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copying other works. genderbend thing (you didn't lack pretty girls but still genderbend?). he has too many abilities, which will confuse the readers.
Has potential, but ruined by the author of not mastering only 1 or 2 powers and making others supplementary. but bundled him up with so many powers and different energies. At the beginning he said that 'should master the skills and not rely on system or assistance of others' but look at him. Heh. Should've been a good story though, but not my cup of tea.
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good story, but the rbwb arc was boring and the mc get to op from basically canon fodder was too fast. interaction between character was fun.
So… I’ve been reading this fic for awhile and honestly it’s been hard to get through the early chapters. But the more you go on, it becomes less of “too much inspiration” and more “drags on for far too long”. It’s good and pretty neat. But I guess even as an avid reader, it’s just becomes a bit monotonous if you see too much of the same thing and constant? Anyway, it’s a good read, just don’t end up in the same pitfall like I did.
Are you saying that it doesn't make sense for a group chat to be all women except the MC? So, changing Rimuru's gender does? That reminds me of Netflix or Disney, who are always changing the color of the characters. Well, other than that I don't have much to say. The rest is fine I think.
Why did you have to turn him into a woman? It reminds me of those fanfics that change the gender of the protagonist just to stay with the harem. It seems more like an internal desire of the author. I'm sorry, but I can't continue reading. I don't like it when they change characters' personalities or genders just to please their MC.
Ima be honest this got boring, and I have been on edge about dropping this for a while now. It kept getting more boring and decided to finally stop. (the upload speed doesn't help either) Grammar is good you won't have problems reading, there are some mistakes here and there but overall 5 stars. Development is slow (and to me boring) but it's going and it's not bad, it's not great either though 3 stars. Character design is okay but the mc is bland 3 stars. Updates are...A thing I guess. Slow but you will eventually get a chapter, when? Whenever the author remembers this exists 2 stars. World background. It's a thing but don't get too excited about it 4 stars. TL;DR? Nothing special but it's a good read when out of stuff to read.
It is a realy good novel,the caracthers are good and world bulding too,the biggest problem is that the mc sometimes is realy cringe.I am enjoyng the novel for now. On chapter 65, also english is not my first languague so it is not th best WHERE IS THE FATE WORLD AUTHOR?!!?(jk,but please fate when mc gets stonger)
I like the book before but after mc gaining powerful op abilities left and right started getting bad I thought it will focus more to Honkai (the reason I read) because of the title but the author give it little time if he did it just wholesome chapter there's no progression at all but instead it focus more to chat group and it's members
I like the story development and the way you made mc be and I hope you are continuing with this fanfic keep up the good work and ok of course wish you good health
I don't really know the story of Honkai but I'm having fun reading this.
It's well written, but I think it's better to combine the various types of energy into one type of energy, because more energy variations are too confusing and pointless and also provide a clear power ranking, because the power level is too ambiguous.
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This is my honest review until chapter 6, I wasn't expecting much but I was pleasantly surprised, it's fun and the interactions are quite pleasant and credible, I hope you continue your good work
Despite having few chapters and a pace that would generally bother me, this story is surprisingly enjoyable to read. Despite having few chapters and a pace that would generally bother me, this story is surprisingly enjoyable to read.
I really like the story but I have a big question, did he have all C.C power? if yes then he is already overpowered with just her template Controlling mankind is easy with her template because she's the mankind itself
I'm absolutely certain that the author of the fic has copied other stories pretty much word for word one of the ones i know of is at least the early parts of Annihilation Maker DXD mostly the mc and Kazuma interaction.
I really like the whole setting and how you connect all those different worlds an their characters. BUT: I believe the whole thing with Monika is getting a bit overboard. If we follow your thoughts, Monika could easily analyze the complete Chat Room System and change it however she wants, even becoming the Admin or at least another Admin. She should be able to create an AI, no questions needed but this would be just a normal AI without any powers and it will never become something like Sage or its other evolutions. If you really want her to become such an overpowered Mary Sue then just give her the Reality Stone from Marvel + the Soul Stone, since technically she is just a program without a real soul! Sorry for the little rant. I just believe everything should be more balanced and the growth of their individual powers and abilities should be slower. Let them travel more worlds, give your characters more time to grow bit by bit, not too slow and not too fast. I have seen so many promising and interesting stories, where the MC got too OP too quickly and the author either nerved him out of nowhere or created so immense overpowered antagonists that everything was getting so bland and boring, that the author finally decided to drop it completely... I hope you give everything that I just said some thoughts. Your fanfiction does so many aspects right that I will follow it until the end. Good Luck + Motivation
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It's Honkai Impact fanfic, hope can fill and distract me from how Honkai Impact: Invictus author got Isekai'ed.
No one would want to admit that their creation is bad, so I obviously rate this 5 starts.... Still though, this is a case of "Fine, I'll do it myself". I couldn't find a book with the scenario and the content I wanted, so I decided that if it doesn't exist, I will create it... I do hope you will find this work to be an interesting and enjoyable read
copying other works. genderbend thing (you didn't lack pretty girls but still genderbend?). he has too many abilities, which will confuse the readers.
Has potential, but ruined by the author of not mastering only 1 or 2 powers and making others supplementary. but bundled him up with so many powers and different energies. At the beginning he said that 'should master the skills and not rely on system or assistance of others' but look at him. Heh. Should've been a good story though, but not my cup of tea.
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good story, but the rbwb arc was boring and the mc get to op from basically canon fodder was too fast. interaction between character was fun.
So… I’ve been reading this fic for awhile and honestly it’s been hard to get through the early chapters. But the more you go on, it becomes less of “too much inspiration” and more “drags on for far too long”. It’s good and pretty neat. But I guess even as an avid reader, it’s just becomes a bit monotonous if you see too much of the same thing and constant? Anyway, it’s a good read, just don’t end up in the same pitfall like I did.
Are you saying that it doesn't make sense for a group chat to be all women except the MC? So, changing Rimuru's gender does? That reminds me of Netflix or Disney, who are always changing the color of the characters. Well, other than that I don't have much to say. The rest is fine I think.
Why did you have to turn him into a woman? It reminds me of those fanfics that change the gender of the protagonist just to stay with the harem. It seems more like an internal desire of the author. I'm sorry, but I can't continue reading. I don't like it when they change characters' personalities or genders just to please their MC.
Ima be honest this got boring, and I have been on edge about dropping this for a while now. It kept getting more boring and decided to finally stop. (the upload speed doesn't help either) Grammar is good you won't have problems reading, there are some mistakes here and there but overall 5 stars. Development is slow (and to me boring) but it's going and it's not bad, it's not great either though 3 stars. Character design is okay but the mc is bland 3 stars. Updates are...A thing I guess. Slow but you will eventually get a chapter, when? Whenever the author remembers this exists 2 stars. World background. It's a thing but don't get too excited about it 4 stars. TL;DR? Nothing special but it's a good read when out of stuff to read.
It is a realy good novel,the caracthers are good and world bulding too,the biggest problem is that the mc sometimes is realy cringe.I am enjoyng the novel for now. On chapter 65, also english is not my first languague so it is not th best WHERE IS THE FATE WORLD AUTHOR?!!?(jk,but please fate when mc gets stonger)
I like the book before but after mc gaining powerful op abilities left and right started getting bad I thought it will focus more to Honkai (the reason I read) because of the title but the author give it little time if he did it just wholesome chapter there's no progression at all but instead it focus more to chat group and it's members
I like the story development and the way you made mc be and I hope you are continuing with this fanfic keep up the good work and ok of course wish you good health
I don't really know the story of Honkai but I'm having fun reading this.
It's well written, but I think it's better to combine the various types of energy into one type of energy, because more energy variations are too confusing and pointless and also provide a clear power ranking, because the power level is too ambiguous.
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This is my honest review until chapter 6, I wasn't expecting much but I was pleasantly surprised, it's fun and the interactions are quite pleasant and credible, I hope you continue your good work
Despite having few chapters and a pace that would generally bother me, this story is surprisingly enjoyable to read. Despite having few chapters and a pace that would generally bother me, this story is surprisingly enjoyable to read.
I really like the story but I have a big question, did he have all C.C power? if yes then he is already overpowered with just her template Controlling mankind is easy with her template because she's the mankind itself
I'm absolutely certain that the author of the fic has copied other stories pretty much word for word one of the ones i know of is at least the early parts of Annihilation Maker DXD mostly the mc and Kazuma interaction.
I really like the whole setting and how you connect all those different worlds an their characters. BUT: I believe the whole thing with Monika is getting a bit overboard. If we follow your thoughts, Monika could easily analyze the complete Chat Room System and change it however she wants, even becoming the Admin or at least another Admin. She should be able to create an AI, no questions needed but this would be just a normal AI without any powers and it will never become something like Sage or its other evolutions. If you really want her to become such an overpowered Mary Sue then just give her the Reality Stone from Marvel + the Soul Stone, since technically she is just a program without a real soul! Sorry for the little rant. I just believe everything should be more balanced and the growth of their individual powers and abilities should be slower. Let them travel more worlds, give your characters more time to grow bit by bit, not too slow and not too fast. I have seen so many promising and interesting stories, where the MC got too OP too quickly and the author either nerved him out of nowhere or created so immense overpowered antagonists that everything was getting so bland and boring, that the author finally decided to drop it completely... I hope you give everything that I just said some thoughts. Your fanfiction does so many aspects right that I will follow it until the end. Good Luck + Motivation
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It's Honkai Impact fanfic, hope can fill and distract me from how Honkai Impact: Invictus author got Isekai'ed.
No one would want to admit that their creation is bad, so I obviously rate this 5 starts.... Still though, this is a case of "Fine, I'll do it myself". I couldn't find a book with the scenario and the content I wanted, so I decided that if it doesn't exist, I will create it... I do hope you will find this work to be an interesting and enjoyable read