9評論
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
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寫檢討
You already won me over by mentioning Sparta. .....................m & _ 6 &;?(-)(-!;&(+!(!&(8!;+)?9!'(8?)/;8/;7:()9!:7!6) /!&6!-&!7!8&!u
the writing and grammer should be worked upon I have only read chapter 1 so far but from what I see that's the major issue along with the MC not panicking or being more confused the tech integration doesn't seem flush either
I have been wanting to read a httyd fanfiction therer are others put nothing like this. It has medium WQ, great SU, great SD, great CD, and great WB. I hope this Continues now and in the future and I will be a fan from now on.
moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
You already won me over by mentioning Sparta. .....................m & _ 6 &;?(-)(-!;&(+!(!&(8!;+)?9!'(8?)/;8/;7:()9!:7!6) /!&6!-&!7!8&!u
the writing and grammer should be worked upon I have only read chapter 1 so far but from what I see that's the major issue along with the MC not panicking or being more confused the tech integration doesn't seem flush either
I have been wanting to read a httyd fanfiction therer are others put nothing like this. It has medium WQ, great SU, great SD, great CD, and great WB. I hope this Continues now and in the future and I will be a fan from now on.
moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee