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so I like the idea of the story it's interesting and a shock no one has thought of it my problem though is that MC has that weird power from that novel or is it manga I've never read before. Its' already a cheat to have Peter's IQ anymore powers from other verses feels like an unnecessary power up to be honest so I ended up dropping the story midway. All in all its well written good grammar, not a fan of Peter's superhero suit😅 and I do advice people to give it a try incase you might get hooked.
This reads like the author wanted to create his own Butchered version of The Perfect Run.
Very Good..........................................................................................................................................
I genuinely want to like this novel but the cringe is too strong. Also, if you aren't a fan or have not read Lord of Mysteries, you will be GREATLY confused/dislike it as the story is heavily influenced by it(all the cringe included). Decent grammar&writing doesn't feel flat.The plot is ok but sometimes incoherent and at some parts require heavy suspension of disbelief. Pacing is fine though.Personally, I'm not a fan of the character simply because of his whackiness and propensity for constantly switching between personalities.Also, tis a miracle mon chou. Sadly, I'm out.
I rate this as very average. Needs work all over but is ok for a quick read so long as you don't mind the oddness of it all. It's very forced and unnatural in it's writing. Enough said.
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I will begin saying that I really enjoy the story. I love the use of Lizard Peter. The way that his relationship with Gwen changes feel realistic and I like their interactions. As I do not know the original source material for the gauntlet thingy that gives him additional powers, it feels strange to me. But that's me. I feel it could be replaced by his lizard background... for example, his hunger may be an unforeseen defect in his "perfected" formula (and a subplot to experiments to resolve it). Same with the eating others with the gauntlet, it could be done by means of "cannibalism" in his lizard form to gain the same effect of acquiring new abilities. Once more, I like the story as is. And my opinion on this is my own fault for not knowing the other power. Really good writing and funny moments in almost every chapter Keep the good work.
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Main characters name is Gehrman Sparro2 one of Klein’s identities, the crazy adventure in Lord of the Mysteries.
I love the story looking for more Spider-Man fanfiction you really fall right on top I really like the Peter Parker with the somewhat dark universe that the film made us feel. good luck and keep going like that bro👍💯
Hasta el momento me parece muy bien, exelente espero que siga así. De qui en adelante es relleno para completar los 140 carácteres Hay un dolor sordo en mi cabeza, que hace que la gente se sienta incómoda
Eu sinceramente não sei como isso pode ter uma nota tão alta, nada faz sentido, os diálogos são chatos e não parecem fluidos, os pensamentos do personagem não tem lógica, eu gostei de ter introduzidos itens de lotm mas foi só isso, existe uma infinidade de itens e vc introduziu um dos menos úteis e ainda fez Peter Parker tomar o soro do lagarto, sério
Just because there's gherman and creeping hunger here I rate it 5 stars it doesnt matter if I only read one chapter its 5 stars for me but that is my opinion
The story is very good, the character’s interaction feels natural it can feel weird at times but not forced like some other stories i read. the Mc himself I like he not perfects he cocky, egotistical a bit, and is mostly teasing the female love interest and like it, neither him or the other characters are perfect and it’s good. There are time in the story that feel weird and maybe to some out of place but this just a small issue i have but do believe the story would benefit more if the author was to put more humor into it nothing force. Other than few criticisms I have this story is solid strong 4⭐️ but definitely not 5⭐️ and very stories are a 5⭐️.
Good... Good.. Very Good. Keep it up and don't give up the book. Give me new chapters ~ I am a dumb person. I don't know how to write good reviews.
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so I like the idea of the story it's interesting and a shock no one has thought of it my problem though is that MC has that weird power from that novel or is it manga I've never read before. Its' already a cheat to have Peter's IQ anymore powers from other verses feels like an unnecessary power up to be honest so I ended up dropping the story midway. All in all its well written good grammar, not a fan of Peter's superhero suit😅 and I do advice people to give it a try incase you might get hooked.
This reads like the author wanted to create his own Butchered version of The Perfect Run.
Very Good..........................................................................................................................................
I genuinely want to like this novel but the cringe is too strong. Also, if you aren't a fan or have not read Lord of Mysteries, you will be GREATLY confused/dislike it as the story is heavily influenced by it(all the cringe included). Decent grammar&writing doesn't feel flat.The plot is ok but sometimes incoherent and at some parts require heavy suspension of disbelief. Pacing is fine though.Personally, I'm not a fan of the character simply because of his whackiness and propensity for constantly switching between personalities.Also, tis a miracle mon chou. Sadly, I'm out.
I rate this as very average. Needs work all over but is ok for a quick read so long as you don't mind the oddness of it all. It's very forced and unnatural in it's writing. Enough said.
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I will begin saying that I really enjoy the story. I love the use of Lizard Peter. The way that his relationship with Gwen changes feel realistic and I like their interactions. As I do not know the original source material for the gauntlet thingy that gives him additional powers, it feels strange to me. But that's me. I feel it could be replaced by his lizard background... for example, his hunger may be an unforeseen defect in his "perfected" formula (and a subplot to experiments to resolve it). Same with the eating others with the gauntlet, it could be done by means of "cannibalism" in his lizard form to gain the same effect of acquiring new abilities. Once more, I like the story as is. And my opinion on this is my own fault for not knowing the other power. Really good writing and funny moments in almost every chapter Keep the good work.
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揭示劇透 Main characters name is Gehrman Sparro2 one of Klein’s identities, the crazy adventure in Lord of the Mysteries.
I love the story looking for more Spider-Man fanfiction you really fall right on top I really like the Peter Parker with the somewhat dark universe that the film made us feel. good luck and keep going like that bro👍💯
Hasta el momento me parece muy bien, exelente espero que siga así. De qui en adelante es relleno para completar los 140 carácteres Hay un dolor sordo en mi cabeza, que hace que la gente se sienta incómoda
Eu sinceramente não sei como isso pode ter uma nota tão alta, nada faz sentido, os diálogos são chatos e não parecem fluidos, os pensamentos do personagem não tem lógica, eu gostei de ter introduzidos itens de lotm mas foi só isso, existe uma infinidade de itens e vc introduziu um dos menos úteis e ainda fez Peter Parker tomar o soro do lagarto, sério
Just because there's gherman and creeping hunger here I rate it 5 stars it doesnt matter if I only read one chapter its 5 stars for me but that is my opinion
The story is very good, the character’s interaction feels natural it can feel weird at times but not forced like some other stories i read. the Mc himself I like he not perfects he cocky, egotistical a bit, and is mostly teasing the female love interest and like it, neither him or the other characters are perfect and it’s good. There are time in the story that feel weird and maybe to some out of place but this just a small issue i have but do believe the story would benefit more if the author was to put more humor into it nothing force. Other than few criticisms I have this story is solid strong 4⭐️ but definitely not 5⭐️ and very stories are a 5⭐️.
Good... Good.. Very Good. Keep it up and don't give up the book. Give me new chapters ~ I am a dumb person. I don't know how to write good reviews.
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