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A Dragon ball System With A Cultivation World

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Daoist_Dan

Light Spoilers. Didn't hit the spoiler button because paragraph separations disappear when I do. The first 50 percent was good. But the author merced his own story with a stupid joke that turned out to not be a joke. You might find the mc's rival being named Giga Chad hilarious but I don't. And that's not to mention how poorly written into the story he actually was. It broke the vibes the story had been building the entire story. Anyway, be forewarned so maybe this doesn't bug you as much as it did me. I was honestly enjoying this story before Giga Chad became a central part. Total score 2.6 Writing Quality - 3. Neither good or bad. I didn't notice either way. Stability of Updates - 4. I never give 5 unless a story is completed. But 4 is well deserved for stable updates. Story Development - 1. Because F you. (Story is a 4 without Giga tho) Character Design - 1. Because F Giga. (Would have been a 3) World Background - 4. Honestly very interesting.

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TFH
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well... ita not bad. author just dosnt really knows how to write well and there are some holes in his story and mistakes and contradictions. Such as soul cultivation, mc says nobody in the village knows much about it and that level 2 allows for spiritual sense (radar) of 10 meters. but his father was outside of the house in the main plaza but could sense mc despite being far away from his home. Thus making his father spiritual sense at least 500 meters. thus the contradiction. also author skips stuff without noticing, at one moment the father was in the plaza, at the next was in the protagonist room. It was not mentioned he moved

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TeraBaapHuMai

I don't have problem with bad grammer and spelling mistakes, but what i have problem is with how system and his father are babysitting a 18 year old. He is 18 for god's sake man.

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Warren_Yanga

BRUH THE AUTHOR REALLY LIKES TO MESS WITH BLOODLINES. YOU CAN MAKE A Dragon Ball X Cultivation without a "System" and make the bloodline a saiyan only That way the author has no way to mess with bloodlines and having to Early Op MC. and the readers now can read a real "Weak To Strong" Genre.

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Lizrock

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DaoistsGHarm

More More More More More More More More More More More More!!

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Metasight

I like this story a whole bunch, I hope more authors wright stories like this. I hope this story continues. If I had the $ to pay for more I would.

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Waiting for more. Good luck to you Author-san.

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Chapter 82: Too Overpowered 1 years ago

卷 1

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    Awakening 1 years ago
  2. 2
    Training 1 years ago
  3. 3
    Causing Trouble At The City 1 years ago
  4. 4
    The Old Man 1 years ago
  5. 5
    Becoming Famous 1 years ago
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    5 v 1 1 years ago
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    12 v 1 1 years ago
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    Lets Dance 1 years ago
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    Father? 1 years ago
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    10,000+ v 1 1 years ago
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    the 4 regions 1 years ago
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    The White Tiger 1 years ago
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    5 Guys Going At It 1 years ago
  14. 14
    New Bloodline 1 years ago
  15. 15
    A Bug 1 years ago
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    The Heavens Helping Hand 1 years ago
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    Biggest Fan 1 years ago
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    The Fallen Angel 1 years ago
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    Friends 1 years ago
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    Godly Grade Energy Control and Merging Capability 1 years ago
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    An Arrow 1 years ago
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    What do you love most? 1 years ago
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    Break through 1 years ago
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    12 Heavenly Dragon 1 years ago
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    Fallen Phoenix Forest 1 years ago
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    Fallen Phoenix Forest 2 1 years ago
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    Vermilion Bird 1 years ago
  28. 28
    An Over Grown Lizard 1 years ago
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    An Over Grown Lizard 2 1 years ago
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    Leaving 1 years ago
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    To The Sea 1 years ago
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    The ruler of the sea 1 years ago
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    Second Soul? 1 years ago
  34. 34
    Date 1 years ago
  35. 35
    Sora vs the 10 Demons 1 years ago
  36. 36
    The Demon Attack 1 years ago
  37. 37
    The tribe races 1 years ago
  38. 38
    Giga Chad vs The Demon Lord 1 years ago
  39. 39
    Flavor 1 years ago
  40. 40
    So, I hear you can cook 1 years ago
  41. 41
    My Side Chick 1 years ago
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    Sora and A Sword? 1 years ago
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    Holy Ground 1 years ago
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    Soul Eater 1 years ago
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    The Law Ancestor 1 years ago
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    A Realm Ruler 1 years ago
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    A freak 1 years ago
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    The Fang Clan 1 years ago
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    Auction House 1 years ago
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    Elder Mo 1 years ago
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    Cells 1 years ago
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    Power Up 1 years ago
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    Creating A Technique 1 years ago
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    Fei Yanzi 1 years ago
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    The Supreme Zenkai Law 1 years ago
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    Strength 1 years ago
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    Transcendent Movement 1 years ago
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    Breaking Common Sense 1 years ago
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    It Has Come 1 years ago
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    The calamity 1 years ago
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    Grandma 1 years ago
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    Sorry 1 years ago
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    The Number One Under The Heavens 1 years ago
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    Endless 1 years ago
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    Son Of Hell 1 years ago
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    Cao Jin 1 years ago
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    God 1 years ago
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    Toxic grandparents 1 years ago
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    Going Out 1 years ago
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    Bored 1 years ago
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    The Strongest In The Universe 1 years ago
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    Relax 1 years ago
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    A Father 1 years ago
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    Birth 1 years ago
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    Mongrels 1 years ago
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    Shattering Dao Hearts 1 years ago
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    Broken 1 years ago
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    The Strongest 1 years ago
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    throughout heaven and earth 1 years ago
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    Rule The World 1 years ago
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    Ascending The Plot 1 years ago
  82. 82
    Too Overpowered 1 years ago

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