OMNITRIX (DC)

LV 12

Zetsway

I read until chapter 4 so, if this is some type of masterpiece after those 4 chapters, you guys can only suffer to find out, I couldn't. The main problem with this is frustration. The MC is stupid, so you get frustrated with his thought process. When I saw that it was someone with the omnitrix in DC, I was actually hoping for that person to use his watch to improve all the aspects of his life. With certain aliens, he can become a millionaire in a few days, but from what I see the MC is just like Ben, only using the watch to fight his episodic enemies with no 'life' between the fights...

LV 2

Baph0met

Am I allowed to do this? Its been a while since I posted this fic, and I almost forgot to do this tradition. Well, here we are.

LV 5

EvergreenGaming

better then some of the omnitrix in dc i have read, tho it still falls for the same problem all of them have, introducing the omnitrix. they would not have any aliens stored inside unless this is a crossover in which case MC wouldn't get it unless it was a dark AU crossover. the rest were just minor issues this early in the story. it would have been better if MC built it and at the beginning he added dna to transform 1 at the start and upgrades the watch to hold more as the story goes. (which no other omnitrix story does from what i have seen) and the biggest problem i have with fics that do this is how to explain your power without breaking the 4th wall and lowering the quality of a fic.

LV 5

Dracmon13

my honest opinion, the writing is good, and such, but it's pure nonsense, learning the dream. omnitrix on dc, dumber than a jock. forget things easily. he could get rich and face whoever he wants, but do what is a young justice fanboy

LV 4

Vijay_Sanwal

best crossover between Ben 10 and dc I in joy this fic thank you

LV 3

No_brain5

stupid mc that did not use his brain to think...

LV 4

Red_Spice

Writing quality is good, but story progress is soooooo boooooring I wanna sleep [img=sad]

LV 2

Brock_Burns

I've read a whole lot of quotes on quotes bad books but this takes it man like the MC is so stupid and how he uses the Omnitrix in such a bad way that physically hurts me quality to this book is that one of the books that has few grammar mistakes

LV 5

Melitia_Snek

Good writing quality but terrible story development and character design. The plot is forced and the MC is stupid. He uses the Omnitrix only to fight, not improve his life. He could easily make money with some of the aliens, yet doesn't.

LV 1

HekAnwdn_

Um enredo completamente sem graça. A personalidade do personagem principal é mal trabalhada. Não estou dizendo que é ruim. É terrívelmente mediano, apenas.

LV 14

Josh_Richie

the storyline is just all over the place. It got boring fast. I could care less on what the other characters do in their daily lives, but the MC is special, give him the screen time he deserves

LV 4

kwirii

good job great fanfiction................................................................................................. ............................

LV 4

YourDad_

It seems okay as of now but the thing is MC needs to be a bit careful. It's too easy to associate all of his aliens with him (because of symbol of Omnitrix) and this is DC for God's sake. So he just can't change into a alien like that he did against trickster.

LV 15

Skeptical_Bookworm

I made it chapter 45 before I could no longer continue, I give the story 1 star in everything because this app does not allow for 0 stars. The story is rushed, the english is barely legible, and the main character is mediocre. If you are looking for an Omnitrix story, look elsewhere.

LV 3

Andrew_maconha

It was cool but after the protagonist joined the titans he got a debuf, alzheimer's and reduced IQ, what? the cliché that only when the heroes form a team does everyone become weaker

LV 12

angel_reyes_8978

Great concept. I love the idea. Real shame that you decided to end it just before they fought the big bad, and the Mc was just getting started as a hero.

LV 3

Falen420

Hard to read. It starts out promising, like the first two or three chapters are okay'ish, but it very quickly turns into a unsatisfying mix of stupidity and cringe.

LV 4

Lithiel

Great idea, I always love omnitrix stories the only problem is the writer made the mc an idiot which ruins the story

LV 3

JacK_Hanma

Una belleza de novela... Lastima que el autor la dejo... (Relleno) (Relleno) (Relleno) (Relleno)(Relleno) (Relleno) (Relleno) (Relleno) (Relleno) (Relleno) (Relleno)

LV 5

whitethief274

initially my expectations were really low but as the story is progressing i have to say this is slowly and surely becoming a masterpiece.