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There is nothing special about mc. Author say mc is dragon kin but the only thing he has that resemble a dragon is tail and horn. Mc has no dragon pride, no specialty othe than being reincarnated and takes so long to even level up that I nearly think decades passed. 2/3 of the novel is him being level 2. Mc killed so many level 1 and 2. He be fighting level 3 and 4 and not level yet. Bro this novel is insufferable and author be saying he has reasons for them and I ain’t seeing nothing
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overall it's not too bad but I kept getting deja vu kept feeling like I had read this novel before and it took me a while cuz I haven't read it for a while but it's danmachi with plasmids there's literal paragraphs ripped out from that one and from what I can tell this one while I'm writing this review is 6 months old that same paragraphs and plasmids is 3 years old so if this is the author of both and he's multi accounting that makes sense but if not if you're going to pull chunks of literature from another author please credit them
Автор наивный идиот, автор ты хоть понимаешь что пишешь ? в одной главе пишешь одно но в другой главе пишешь совершенно другое ! Автор вернись в школу и отучись тупой. Фанфие полное дерьмо.
It's an amazing story with a thought-out storyline and amazing character development. I'm just not a fan of harems, but overall, it's an amazing story I would highly recommend reading anyway.
I quite like this book! it has an interesting premise, and an interesting storyline!
The mc is childish a lot of times despite 1 being reincarnated, 2 having the blood of a dragon, and 3 having fought since he was a child against a bunch of creatures. His younger siblings(who I thought would be strong) feel more like burdens if anything else, they aren't strong, they are immature( understandable with their age), they waste the mc's time training them, they waste a lot of money with their trade skills when they don't even have the skill for the jobs, The tank has good skills but they are extremely costly...a simple resistance would have been better overall, it truly felt like they just dragged the mc back because when he could've been training he was either helping them or training them...They haven't been useful like at all and honestly I rarely ever feel this way but I am kind of hoping the less useful ones die...one is mentally unstable and seems like a weakness for the mc, though the tank is good it kinda feels redundant when the mc is tankier then him and is able to agro enemies better then him. The only useful ones are the mage, the archer, the hopefully smith in the future(maybe mc already has hephy bagged) and the alchemist.
I mean it is not bad but too many oc characters ,like the mc joining an oc familia 💀💀💀 , oc characters are bland and have no depth , even in this fan fiction the oc characters are just out of place I can't like them as much as I like the original characters and this make it annoying to watch , and the mc is needed if you don't want op mc then don't give him a cracked wish that is just going to be nerfed
This is an example of a fanfic done write. The Author changed the plot, Made some new characters to fit the story, and even if it has a harem it doesn't have the MC simp like crazy. Sure it's not the best romance wise, but it's a step in the right direction.Overall I like the novel and don't want it dropped.
I rarely leave reviews, but this story, while not perfect, is still one of the best danmachi story I have read. While some people hate the mc because he doesn’t “act this age”, here you can witness a human being adapting to his environment and genuinely being changed by his surroundings. While this story would have been better if the character wasn’t reincarnated in the first place, or if he didn’t keep his memories. It is still appear to have the makings of a good story with actually character growth, a plot with actual challenges and characters that aren’t cardboard cutouts.
Overall the story is pretty average even with the unique setting as it is set years prior to canon. The main issue i had was the execution, inconsistencies, certain choices and the mc. The MC didn't feel like a 23 year old person withpassion who was reincarnated. In Danmachi, he became kinda a generic isekai mc especially with the whole dragon race thing which was already pushing it. He kinda became boring with having little to no interesting aspects of his character especialy his personality. Also their are inconsistencies with his knowledge of danmachi especially important ones. Also the story tends to extend itself too much, making certain parts longer than necessary when it could have easily been shortened.It had a troubling start, a non-interesting mc and concepts that weren't really executed well.
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OK here what I have in my mindThe story started alright ok, his skill are not made for him to become op from the beginning, but slowly until he gains more level up, but when he reaches orio or whatever that city name is, it starts going down fall, I understand that he does not have bell op skill which give him the leveling speed but still his skill wasn't that bad eather ,so 9 freaking months or soo to reach level 2, i think it's too much, that biggest joke is that he didn't reached level 2 after all this when bell reached that in one month.He barely surpassed bell in all his status except agility which bell has in SSS rank.That was huge let down, If he doing things right he should go all out and surpass bell in all states, i don't mind that time if it's reasonable amount but he should at lesst be higher in state.Anyway I will still read this FF, because I think the fighting is good enough but the mc is lil cringe 😂
2.5/5 at best the blatant disregard for Danmachi's power system irks me to no end he's not a OPMC he's a Dragon-Kin with a jack of all trades skill and by chapter 9 or so he's already casting meteor without a Falna the inconsistencies just ruin the vibe of the fic hope it get's a rewrite at some point for consistencies sake if you wanted it to be an OP MC fic you should have said so from the beginning
It was good for a bit..has a great idea but the execution was poor. Mc has a op skill but he slow af to level up. He a side character compared to how bell grows lol. He really Doesn't act luke a reincarnated 24 yr old at all. He a dragon kin but he seems so weak. He still small.af for his age and its dumb. Author execution on multiple things just ruins whole tying for me
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The story is normal I guess.. I drop it because the mc is 20 years old and acts like a child which causes me a bit of frustration In addition, the author always says in the comments that he is going to explain about the dragons and why he acts like that but he never does bruh
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Dispite being 24 year before reincarnation- Mc act like a child. Is dragon but has no characteristics of dragon. Has bad mental health because of his 'good' morality Cry Kinda dense(no much) Has op skills is not op Has a slow growth as a mc of a story.(ie he feels like a mob character) Also Story is so so at best . Feels like reading a personal diary with little interaction 0 in character development Novel feels like author just sckming through the whole story.
Thanks for the chapters such a good story no matter how many times I read it hope you don’t drop this story
The fanfic was pretty enjoyable to read but I still don’t have a solid opinion on it, this to me is more like a 4.7 in its current state but overall since it is still enjoyable I will give it a 4.8. Even with the little errors here and there the story has potential to do pretty good or go south, so good luck Author and keep up the good work!!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………
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So here's my brutally honest review as of Chapter 12, so do note things may have changed by the time you read this.(This is my opinion ONLY, so it's truly up to you if you like it or not): The Goods: - The update rate is impressive to say the least, I know how hard it is to write and as such it's amazing just how fast the chapters are being pumped out. - The wide use of OC's is something that I like, and it allows the fic to have it's own ground to stand on without focusing strictly on canon, bringing a sense of fresh air and potential for original arcs, this in addition to the MC arriving before canon. The only worry I have is that it'll be too much OC's to keep track of, and as such most would be 1 dimensional and have robotic personalities. -The bloody dragonkin MC of course. - The including of a childhood arc for an isekai MC. Some may not like it and would like to jump straight into canon, but that wouldn't make sense in my opinion. So the childhood arc was pretty nice and executed at an OK level. The Bads: -I'm not sure they're related, but the authors rate of releasing chapters comes with the consequence of writing quality. Frequent incorrect grammar, missed and incomplete sentences/words, the works. I'm not one to talk, but I think if the chapters are given more time for polish instead of being pumped out as fast as possible (I'm guessing here), that'd be great and it'll make the story much better and more readable/professional! Conclusion: I greatly recommend the story, it has potential and if the author improves as he writes whilst taking delicate care of the MC from steamrolling mindlessly the entire story, it'll be amazing. Writing Quality: 3/5 Update Stability: 5/5 Story Development: 5/5 (Not long enough to get an accurate score but 5 for now) Character Design: 5/5 World Background: 5/5 Thank you for the fic and wish you good luck Author!
goid story just please do not drop this my heart cant take another dropped danmachi book
Shameless Author here to give 5 stars lol. At least give it a try. Constructive criticism and suggestions are welcome.
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There is nothing special about mc. Author say mc is dragon kin but the only thing he has that resemble a dragon is tail and horn. Mc has no dragon pride, no specialty othe than being reincarnated and takes so long to even level up that I nearly think decades passed. 2/3 of the novel is him being level 2. Mc killed so many level 1 and 2. He be fighting level 3 and 4 and not level yet. Bro this novel is insufferable and author be saying he has reasons for them and I ain’t seeing nothing
揭示劇透 overall it's not too bad but I kept getting deja vu kept feeling like I had read this novel before and it took me a while cuz I haven't read it for a while but it's danmachi with plasmids there's literal paragraphs ripped out from that one and from what I can tell this one while I'm writing this review is 6 months old that same paragraphs and plasmids is 3 years old so if this is the author of both and he's multi accounting that makes sense but if not if you're going to pull chunks of literature from another author please credit them
Автор наивный идиот, автор ты хоть понимаешь что пишешь ? в одной главе пишешь одно но в другой главе пишешь совершенно другое ! Автор вернись в школу и отучись тупой. Фанфие полное дерьмо.
It's an amazing story with a thought-out storyline and amazing character development. I'm just not a fan of harems, but overall, it's an amazing story I would highly recommend reading anyway.
I quite like this book! it has an interesting premise, and an interesting storyline!
The mc is childish a lot of times despite 1 being reincarnated, 2 having the blood of a dragon, and 3 having fought since he was a child against a bunch of creatures. His younger siblings(who I thought would be strong) feel more like burdens if anything else, they aren't strong, they are immature( understandable with their age), they waste the mc's time training them, they waste a lot of money with their trade skills when they don't even have the skill for the jobs, The tank has good skills but they are extremely costly...a simple resistance would have been better overall, it truly felt like they just dragged the mc back because when he could've been training he was either helping them or training them...They haven't been useful like at all and honestly I rarely ever feel this way but I am kind of hoping the less useful ones die...one is mentally unstable and seems like a weakness for the mc, though the tank is good it kinda feels redundant when the mc is tankier then him and is able to agro enemies better then him. The only useful ones are the mage, the archer, the hopefully smith in the future(maybe mc already has hephy bagged) and the alchemist.
I mean it is not bad but too many oc characters ,like the mc joining an oc familia 💀💀💀 , oc characters are bland and have no depth , even in this fan fiction the oc characters are just out of place I can't like them as much as I like the original characters and this make it annoying to watch , and the mc is needed if you don't want op mc then don't give him a cracked wish that is just going to be nerfed
This is an example of a fanfic done write. The Author changed the plot, Made some new characters to fit the story, and even if it has a harem it doesn't have the MC simp like crazy. Sure it's not the best romance wise, but it's a step in the right direction.Overall I like the novel and don't want it dropped.
I rarely leave reviews, but this story, while not perfect, is still one of the best danmachi story I have read. While some people hate the mc because he doesn’t “act this age”, here you can witness a human being adapting to his environment and genuinely being changed by his surroundings. While this story would have been better if the character wasn’t reincarnated in the first place, or if he didn’t keep his memories. It is still appear to have the makings of a good story with actually character growth, a plot with actual challenges and characters that aren’t cardboard cutouts.
Overall the story is pretty average even with the unique setting as it is set years prior to canon. The main issue i had was the execution, inconsistencies, certain choices and the mc. The MC didn't feel like a 23 year old person withpassion who was reincarnated. In Danmachi, he became kinda a generic isekai mc especially with the whole dragon race thing which was already pushing it. He kinda became boring with having little to no interesting aspects of his character especialy his personality. Also their are inconsistencies with his knowledge of danmachi especially important ones. Also the story tends to extend itself too much, making certain parts longer than necessary when it could have easily been shortened.It had a troubling start, a non-interesting mc and concepts that weren't really executed well.
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OK here what I have in my mindThe story started alright ok, his skill are not made for him to become op from the beginning, but slowly until he gains more level up, but when he reaches orio or whatever that city name is, it starts going down fall, I understand that he does not have bell op skill which give him the leveling speed but still his skill wasn't that bad eather ,so 9 freaking months or soo to reach level 2, i think it's too much, that biggest joke is that he didn't reached level 2 after all this when bell reached that in one month.He barely surpassed bell in all his status except agility which bell has in SSS rank.That was huge let down, If he doing things right he should go all out and surpass bell in all states, i don't mind that time if it's reasonable amount but he should at lesst be higher in state.Anyway I will still read this FF, because I think the fighting is good enough but the mc is lil cringe 😂
2.5/5 at best the blatant disregard for Danmachi's power system irks me to no end he's not a OPMC he's a Dragon-Kin with a jack of all trades skill and by chapter 9 or so he's already casting meteor without a Falna the inconsistencies just ruin the vibe of the fic hope it get's a rewrite at some point for consistencies sake if you wanted it to be an OP MC fic you should have said so from the beginning
It was good for a bit..has a great idea but the execution was poor. Mc has a op skill but he slow af to level up. He a side character compared to how bell grows lol. He really Doesn't act luke a reincarnated 24 yr old at all. He a dragon kin but he seems so weak. He still small.af for his age and its dumb. Author execution on multiple things just ruins whole tying for me
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The story is normal I guess.. I drop it because the mc is 20 years old and acts like a child which causes me a bit of frustration In addition, the author always says in the comments that he is going to explain about the dragons and why he acts like that but he never does bruh
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Dispite being 24 year before reincarnation- Mc act like a child. Is dragon but has no characteristics of dragon. Has bad mental health because of his 'good' morality Cry Kinda dense(no much) Has op skills is not op Has a slow growth as a mc of a story.(ie he feels like a mob character) Also Story is so so at best . Feels like reading a personal diary with little interaction 0 in character development Novel feels like author just sckming through the whole story.
Thanks for the chapters such a good story no matter how many times I read it hope you don’t drop this story
The fanfic was pretty enjoyable to read but I still don’t have a solid opinion on it, this to me is more like a 4.7 in its current state but overall since it is still enjoyable I will give it a 4.8. Even with the little errors here and there the story has potential to do pretty good or go south, so good luck Author and keep up the good work!!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………
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So here's my brutally honest review as of Chapter 12, so do note things may have changed by the time you read this.(This is my opinion ONLY, so it's truly up to you if you like it or not): The Goods: - The update rate is impressive to say the least, I know how hard it is to write and as such it's amazing just how fast the chapters are being pumped out. - The wide use of OC's is something that I like, and it allows the fic to have it's own ground to stand on without focusing strictly on canon, bringing a sense of fresh air and potential for original arcs, this in addition to the MC arriving before canon. The only worry I have is that it'll be too much OC's to keep track of, and as such most would be 1 dimensional and have robotic personalities. -The bloody dragonkin MC of course. - The including of a childhood arc for an isekai MC. Some may not like it and would like to jump straight into canon, but that wouldn't make sense in my opinion. So the childhood arc was pretty nice and executed at an OK level. The Bads: -I'm not sure they're related, but the authors rate of releasing chapters comes with the consequence of writing quality. Frequent incorrect grammar, missed and incomplete sentences/words, the works. I'm not one to talk, but I think if the chapters are given more time for polish instead of being pumped out as fast as possible (I'm guessing here), that'd be great and it'll make the story much better and more readable/professional! Conclusion: I greatly recommend the story, it has potential and if the author improves as he writes whilst taking delicate care of the MC from steamrolling mindlessly the entire story, it'll be amazing. Writing Quality: 3/5 Update Stability: 5/5 Story Development: 5/5 (Not long enough to get an accurate score but 5 for now) Character Design: 5/5 World Background: 5/5 Thank you for the fic and wish you good luck Author!
goid story just please do not drop this my heart cant take another dropped danmachi book
Shameless Author here to give 5 stars lol. At least give it a try. Constructive criticism and suggestions are welcome.
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