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The only thing that bothers me is that after 100 chapters he still doesn't have a harem. Otherwise I liked it 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
Great fanfic. But the writing could use a bit of polishing. Mixes up he and she often. Occasional word that makes no sense. So not full marks but the story makes up for it
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The story in general is very good, the only thing that bothered me was the fact that Mc keeps hiding his true identity even for no reason, he is already strong (in the empire area) and doesn't need to hide it. But apart from that Fanfic is amazing. Google translator
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Well here to remind you of this story I am translating it from faloo, so that there are no misunderstandings, I hope you enjoy it👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽
Gramática ruim, clichê demasiado, muita enrolação no enredo. nada de novo. A mesma coisa que as muitas outras fics de BTTH. Gramática ruim, clichê demasiado, muita enrolação no enredo. nada de novo. A mesma coisa que as muitas outras fics de BTTH.
The only thing that bothers me is that after 100 chapters he still doesn't have a harem. Otherwise I liked it 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
Great fanfic. But the writing could use a bit of polishing. Mixes up he and she often. Occasional word that makes no sense. So not full marks but the story makes up for it
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The story in general is very good, the only thing that bothered me was the fact that Mc keeps hiding his true identity even for no reason, he is already strong (in the empire area) and doesn't need to hide it. But apart from that Fanfic is amazing. Google translator
this is a good fanfiction of btth.i like it and recommend this fic to you guys.have nice read...[img=recommend]
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Does anyone know the original name? Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
Well here to remind you of this story I am translating it from faloo, so that there are no misunderstandings, I hope you enjoy it👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽
Gramática ruim, clichê demasiado, muita enrolação no enredo. nada de novo. A mesma coisa que as muitas outras fics de BTTH. Gramática ruim, clichê demasiado, muita enrolação no enredo. nada de novo. A mesma coisa que as muitas outras fics de BTTH.