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I have to be honest here – the writing in this piece blew me away. It's not just good; it's downright amazing. The words flowed so smoothly, and I couldn't spot a single major grammatical error. I was completely engrossed in the story.And the main character? She's an absolute delight. If I were part of that world, she'd be the one who captured my heart. Her passion for her dreams, and her undeniable cuteness – it's all so brilliantly portrayed. The way the author crafted her character, along with the others, is simply impressive.But, oh, her friends – they're a different story. Frankly, I can't stand them. Poor Minami is surrounded by these awful jerks. I can only hope she manages to deal with these snakes, and more importantly, I hope she finds the happiness she truly deserves in the end.
The background is great for this sort of story. The characters are well designed though I would recommend a bit more description of how they look just to give immersion a bit more of a boost. The updates are steady and the writing is very good. I noticed description here in neat places like of what juices the characters like to drink and of what the background looks like. That still puts description in this story above what I usually see. The grammar is mainly good but there are some minor gripes I have with it. Most of which I only see in the first chapter. For instance, "5year" is written instead of "5 year". The number should at least be spaced out from the word. With that being said, this is a high-quality novel that you can get access to FOR FREE. I recommend it. To the writer: I welcome you to have a look at "Avatar: Lingering Tensions" (ALT) which is a sequel to "Avatar: Macai's Journey" (AMJ). You may want to read the first chapter of AMJ or so to get a feel for what the first story was about. But AMJ's tone changes so much that you really won't know everything unless you read a lot of it. Still, the story is written in a way that explains the essentials. It also is better if you've watched the canon motherseries "Avatar: The Last Airbender". Cheers!
Hey guys this books are so wonderful to reading that books 📚 🤗❤️ and i liked all books 🥰😍.....i think u also enjoyed the story's and 🥰🥰.......in there books indeed in character 🥰🥰i liked very for reading this and🥰🥰🥰...... after i reading that my mind is so fresh mind and so read the i hope u all enjoyed it 🥰🥰🥰🥰....... and thank u sis urs wonderful stories 💙💙...
Stumbled across the novel while feeling down ... Pretty light hearted read, well organized and written, bursting with youthful innocence! Keep it up!
Make this into a visual novel someday please! I can tell that you had a lot of experience in writing and if not then you're just talented. I'll be sticking around to improve mine myself because i feel like i could learn alot from you!
Before I review I will admit I am not a fan of this genre but I will be open-minded, the story is really nice and Ishihara Minami is a character that is full of life. It's different from your average novel and has potential. I recommend it if you are into these kind of stories give it a read and see how it goes. Keep it up :)
Guess what... I am excited when I keep flipping the pages and finding more. Author has put much efforts. The writing is smooth and the idea is interesting and this book connects with me so well. Keep writing, author!
The drama grips your heart, and the author really brings to life her various characters through their quirks and interactions. She updates constantly and makes her writing skill abundantly clear in a variety of different moments. Well done!
I can hear yoasobi singing in the background for some reason...The story is great, and I don't even read fl novels! It'd have been better if this was a visual novel. Minami is cute, but saki is kinda sus...Anyways, Hurray to Kissiks!Good luck, author!
It's tough for me to really give an effective review as I don't naturally read FL often or at all. Some of the things I can comment on are that I think the writing itself is very fluid and natural and doesn't break my immersion at all. The English and grammar alike are very solid. If I had to change something writing-wise, it would be some of the longer paragraphs. I understand that sometimes a longer paragraph can be necessary, but some of them could always be broken into two or even more separate pieces. Stability looks solid from what I've seen so far. Loving the story and everything. Check this one out!
Oh, review for first 10 chapters! This was such a great start. I didn't expect that I will be this intrigued by the world of idols and it's tosses and turns. I could feel the hard work put into this from the author to which I say, good job! The characters are great, they feel real and fleshed out with their own goals and motives for their actions. The world is modern earth from what I can see but still could be worked on to show a different way the idol world would've affected it. The story development although slow, isn't by any means heavy or daunting to read. However, there are also cons: the structure of the pargraphs is kind of out of the norm compared to normal WN books. There is more dialogue then necessary in some parts which might make it feel like a movie script rather than a book.All in all, this book is a great read and I look forward to more chapters. Will keep an eye on it :)
Naturally 😂 I'm not the biggest reader or FL but then again I watch KDrama and naturally can relate with novels like that because I can just try and picture it in that sort of setting. The writing quality is way better than mine 😭 these FL writers and their quality in writing is something I wish have. Anyway, it's definitely a good book and I hope the best for it and the beautiful author, my crush... Jkjkjk... or am I?
this is really not my kind of story. shouldn't have clicked on teen genre... i believe in author's ability to make deep interesting characters and etc, but teen? nope. im too adult for this. but for everyone who likes cute girls doing cute things, this is your story
It's good, hmmm.... . . . . . . But I think, it's lacking of impact in character introduction, and just a touch of emotional depth and immersive writing and everything was perfect. (I read the whole chapter 1)
thalia, ur the best! ignore all haters, you and your books are amazing! cheers cheers cheers i wish you all the best in your writing!!!!!!!!!
I have to be honest here – the writing in this piece blew me away. It's not just good; it's downright amazing. The words flowed so smoothly, and I couldn't spot a single major grammatical error. I was completely engrossed in the story.And the main character? She's an absolute delight. If I were part of that world, she'd be the one who captured my heart. Her passion for her dreams, and her undeniable cuteness – it's all so brilliantly portrayed. The way the author crafted her character, along with the others, is simply impressive.But, oh, her friends – they're a different story. Frankly, I can't stand them. Poor Minami is surrounded by these awful jerks. I can only hope she manages to deal with these snakes, and more importantly, I hope she finds the happiness she truly deserves in the end.
The background is great for this sort of story. The characters are well designed though I would recommend a bit more description of how they look just to give immersion a bit more of a boost. The updates are steady and the writing is very good. I noticed description here in neat places like of what juices the characters like to drink and of what the background looks like. That still puts description in this story above what I usually see. The grammar is mainly good but there are some minor gripes I have with it. Most of which I only see in the first chapter. For instance, "5year" is written instead of "5 year". The number should at least be spaced out from the word. With that being said, this is a high-quality novel that you can get access to FOR FREE. I recommend it. To the writer: I welcome you to have a look at "Avatar: Lingering Tensions" (ALT) which is a sequel to "Avatar: Macai's Journey" (AMJ). You may want to read the first chapter of AMJ or so to get a feel for what the first story was about. But AMJ's tone changes so much that you really won't know everything unless you read a lot of it. Still, the story is written in a way that explains the essentials. It also is better if you've watched the canon motherseries "Avatar: The Last Airbender". Cheers!
Hey guys this books are so wonderful to reading that books 📚 🤗❤️ and i liked all books 🥰😍.....i think u also enjoyed the story's and 🥰🥰.......in there books indeed in character 🥰🥰i liked very for reading this and🥰🥰🥰...... after i reading that my mind is so fresh mind and so read the i hope u all enjoyed it 🥰🥰🥰🥰....... and thank u sis urs wonderful stories 💙💙...
Stumbled across the novel while feeling down ... Pretty light hearted read, well organized and written, bursting with youthful innocence! Keep it up!
Make this into a visual novel someday please! I can tell that you had a lot of experience in writing and if not then you're just talented. I'll be sticking around to improve mine myself because i feel like i could learn alot from you!
Before I review I will admit I am not a fan of this genre but I will be open-minded, the story is really nice and Ishihara Minami is a character that is full of life. It's different from your average novel and has potential. I recommend it if you are into these kind of stories give it a read and see how it goes. Keep it up :)
Guess what... I am excited when I keep flipping the pages and finding more. Author has put much efforts. The writing is smooth and the idea is interesting and this book connects with me so well. Keep writing, author!
The drama grips your heart, and the author really brings to life her various characters through their quirks and interactions. She updates constantly and makes her writing skill abundantly clear in a variety of different moments. Well done!
I can hear yoasobi singing in the background for some reason...The story is great, and I don't even read fl novels! It'd have been better if this was a visual novel. Minami is cute, but saki is kinda sus...Anyways, Hurray to Kissiks!Good luck, author!
It's tough for me to really give an effective review as I don't naturally read FL often or at all. Some of the things I can comment on are that I think the writing itself is very fluid and natural and doesn't break my immersion at all. The English and grammar alike are very solid. If I had to change something writing-wise, it would be some of the longer paragraphs. I understand that sometimes a longer paragraph can be necessary, but some of them could always be broken into two or even more separate pieces. Stability looks solid from what I've seen so far. Loving the story and everything. Check this one out!
Oh, review for first 10 chapters! This was such a great start. I didn't expect that I will be this intrigued by the world of idols and it's tosses and turns. I could feel the hard work put into this from the author to which I say, good job! The characters are great, they feel real and fleshed out with their own goals and motives for their actions. The world is modern earth from what I can see but still could be worked on to show a different way the idol world would've affected it. The story development although slow, isn't by any means heavy or daunting to read. However, there are also cons: the structure of the pargraphs is kind of out of the norm compared to normal WN books. There is more dialogue then necessary in some parts which might make it feel like a movie script rather than a book.All in all, this book is a great read and I look forward to more chapters. Will keep an eye on it :)
Naturally 😂 I'm not the biggest reader or FL but then again I watch KDrama and naturally can relate with novels like that because I can just try and picture it in that sort of setting. The writing quality is way better than mine 😭 these FL writers and their quality in writing is something I wish have. Anyway, it's definitely a good book and I hope the best for it and the beautiful author, my crush... Jkjkjk... or am I?
this is really not my kind of story. shouldn't have clicked on teen genre... i believe in author's ability to make deep interesting characters and etc, but teen? nope. im too adult for this. but for everyone who likes cute girls doing cute things, this is your story
It's good, hmmm.... . . . . . . But I think, it's lacking of impact in character introduction, and just a touch of emotional depth and immersive writing and everything was perfect. (I read the whole chapter 1)
thalia, ur the best! ignore all haters, you and your books are amazing! cheers cheers cheers i wish you all the best in your writing!!!!!!!!!