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Is good, don't feel discouraged by the comments. They are people who have such sad lives that they have to imagine that they are the MC of the story to make themselves feel better. If you are not that type of reader, give it a try. The supposed cheating is not something out of this world.
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I know people think that this sucks due to the fact the fact that's a little ntr at the beginning but please be reminded that the world he reincarnated in is a mixture of Korean fighting mnahaea verse, real world and hentai world so ntr is natural but he prevent it my friends so don't worry, the whole story is great read it, believe even those rating with 4.7 I dropped if they truly sucks
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Hello. I would like some pieces of advices from you. How can I write like you? I have been reading your ff since the early days 'Life with the Author's ff. I have also read 'More than a dragon Warrior ' (It's quite good. I have read more than a few dozen chapters of it, past the point where he reconciles with shifu. That part was truly beautiful. But I haven't read more than that since it wasn't really my cup of tea. Don't get me wrong tho, it was amazing. I might read it later tho.) and I have been reading this since the first chapter. I genuinely enjoy your work and your work along with others has given me a great deal of inspiration to write my own ff (especially you). I have tons of ideas and have even written quite a few of them but kept them saved and haven't uploaded them due to poor quality. But I will admit that my current writing is far, far superior than when I first started. But I still know it can get quite better. Your writing style is the one I am most impressed with and look up to and so I have come to you for advice. If you could answer my questions and give me advice, I would be very grateful to you. How exactly can I write like you? Did you also take inspiration from someone else? If so, how did you begin to write like them? Any tips and tricks are welcomed.
Trash always trash even when u recycle it... Like the mc story it self... What happen to forget his first girl..........................................
No lo leí, solo el capítulo auxiliar así que te dejo un 3 estrellas. Sinceramente no me gusta el casi NTR( se que no lo fue no tienes que repetirlo) Segundo cuando leí chicas yanderes y dependientes del prota hasta ahí llegue ya que me molestan mucho esas mujeres ( Muerte a Yuno Gasai) suerte autor sigue con el buen trabajo (aunque ni lo leí pero Meh) no le hagas caso a las niñas que critican tanto por aca
Está demasiado god espero el próximo cap quiero saber si meteras mas animes como las quintillizas o otro q estén súper god, la historia en si esta demaciado buena te atrapa por completo mis partes favoritas son las de peleas ❤️
man, I'm loving yo shi, I came back, and this time better and stronger to comment and read your book.
If people read past the cheating part, they will find an amazing story. So people grow up and just read
muy buena historia, me encanto, lo leí todo en un estado de frenesí lectoral..... buena historia, sigue así hermano, tu historia de demon slayer también esta entretenida. por cierto, léete el manga de komisan
one best story have i ever read I don't have words to describe it annnnnnnd WHERE ARE . YOU . ATHUER
4/2/4/3/5. Novel died and I'm quite happy it did. Let me explain; The start of the story begins with MC finding out hes in a ntr doujin, with his girlfriend being the star girl. Problem is that he has grown up with her, theyre not only childhood friends but legitimately love each other. What does the MC do? Does he instantly break up with her? No, he gets proof of the situation and finds out what kind of person she actually is. He busts into the hotel room and absolutely demolished the guy and broke up with her right there. Cool, nice, fantastic even. Bro proved to her and himself that she isnt worth it and leaves, only to turn around and walk her back home(disappointing but whatever.) Could have been handled better all around but obviously don't trust a hentai girl. Which she admits to him! Cool, glad we're on the same page. Now like others, I was disgusted but accepted it as character progression and moved on. Read quite happily till the furry girl was added in but continued on anyway till i hit whatever chapter is shown next to my review, 104? 5? whatever its irrelevant because at the time i got curious about something and decided to spoil myself with chapter titles. And then I checked the latest titles and thought 'no way this author is going to be so moronic as to bring back the thot, right?' Wrong.
I love it it’s hard to get me interested in anything but this I love it it’s so funny and great character
very good fanfiction, nothing's wrong with it and really fun to read the only downside that i see from the others is the ntr? from early chapters. but it's really not that heavy to read it but I think everyone just becomes a mindless reader when the ntr comes in 🤦🏻
Incredible, i didnt think there was a book that could mix genres such as slice of life, martial arts, harem, and so much more in this way, even more so in a fanfic, while the beginning may be extremely misleading, as long as you can understand that the characters aren't perfect, for this is not a wish fullfillment novel, and you read while comprehending, then you will love this book, straight up.
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It seems that there is only one comment left to reach 4 stars... let me fix that. I hope this finally reaches its well-deserved 4 stars, although unfortunately it cannot reach 5 at least we can get 4.
Mano é raro encontrar boas histórias desse tipo você equilibrou perfeitamente romance ação e a conversa com autor sem dúvidas uma boa ideia seu livro é incrível espero que continue escrevendo não ligue para os comentários negativos só são pessoas com inveja 🤔🤔🤔👍😁😁😁😁👍👍👍👍
While not a 5 star is still very good. The stat was shakey with the “ntr” he just lost his girl she wasn’t taken he left her since she was a Thot, it also led to good character development from bother the mc and the chick. The worst part is the later chapters how something’s are listed as events instead of explained. I’m only commenting since I seen the author mock the ratings and after reading it these ratings aren’t fair at all
NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.
Bro and sis, if you see this book, read it immediately, we guarantee that this is a MASTERPIECE BROOO, what's more, the author's delivery of the character development and also every emotional outpouring In every word so read and read this
The author respects you for this work of fanfiction, as for me it turned out to be a wonderful skating rink against the one against whoever understands will understand.
I take back my words, this is a masterpiece, author I love this work, keep it up, trust me everyone you will not regret reading this
You should definitely read this. Reading this was certainly the best decision I've made in recent times. The depth of the characters is captivating, and the author's genius in managing to convey the feelings that the MC is expressing in each sentence is surreal. Don't pay attention to these bots that talk about NTR; they certainly fell in chapter 8 and didn't follow the outcome of the story. Believe me, you can read without fear. ( I'm using a translator )
I never hate when people do some bad reviews but this story are to much. THERE IS NO NTR. And the girl do nothing with the ntr guy and she was forced And she she have a big redemption arc even she was forced and the ntr is like 1 or 2 chapter. Thats disgusting when you see a lot of people lied about this peak and thats YOUR fault if the author dont realese new chapters.
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Is good, don't feel discouraged by the comments. They are people who have such sad lives that they have to imagine that they are the MC of the story to make themselves feel better. If you are not that type of reader, give it a try. The supposed cheating is not something out of this world.
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I know people think that this sucks due to the fact the fact that's a little ntr at the beginning but please be reminded that the world he reincarnated in is a mixture of Korean fighting mnahaea verse, real world and hentai world so ntr is natural but he prevent it my friends so don't worry, the whole story is great read it, believe even those rating with 4.7 I dropped if they truly sucks
Just so you know, I'm still waiting for the new update [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Hello. I would like some pieces of advices from you. How can I write like you? I have been reading your ff since the early days 'Life with the Author's ff. I have also read 'More than a dragon Warrior ' (It's quite good. I have read more than a few dozen chapters of it, past the point where he reconciles with shifu. That part was truly beautiful. But I haven't read more than that since it wasn't really my cup of tea. Don't get me wrong tho, it was amazing. I might read it later tho.) and I have been reading this since the first chapter. I genuinely enjoy your work and your work along with others has given me a great deal of inspiration to write my own ff (especially you). I have tons of ideas and have even written quite a few of them but kept them saved and haven't uploaded them due to poor quality. But I will admit that my current writing is far, far superior than when I first started. But I still know it can get quite better. Your writing style is the one I am most impressed with and look up to and so I have come to you for advice. If you could answer my questions and give me advice, I would be very grateful to you. How exactly can I write like you? Did you also take inspiration from someone else? If so, how did you begin to write like them? Any tips and tricks are welcomed.
Trash always trash even when u recycle it... Like the mc story it self... What happen to forget his first girl..........................................
No lo leí, solo el capítulo auxiliar así que te dejo un 3 estrellas. Sinceramente no me gusta el casi NTR( se que no lo fue no tienes que repetirlo) Segundo cuando leí chicas yanderes y dependientes del prota hasta ahí llegue ya que me molestan mucho esas mujeres ( Muerte a Yuno Gasai) suerte autor sigue con el buen trabajo (aunque ni lo leí pero Meh) no le hagas caso a las niñas que critican tanto por aca
Está demasiado god espero el próximo cap quiero saber si meteras mas animes como las quintillizas o otro q estén súper god, la historia en si esta demaciado buena te atrapa por completo mis partes favoritas son las de peleas ❤️
man, I'm loving yo shi, I came back, and this time better and stronger to comment and read your book.
If people read past the cheating part, they will find an amazing story. So people grow up and just read
muy buena historia, me encanto, lo leí todo en un estado de frenesí lectoral..... buena historia, sigue así hermano, tu historia de demon slayer también esta entretenida. por cierto, léete el manga de komisan
one best story have i ever read I don't have words to describe it annnnnnnd WHERE ARE . YOU . ATHUER
4/2/4/3/5. Novel died and I'm quite happy it did. Let me explain; The start of the story begins with MC finding out hes in a ntr doujin, with his girlfriend being the star girl. Problem is that he has grown up with her, theyre not only childhood friends but legitimately love each other. What does the MC do? Does he instantly break up with her? No, he gets proof of the situation and finds out what kind of person she actually is. He busts into the hotel room and absolutely demolished the guy and broke up with her right there. Cool, nice, fantastic even. Bro proved to her and himself that she isnt worth it and leaves, only to turn around and walk her back home(disappointing but whatever.) Could have been handled better all around but obviously don't trust a hentai girl. Which she admits to him! Cool, glad we're on the same page. Now like others, I was disgusted but accepted it as character progression and moved on. Read quite happily till the furry girl was added in but continued on anyway till i hit whatever chapter is shown next to my review, 104? 5? whatever its irrelevant because at the time i got curious about something and decided to spoil myself with chapter titles. And then I checked the latest titles and thought 'no way this author is going to be so moronic as to bring back the thot, right?' Wrong.
I love it it’s hard to get me interested in anything but this I love it it’s so funny and great character
very good fanfiction, nothing's wrong with it and really fun to read the only downside that i see from the others is the ntr? from early chapters. but it's really not that heavy to read it but I think everyone just becomes a mindless reader when the ntr comes in 🤦🏻
Incredible, i didnt think there was a book that could mix genres such as slice of life, martial arts, harem, and so much more in this way, even more so in a fanfic, while the beginning may be extremely misleading, as long as you can understand that the characters aren't perfect, for this is not a wish fullfillment novel, and you read while comprehending, then you will love this book, straight up.
Perfect master piece 👌xdxdxdxxdxdxdxddxxdxdxdxxdxdxdxdxdxxxdxxdxxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxrxdxdxdxdxdxxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxdxxdxdxdxdxdxd
It seems that there is only one comment left to reach 4 stars... let me fix that. I hope this finally reaches its well-deserved 4 stars, although unfortunately it cannot reach 5 at least we can get 4.
Mano é raro encontrar boas histórias desse tipo você equilibrou perfeitamente romance ação e a conversa com autor sem dúvidas uma boa ideia seu livro é incrível espero que continue escrevendo não ligue para os comentários negativos só são pessoas com inveja 🤔🤔🤔👍😁😁😁😁👍👍👍👍
While not a 5 star is still very good. The stat was shakey with the “ntr” he just lost his girl she wasn’t taken he left her since she was a Thot, it also led to good character development from bother the mc and the chick. The worst part is the later chapters how something’s are listed as events instead of explained. I’m only commenting since I seen the author mock the ratings and after reading it these ratings aren’t fair at all
NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.NO ES NTR. NO ES NTR.
Bro and sis, if you see this book, read it immediately, we guarantee that this is a MASTERPIECE BROOO, what's more, the author's delivery of the character development and also every emotional outpouring In every word so read and read this
The author respects you for this work of fanfiction, as for me it turned out to be a wonderful skating rink against the one against whoever understands will understand.
I take back my words, this is a masterpiece, author I love this work, keep it up, trust me everyone you will not regret reading this
You should definitely read this. Reading this was certainly the best decision I've made in recent times. The depth of the characters is captivating, and the author's genius in managing to convey the feelings that the MC is expressing in each sentence is surreal. Don't pay attention to these bots that talk about NTR; they certainly fell in chapter 8 and didn't follow the outcome of the story. Believe me, you can read without fear. ( I'm using a translator )
I never hate when people do some bad reviews but this story are to much. THERE IS NO NTR. And the girl do nothing with the ntr guy and she was forced And she she have a big redemption arc even she was forced and the ntr is like 1 or 2 chapter. Thats disgusting when you see a lot of people lied about this peak and thats YOUR fault if the author dont realese new chapters.