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I've really liked this book. It's got a good plot and well-written lemons scattered tastefully. It's crazy there is not more good reviews.
I just found tjis book and went to go read it and its letting me read all the chapters for free but It only gave me 5 minutes to do that so Idk if the author did this or the app or what but if the author can can u do it again please like next month or something? this book looks really good And wish to read as much as I can but u cannonly get so many free passed a day and not everyone can get coins!! so if this can happen again that would be awesome and honestly it would help bring in more people to the book especially if they read it into the later chapters!!
this is the only novel ive read on here where you can spend over 100 coins on 3 chapters, and thats the worst thing about it.
It's a good story with a great potential. The mistake like grammar and typo is also really unnoticable. The world background is also a bit of a fresh air, especially with many cultivation novel around here. The pacing is kinda slow (at least for me) but it doesnt feels like filler yet. I do have concern about the attitude of the MC and the name of the system though To be honest I try to read this novel after sering kingdom building in the title. But as the story progress I realize that the subject of the MC are probably those girls that comes from gacha and nothing more (at least until chapter 41) . That limits the number of the subject, so to be honest I kinda dissapointed. Moreover, as the story goes I also feels kinda frustrated with MC behaviour. Again I come here expecting some kind of faction building, so I expect the protagonist have some quality of a leader, but I am disappointed. The proeels like a door mat, (at least as far as chapter 41) especially the scene where he gives many equipment but got nothing, even up until that point, she still doesnt trust him. To be honest, he is really not a good leader material, I'm confused how he even got that system. With honesty over the top that question whether he is jp protag, to some kind of naive personality by trusting other people too easily. But overall it's somewhat ejoyable story
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overall great idea, world is portrayed okay, mostly its just a major flaw with the mc, he's the epitome of a person we all hate.
Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting...
I don't like yuri that much nd in his harem there is harem stealing girl so it's pretty let down nd talk about how high his pride is that he consider others beneath him so he have to feel responsible is grossing me out it feels like double standard person while other things in story is very much appreciated
its a good and interesting novel, its just non-virgin fmc is not something i can like and ruins it, if you can tolerate it then its fine but then again why would you read fantasy lol.
The story concept is interesting, but so many other factors ruin it for me. The MC says many things that just seem sexist. There are tons of run on sentences and grammar issues as well. Plus, there are some scenes that are so awkwardly written. Like discussing the skills of the group only to go on a tangent about how no one has enough mana to use skills and they will just have to attack any monsters until they die. If that's how it is, just skip the introduction and move onto the fighting.
Novel take on Kingdom building an a system. I really like. Wish we could see 1 or 2 chapters a day though. Waiting several days is just too much.
bom, quero mais............................................................................................. ...............................
I done reading all the chapters and i have to say that is sooooo gooooood its so relaxing funny and interesting ty author I will be suporting you
It has an amazing story so far. A little bit skeptical about the Gacha part but It's integrates well. I wish the author upload more chapters though. Author keep it up.
really enjoying this story so far even though there is no indication where the story might be heading. never really been a fan of the gacha theme but you git me ready to read more so I will wait.
i wanna be as good as the guy who's writing this that's it, that's the review and now i'll proceed to keep writing so I can post the review
This is alright The mc is very unlikeable (at least imo). He is contradictory in his actions, creepy and dumb The dialogue is kinda dry and only a few lines per chapter The monologues are insanely long and full of overexplaining The concept of kingdom bulding is nice but after 25 ch not that much of it and thats the main reason I wanted to try this novel. I can understand that it’s tied to his lvl but that just slows the pace a lot + with the monologues makes the novel to lack substance most of the chs For short, nothing special. Maybe the choice of weapons and the intricacies of the kingdom building that will be present in the future chs but 25 chs are enough for me to wait for those before bouncing Still way above the usual flaming garbanzo reads though
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I've really liked this book. It's got a good plot and well-written lemons scattered tastefully. It's crazy there is not more good reviews.
I just found tjis book and went to go read it and its letting me read all the chapters for free but It only gave me 5 minutes to do that so Idk if the author did this or the app or what but if the author can can u do it again please like next month or something? this book looks really good And wish to read as much as I can but u cannonly get so many free passed a day and not everyone can get coins!! so if this can happen again that would be awesome and honestly it would help bring in more people to the book especially if they read it into the later chapters!!
this is the only novel ive read on here where you can spend over 100 coins on 3 chapters, and thats the worst thing about it.
It's a good story with a great potential. The mistake like grammar and typo is also really unnoticable. The world background is also a bit of a fresh air, especially with many cultivation novel around here. The pacing is kinda slow (at least for me) but it doesnt feels like filler yet. I do have concern about the attitude of the MC and the name of the system though To be honest I try to read this novel after sering kingdom building in the title. But as the story progress I realize that the subject of the MC are probably those girls that comes from gacha and nothing more (at least until chapter 41) . That limits the number of the subject, so to be honest I kinda dissapointed. Moreover, as the story goes I also feels kinda frustrated with MC behaviour. Again I come here expecting some kind of faction building, so I expect the protagonist have some quality of a leader, but I am disappointed. The proeels like a door mat, (at least as far as chapter 41) especially the scene where he gives many equipment but got nothing, even up until that point, she still doesnt trust him. To be honest, he is really not a good leader material, I'm confused how he even got that system. With honesty over the top that question whether he is jp protag, to some kind of naive personality by trusting other people too easily. But overall it's somewhat ejoyable story
揭示劇透 overall great idea, world is portrayed okay, mostly its just a major flaw with the mc, he's the epitome of a person we all hate.
Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting... Interesting...
I don't like yuri that much nd in his harem there is harem stealing girl so it's pretty let down nd talk about how high his pride is that he consider others beneath him so he have to feel responsible is grossing me out it feels like double standard person while other things in story is very much appreciated
its a good and interesting novel, its just non-virgin fmc is not something i can like and ruins it, if you can tolerate it then its fine but then again why would you read fantasy lol.
The story concept is interesting, but so many other factors ruin it for me. The MC says many things that just seem sexist. There are tons of run on sentences and grammar issues as well. Plus, there are some scenes that are so awkwardly written. Like discussing the skills of the group only to go on a tangent about how no one has enough mana to use skills and they will just have to attack any monsters until they die. If that's how it is, just skip the introduction and move onto the fighting.
Novel take on Kingdom building an a system. I really like. Wish we could see 1 or 2 chapters a day though. Waiting several days is just too much.
bom, quero mais............................................................................................. ...............................
I done reading all the chapters and i have to say that is sooooo gooooood its so relaxing funny and interesting ty author I will be suporting you
It has an amazing story so far. A little bit skeptical about the Gacha part but It's integrates well. I wish the author upload more chapters though. Author keep it up.
really enjoying this story so far even though there is no indication where the story might be heading. never really been a fan of the gacha theme but you git me ready to read more so I will wait.
i wanna be as good as the guy who's writing this that's it, that's the review and now i'll proceed to keep writing so I can post the review
This is alright The mc is very unlikeable (at least imo). He is contradictory in his actions, creepy and dumb The dialogue is kinda dry and only a few lines per chapter The monologues are insanely long and full of overexplaining The concept of kingdom bulding is nice but after 25 ch not that much of it and thats the main reason I wanted to try this novel. I can understand that it’s tied to his lvl but that just slows the pace a lot + with the monologues makes the novel to lack substance most of the chs For short, nothing special. Maybe the choice of weapons and the intricacies of the kingdom building that will be present in the future chs but 25 chs are enough for me to wait for those before bouncing Still way above the usual flaming garbanzo reads though