just that this being AU the author twisted the personality of some character to such a level that it kind of surprised me(not in a good way but more in a this can't be happening). Read at your own risk, better to read this first i on your journey to fanfiction be it gamer or hp if not you will just due of cringe. I may comeback someday to finish the story but let's just hope I don't skip the story at that time.

2mth
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Danule
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I love all of your stories. they each have a little trouble starting off but when you get going you get freaking going

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Djabilong

It's awful. Initial rating was 3/5 since, despite absolutely insufferable protag, the story itself was (initially) written pretty well overall. But then everything good it had went downhill and everything that was already bad became even worse. 1) System is pointless and is actually a detriment, considering that rise in stats means nothing (there's literally no difference between having social skills like Speech/Persuasion/Negotiation at zero or at fifty - mc still acts like a brainless stuttering nob with a foot in his mouth regardless) and fourth year mudblood brats somehow have higher stats than a pureblood adult with a system who graduated a year ago and studied his entire life; 2) there is everything wrong with main char without a single redeemable quality; 3) any stupid decision is handwaved with "it's AU"; 4) tone of the story is straight up schizophrenic - one moment it's serious, then it's suddenly a pure smut story, then it's a crackfic with random unexplained asspulls that come and go, <...>. Sucks away your soul harder than any dementor could dream of.

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4mth
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Zobemaru_II

Система играет некоторую роль лишь в самом начале истории. В дальнейшем же это просто гарем (с элементами порно) с составом участниц на любой вкус и цвет. Второй том и игра престолов? Убежал, как только понял новую тему. Нам не по пути

4mth
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Azazeal

one of the best storys's. that just keeps getting better. brilliant work

6mth
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Wolcrawler12

Uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii

6mth
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Tenoutof10r

hell yeah never expected a book two but I can't wait

7mth
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Logan_Smith_0665

I really liked this story if you do a crossover DXD or DC would work great. if world hopping then that is great too.

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Queen_Karina

One of the best Harry Potter fics on here. The author does so well when writing different personalities. This is a must read

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Erick200

Melhor fanfic de Harry Potter que já li, espero que o autor realmente faça o livro 2 dessa história ....................... .........................................................

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WML
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Ding_Bong

This is one of the only HP fanfics I’ve read where Ron finally just gets booted(thank you). Also Heather felt very genuine compared to other Fanfic where female potters feel like Harry under a gender-bend potion, if that made any sense. Overall one of the better stories I’ve read, and the “plot” is very well spaced and not thrown in your face too much. Besides that, fleur got a little annoying.

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The_Dark_Hydrax

Please, oh, great benevolent Author, bestow upon us a new arc of this wonderful story that may include multiversal travel or maybe even a mash-up world or something like that since gamer systems are literally designed to make their hosts multiversal powerhouses and whatnot so in a way this guy's journey just started so pretty please with a cherry on top?

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striker45

Loved the story, had different character traits no one seemed one dimensional has some flare too The pacing was too farst for me but other than that enjoyed it a lot

1yr
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AvidReader962

Great story! The MC is hard working, intelligent, and eventually very powerful, as well as very likable. The story has a great plot with excellent lemons interspersed throughout, with the relationships being very well done. 10 out of 10, highly recommend.

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JoseOfTerrasen

Una bonita historia, con todas las escenas eroticas que uno querria sin quitar el hecho de que hay una historia que contar. Buen trabajo. ----------------------------------------------------------------- -------------------------------------- ------------------

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ArgosYesu

Definitely one of, if not the, best HP fanfic. It’s not even a joke that it gets all five stars. MC is fun, the harem is fun, Dumbledore is hilarious and definitely the best version of himself, and the grind has been grinded. Hope for a continuation of this in some form after it finishes. And yes, it has a clean finish.

1yr
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BurglarOfTurds

only 3 chapters in but it's very well written especially for a fanfiction on this app lol.honestly just digging the interactions and the characters feel pretty real to me. but it might just be because he petted his cat and gave her friskies so 10/10

1yr
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Twasasetup

Some random guy gets the gamer system and starts banging all the chicks while claiming to have some inexplicable bond to each and everyone of them since their first meeting. The End.

1yr
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NoonStar99

Best quality HP story I have read then came out of left field when it was technically finished. I look forward to seeing your next works you could say I have my eye on you :)

1yr
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HalfazHipocrite

As with most harem novels never enough time for character development with so many gals jumping headfirst into it. Very nice spicy scenes. Luna is the best!

1yr
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Kaheem_Edmonds

I love the creativity and how you got rid of some the more questionable characters such as Malloy but kept the crazy misguided Bella and a smarter harry potter im female form and if is to get the black family magic make sure he the tanks has to but with out the clumsiness that comes with if his is a dog and mother is a cat what will his animagus be that is the question

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MagusTheSupreme

great great great great great great great great great

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jeiquer

I sincerely hope that the story goes further than the tournament since from what we have seen it does not seem like it, which would be very disappointing. The truth is, it is one of the best Harry Potter fan-fics that I have read (Google Translator)

1yr
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Jose_matos

I would like to like this story but the mc is way to passive and easily dominated by all the girls with romantic interest in him. They just push him around an he accepts it like it’s normal. Everything he does is because of the girls.

1yr
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Jetboy76

I absolutely love the little interactions with all the characters especially Dumbledore he is so funny I have died laughing so many times highly recommend!

1yr
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DaoistyQNGiX

One of the worst MCs in any Harry Potter fanfic story that I have ever read. Pathetic, dumb, super beta MC so do not bother unless you love stories like that.

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mastermanking

it's OK, I liked it at first but it's kinda meh now for me, especially the yuri element I'm seeing so good story just not my taste

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The_Bored_Immortal

It's annoying how good this is, I usually dislike OC and lemon heavy fics but this is genuinely entertaining and engaging, with amazing grammar

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