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A job well done. Obviously there is no reader that will like everything about a work and there are some places I don't like either, like toward the end when he accepted placing his life in the hands of those who were begging for his help, before he could help them, after he had to forsake his old life. His mentality could be somewhat understood but still...
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Way too much hate. It's surely a decent read.///////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////
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This is great and you did a great job Author ..................................................................................................................
I've really been reading it out of inertia since it became a puppet. I feel it is too insipid and does not generate desire to know what is going to happen or eagerness for the next chapter. I understand why the other readers got angry but it is very difficult to continue reading when the mc is no longer the mc.
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Don't waste your time supporting an author or story like this. Started out great and then he completely butchered it. Swapping his mc to be the Obito of this world, doesn't work how he thinks it would and the response shows that. Needs to rewrite the last chapters from danzo confrontation and cut out the bs he added in, or he needs to write the next 100 chapters asap so we can skip the puppet mc
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Copy and paste story original. Mc is pathetic, cuck kid and femboy [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
Was enjoyable at first, really liked it till the author felt the main character should be madara's pawn. Story when down hill after that and I'm sure it won't recover.
How to turn his own Good story into garbage you can learn from this, lol I am your white shadow and denjo shimura guy did sacrifice his eye to cast genjutsu to come back and even without he have strong strength of air vacuum ninja art
21 chapters in, this is a great read. The intrigue is great. The premise is fun . Here is five stars to keep you going. I have no doubt that this will be a great story.
The MC is a huge disappointment he’s reincarnated but doesn’t change anything even letting his father die and the power scaling is sooooooo wonky he was able to make one of the Sanin bleed while opening 2 of the 8 gates but against one of the seven swordsmen plus mei he had to open 5 of the gates and still got absolutely destroyed and was an inch from death. I wouldn’t recommend it which is a shame as it is high quality writing for this app but mostly everything else about this story ruined it for me.
I was finding it decent in the beginning then the power scaling became extremely shakey and kinda ruined it for me
Honestly the protagonist is a side character and it's pretty much canon. I truly don't understand how a SI can be in the Naruto world without knowing the Darkness of Konoha. Mc is a fool and naive idiot imo. As a side note I find it hilarious that Danzo has more plot armour then Naruto had in canon.
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To be perfectly honest, I cant find myself to enjoy the story and the main reason for that is the MC himself. The MC seems bland to me, nothing special about how him that would make you say (He is the MC), his personality, actions and even strength is nothing special (for me personally at least). He knows the future but he isnt taking advantage of it from what I gathered, there are hundreds of things he could do to increase his strength and his rank politic wise. Also the timeline does not match the cannon, there are people in the story who should not even be born yet, the age gaps is messing with my immersion of the story. I am not trying to flame the author but this is just not for me.
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The story is moving pretty well as of now. I am big fan of author's other work HP: Magical Life. The characters are well written, hoping to see a better kakashi this time, with or without kanabi bridge incident. A Kakshi without the sharingan would be much better....
This is a fun Naruto FF. The MC is out of the academy, so you don't have to suffer through that. So far the MC isn't OP and catching all the lady's. It's a nice change of pace from the other FF. Give this gem a chance.
great story, love the mc and its powers along with possible connection with Tobirama.don't drop it and pls increase the updating stability
Evaluation: Below AverageWQ: Multiple gramm errors which can be improved on. Monotonous dialogues/interaction & redundant thought process (pertaining to the original story). 2/5SD: With a slow to average pace of development and it also lacks MC & story progression since author-san decided to follow cannon/plot which is lackluster. 3/5CD: MC is a transmigrate/reincarnate but his foreknowledge & adult mentality are lacking. Author-san is too scared to damage the storyline nor plot. MC is too passive as there are tons of ways to vilify the elder councils or decision of Hokoge but still refrain from doing so. His foreknowledge & earth/previous life experiences is wasted. 2/5US: Chapters are short, stability of update isn't up to speed. 2/5WB: There's nothing new as author-san decided that MC follows/observe cannon. 3/5Don't be discouraged by the reviews but take it as a challenge to do better. Kudos to author-san and well wishes! xD
A story that talks about Naruto in a brother Kakshi from the father his mother is the cousin of Kato Dan Bigger than Kakashi It seems that he is incarnate, but not much about the character The writing style is great And his strength too Shazoni seems to have made her big and she is from the Kakashi generation It's strange how Shissoi with Itachi and they're very small.
Fried Frog's Legs recipe: Delicious fried frog legs! This simple recipe involves coating frog legs with cracker crumbs and cornmeal, then briefly frying them in oil for a tender and crispy treat. Ingredients: 24 frog legs, skin removed 1 cup all-purpose flour ½ cup cornmeal 1 (4 ounce) packet saltine crackers, crushed 1 tablespoon ground black pepper 2 teaspoons salt 1 teaspoon minced onion 2 eggs ½ cup milk 2 cups vegetable oil for frying 1 cup peanut oil for frying Cooking Instructions: Step 1. Rinse frog legs and pat dry; set aside. Combine flour, cornmeal, saltine cracker crumbs, pepper, salt, and onion in a large resealable bag; shake well to mix. Whisk eggs and milk together in a shallow bowl. Step 2. Heat vegetable oil and peanut oil in a large skillet over medium-high heat. The oil should be about 1/2 inch deep. Step 3. Dip legs into egg mixture in batches, then press into cracker mixture until evenly coated. Place the breaded legs, unstacked, onto a plate. Repeat with remaining legs. Step 4. Lower breaded legs carefully into the hot oil in batches. Fry until golden brown, about 4 to 5 minutes on each side. Transfer to a paper towel-lined plate to drain. Repeat with remaining frog legs. Enjoy fellow frog eater enjoyers.
unlike most writers iIcan see that he puts in the effort for grammar and spel checking absolutely love the fan-fiction and hope you continue uploading.
A job well done. Obviously there is no reader that will like everything about a work and there are some places I don't like either, like toward the end when he accepted placing his life in the hands of those who were begging for his help, before he could help them, after he had to forsake his old life. His mentality could be somewhat understood but still...
揭示劇透 Way too much hate. It's surely a decent read.///////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////
揭示劇透 This is great and you did a great job Author ..................................................................................................................
I've really been reading it out of inertia since it became a puppet. I feel it is too insipid and does not generate desire to know what is going to happen or eagerness for the next chapter. I understand why the other readers got angry but it is very difficult to continue reading when the mc is no longer the mc.
揭示劇透 Don't waste your time supporting an author or story like this. Started out great and then he completely butchered it. Swapping his mc to be the Obito of this world, doesn't work how he thinks it would and the response shows that. Needs to rewrite the last chapters from danzo confrontation and cut out the bs he added in, or he needs to write the next 100 chapters asap so we can skip the puppet mc
揭示劇透 Copy and paste story original. Mc is pathetic, cuck kid and femboy [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
Was enjoyable at first, really liked it till the author felt the main character should be madara's pawn. Story when down hill after that and I'm sure it won't recover.
How to turn his own Good story into garbage you can learn from this, lol I am your white shadow and denjo shimura guy did sacrifice his eye to cast genjutsu to come back and even without he have strong strength of air vacuum ninja art
21 chapters in, this is a great read. The intrigue is great. The premise is fun . Here is five stars to keep you going. I have no doubt that this will be a great story.
The MC is a huge disappointment he’s reincarnated but doesn’t change anything even letting his father die and the power scaling is sooooooo wonky he was able to make one of the Sanin bleed while opening 2 of the 8 gates but against one of the seven swordsmen plus mei he had to open 5 of the gates and still got absolutely destroyed and was an inch from death. I wouldn’t recommend it which is a shame as it is high quality writing for this app but mostly everything else about this story ruined it for me.
I was finding it decent in the beginning then the power scaling became extremely shakey and kinda ruined it for me
Honestly the protagonist is a side character and it's pretty much canon. I truly don't understand how a SI can be in the Naruto world without knowing the Darkness of Konoha. Mc is a fool and naive idiot imo. As a side note I find it hilarious that Danzo has more plot armour then Naruto had in canon.
揭示劇透 To be perfectly honest, I cant find myself to enjoy the story and the main reason for that is the MC himself. The MC seems bland to me, nothing special about how him that would make you say (He is the MC), his personality, actions and even strength is nothing special (for me personally at least). He knows the future but he isnt taking advantage of it from what I gathered, there are hundreds of things he could do to increase his strength and his rank politic wise. Also the timeline does not match the cannon, there are people in the story who should not even be born yet, the age gaps is messing with my immersion of the story. I am not trying to flame the author but this is just not for me.
揭示劇透 The story is moving pretty well as of now. I am big fan of author's other work HP: Magical Life. The characters are well written, hoping to see a better kakashi this time, with or without kanabi bridge incident. A Kakshi without the sharingan would be much better....
This is a fun Naruto FF. The MC is out of the academy, so you don't have to suffer through that. So far the MC isn't OP and catching all the lady's. It's a nice change of pace from the other FF. Give this gem a chance.
great story, love the mc and its powers along with possible connection with Tobirama.don't drop it and pls increase the updating stability
Evaluation: Below AverageWQ: Multiple gramm errors which can be improved on. Monotonous dialogues/interaction & redundant thought process (pertaining to the original story). 2/5SD: With a slow to average pace of development and it also lacks MC & story progression since author-san decided to follow cannon/plot which is lackluster. 3/5CD: MC is a transmigrate/reincarnate but his foreknowledge & adult mentality are lacking. Author-san is too scared to damage the storyline nor plot. MC is too passive as there are tons of ways to vilify the elder councils or decision of Hokoge but still refrain from doing so. His foreknowledge & earth/previous life experiences is wasted. 2/5US: Chapters are short, stability of update isn't up to speed. 2/5WB: There's nothing new as author-san decided that MC follows/observe cannon. 3/5Don't be discouraged by the reviews but take it as a challenge to do better. Kudos to author-san and well wishes! xD
A story that talks about Naruto in a brother Kakshi from the father his mother is the cousin of Kato Dan Bigger than Kakashi It seems that he is incarnate, but not much about the character The writing style is great And his strength too Shazoni seems to have made her big and she is from the Kakashi generation It's strange how Shissoi with Itachi and they're very small.
Fried Frog's Legs recipe: Delicious fried frog legs! This simple recipe involves coating frog legs with cracker crumbs and cornmeal, then briefly frying them in oil for a tender and crispy treat. Ingredients: 24 frog legs, skin removed 1 cup all-purpose flour ½ cup cornmeal 1 (4 ounce) packet saltine crackers, crushed 1 tablespoon ground black pepper 2 teaspoons salt 1 teaspoon minced onion 2 eggs ½ cup milk 2 cups vegetable oil for frying 1 cup peanut oil for frying Cooking Instructions: Step 1. Rinse frog legs and pat dry; set aside. Combine flour, cornmeal, saltine cracker crumbs, pepper, salt, and onion in a large resealable bag; shake well to mix. Whisk eggs and milk together in a shallow bowl. Step 2. Heat vegetable oil and peanut oil in a large skillet over medium-high heat. The oil should be about 1/2 inch deep. Step 3. Dip legs into egg mixture in batches, then press into cracker mixture until evenly coated. Place the breaded legs, unstacked, onto a plate. Repeat with remaining legs. Step 4. Lower breaded legs carefully into the hot oil in batches. Fry until golden brown, about 4 to 5 minutes on each side. Transfer to a paper towel-lined plate to drain. Repeat with remaining frog legs. Enjoy fellow frog eater enjoyers.
unlike most writers iIcan see that he puts in the effort for grammar and spel checking absolutely love the fan-fiction and hope you continue uploading.
