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Good enough⭐⭐ Just dont like the dialogue. you dont need calling each other Name in every conversation
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I don't even know what to say... Perhaps the author has something in mind, but as far as chapter 23 is concerned, I don't see it. Gathering people who'll have a hand in the original Marvel character development and putting them under you. To make matters worse, MC is a Kryptonian, why does he even need people to create a company? *Sigh* How will the future turn out for the avengers then? I dunno, but this story has potential to be put on hiatus in the future.
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It had potential but the author chose to follow a path totally contrary to what is legal, here we have a Kryptonian opening companies and hiring geniuses and he already has all the technology of Krypton millions of light years ahead of this earth, it seems that he is trying to do a new brighburn or whatever, a kryptonian who doesn't even show his face around, one of the most powerful beings in the galaxy hiding behind a mask and seriously, medieval armor lol so good luck to anyone interested.
Very good idea with good potential but i just feel like he is spending too much time creating a industry, etc i don’t feel the need to do that
While I wasn’t exactly a fan of the MC’s backstory as it was a little over the top, I have to say that I do like where this story is going.
This FanFic... how do I say it... Well, I was expecting a complete hotdog, but all I got was a wet sausage with no buns :(
I love this story so far, and i live he's not running around to save lives in the usual way but he tries to look to the big picture even if its for his own gains, MC seems believble no sappy talks, getting straight to it[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
is this a rewrite of the one where he wakes up in the 90s? or am i tripping cuz the first chapter telling us how he died sounded familiar to me like I've seen it vefore quite recently.
this looks promising, the quality of writing is good, and MC so far acts like a real person, don't screw this up. [img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp]
[img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] Great work, keep going
Great story, don't make him into a villain, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please..................
Not a bad story but a few chapters in and he’s already consorting with a villain. I hope this not one of those edgy antiheroes that kills villains and thugs alike, taking someone’s life is not an easy thing unless they are a sociopath or high on power especially superpowers.
Keep it going, Keep it going, Keep it going, Keep it going, Keep it going, Keep it going, Keep it going, Keep it going, Keep it going, Keep it going,
the story flow is good, glad this time MC is not as shallow as last time, grammar and writing are top tiers, don't drop this one *************************
I hope you're not going to drop this new story as quickly as the previous one, especially since you released 19 chapters very quickly which shows that you have imagination and can go fast, don't get lost
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Good enough⭐⭐ Just dont like the dialogue. you dont need calling each other Name in every conversation
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I don't even know what to say... Perhaps the author has something in mind, but as far as chapter 23 is concerned, I don't see it. Gathering people who'll have a hand in the original Marvel character development and putting them under you. To make matters worse, MC is a Kryptonian, why does he even need people to create a company? *Sigh* How will the future turn out for the avengers then? I dunno, but this story has potential to be put on hiatus in the future.
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It had potential but the author chose to follow a path totally contrary to what is legal, here we have a Kryptonian opening companies and hiring geniuses and he already has all the technology of Krypton millions of light years ahead of this earth, it seems that he is trying to do a new brighburn or whatever, a kryptonian who doesn't even show his face around, one of the most powerful beings in the galaxy hiding behind a mask and seriously, medieval armor lol so good luck to anyone interested.
Very good idea with good potential but i just feel like he is spending too much time creating a industry, etc i don’t feel the need to do that
While I wasn’t exactly a fan of the MC’s backstory as it was a little over the top, I have to say that I do like where this story is going.
This FanFic... how do I say it... Well, I was expecting a complete hotdog, but all I got was a wet sausage with no buns :(
I love this story so far, and i live he's not running around to save lives in the usual way but he tries to look to the big picture even if its for his own gains, MC seems believble no sappy talks, getting straight to it[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
is this a rewrite of the one where he wakes up in the 90s? or am i tripping cuz the first chapter telling us how he died sounded familiar to me like I've seen it vefore quite recently.
this looks promising, the quality of writing is good, and MC so far acts like a real person, don't screw this up. [img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp]
[img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] Great work, keep going
Great story, don't make him into a villain, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please..................
Not a bad story but a few chapters in and he’s already consorting with a villain. I hope this not one of those edgy antiheroes that kills villains and thugs alike, taking someone’s life is not an easy thing unless they are a sociopath or high on power especially superpowers.
Keep it going, Keep it going, Keep it going, Keep it going, Keep it going, Keep it going, Keep it going, Keep it going, Keep it going, Keep it going,
the story flow is good, glad this time MC is not as shallow as last time, grammar and writing are top tiers, don't drop this one *************************
I hope you're not going to drop this new story as quickly as the previous one, especially since you released 19 chapters very quickly which shows that you have imagination and can go fast, don't get lost
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