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I personally think that this is an incredible work of art. There are some bits and pieces that could use improvement, like Daphne said, Harry rants ALOT. Shortening them a bit would make this-in my opinion- much better. Take chapter 349 as an example, Harry repeatedly says that he wants to not be involved with Lily anymore, but practically the whole chap was him ranting at her and thinking how much he doesn't like her. This just makes me thinks that Lily has gotten in his head and Harry is no where near letting go of her. This just a small issue though and it can be easily improved. Just try your best and strive for more Author-kun! Overall this is a contender for my fav ff of all time
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Although the main character says he wouldn’t get involved in the Golden Trio’s adventures, he gets involved quite easily, up until the chapter I read. The character seems to get less intelligent as the story progresses, and at times it seems like he either forgot he knew about the events beforehand or didn’t care enough about them. But the story is well-written.
one of the best HP fanfic available with surprisingly with more than 800k words. I love how author uses HP's magical talent & family legacy. I hope author explores HP universe more.
Too much of a cat and mouse game. Every arc I've read (up to chapter 100, because I have run out of patience) so far is like that. Too many layers, like Ghost grandpa in the crest and OP horcruxes? It's a good read, but you get tired of it. Character developement from chap 1 to 20: he gets a few friends, he's not alone anymore. From 20 to 100: nothing.
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can you write a fanfiction in asoiaf world as an immortal with harry potter magic at the time of the conqueror, like more magical support and swordsman academy, magic college. mix more fantasy elements and becoming a god like story i don't know there is not much a quality asoiaf world novel. you can look tatered dragon fanfiction its good i don't know asoiaf is a great sandbox
One of, if not the best Harry Potter Fanfics I have ever read, I struggle to find appropriate words to describe how good this is so I will simply leave it with this: Thanks for an amazing read!
w story properly hashed characters and everyone acts 3 dimensionally. The only downside is how realistic it is – that literally every character has a story
A very good novel based on HP story. I've read a few so far, and it's one of the best.
This is one of the best or the best book on here there is only one book that can compare. But about the book its's amazing and really fun to read. The writer is amazing, the grammar is perfect (at least to me because i couldn't find grammar problems). I absolutely love the MC it's so fun to try to predict what he will do and see if you guessed correctly. I would definitely recommend this book to everyone who likes harry potter because this is definitely the best harry potter book on webnovel
In fact, I find it wonderful how the author added his own additions to the original world, or rather how the entire world is based on Harry not being the child of prophecy, some difference but fun, and he did not limit himself to some kind of closed reference, sometimes I find that MC's actions may drive me crazy, but I liked how he developed his character without forgetting the rest of the characters and developing the world. I liked how the author explained the characters' feelings and made me live all their joys, sorrows and even their difficulties, and I find that he delivered this message in a creative way. How the author made the character face challenges and did not make him too strong, but he also did not make him weak all the time, you will find sometimes that the character is weak and that he cannot win in a simple situation and sometimes he wins in extremely difficult situations, I liked the idea of moving to the original dimension, although it is somewhat repetitive, the author formulated it in his own style and I cannot wait to complete the rest of the chapters of the alternate universe
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Nice. Hope he has fun here lol. Instead of obsessing over dumbledore. Lol........... ............................................................
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I liked the story at first, but honestly with so many different povs it becomes a chore to read and the mc has just become some Mary sue who never actually loses anything with real meaning, and when he does lose they do some Mary sue shenanigans where they actually won and played their opponents all along. It’s just become some face slapping power fantasy story.
I swear, the word “Shrugged” is the author’s favorite. There is not a single chapter where it does not appear. It really drives me crazy. There's also the protagonist with his terribly random “adult” monologue that he tries to instill in the kids from time to time. They also instill it in adults. Is there really a person who can talk like that? I don't believe it, but the author seems to believe it. If the narrative is improved a little more by reducing... no, ELIMINATING that annoying “Shrugged” and the strange monologues of the protagonist along with a good polishing of his personality, the novel would become an almost perfect story.
i don't know. i like this story but I don't think it's incredible either. It has many points against it and many points going for it. Finally, this is a question for the author. Is this a crossover with the fate universe? Or did you just adapt it's magic system? I am around chapter 80.
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hope the author will see this review. too much pov, you're killing the story and breaking the pace constantly. it's becoming a hassle to read frankly, and that's sad because the story is interesting. also, Harry is too lame, almost no real evolution of his caractere. even if you are emotionally stupid if you are as smart as him and curious when people constantly make the same comments you'll start to think. so him and daph, boring
Massive W imo. Love it. Keep it up arthur. .................................. Cant wait when dumbledore dies but that will probably be in end of this fic.
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Ok, this is disappointing to read. If you were going to completely change Harry's roots and his family history, you should have just created a different character who was fresh. The Potter family can be traced back to Linfred of Stinchcombe, a 12th-century wizard who was a celebrated potion-maker and the original source of the family’s wealth. He was affectionately known as "the Potterer," which eventually became "Potter." I'm up to chapter 22, and it feels disappointing. I hate that Harry Potter fanfics always try to force their MC to go to school for absolutely no reason.
Came for a witty character and an interesting spin on the series. Left with a depressed little emo and the same shenanigans as the first-year story. Despite all the changes the author likes to pretend happened, the end result is the same. And sure, maybe things won't change immediately, but expecting their readers to endure 60+ chapters before they actually get there makes them a clown.
It is very very well written and very well developed. overall, it is a fantastic fic, but if you are not a fan of constant POV changes, you might go insane. I don't remember If the earlier chapters follow the same pattern, but in the later chapters every single chapter is a POV change, and it can get pretty jarring at times.
This fanfic is not bad, it's just too boring. I love fanfics that are easy to read, not too rigid and cumbersome. This fanfic here is too logical, the MC doesn't feel like he is the MC. Just a normal person who reincarnated into Harry Potter world and started to learn about magic. He isn't talented and he doesn't have any Golden Finger or anything else to help him, he works hard to get anywhere. If it was only that, it would have been okay, but the problem is that the MC honesty doesn't get anywhere even with all his hard work, since as I said before this is a very logical fanfic, and not everyone can get as strong as Dumbledore and Voldemort through hard work... How many wizards dedicated themselves to studying and practicing magic but still didn't amount to much? A lot... I don't know what happens later on in this fanfic, but the first 100 chapters are very very boring and I honestly couldn't continue past it. So it is a 3 star review from me.
I dare to say this is one of the best Harry Potter fanfiction I ever read and I read a lot this character development and the storyline Ward background everything is so good in my opinion this is your five stars so give it a shot and I am going to tell you you will not regret it
After 230 chapters. This is the only book that has amazing background work, amazing characters, and great storytelling. BEST Harry Potter novel ever. The complexity of the world and Harry's influences is well detailed. Author PLS, dont drop it.
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It is one of the best Storys I have ever read. Writing Quality ist almost perfect (like one mistake per chapter on average) Story Development is nice; we first follow mainly the Canon events (for Character development) but leave them behind the farther the story continues. Character design is quite good but a little bit too much focus on magical development (can be a bit dull if you bench read 200 chapters) Update stability is good World Backgraund is done masterfully. Many explanations abound Wizarding history as well as personal information about important side characters.
This ff is a great read, the author has a captivating way of telling a story that you just want to keep reading! It's just a pretty heavy read so if you want something light to pass the time this isn't for you but if you're searching for a serious ff this is it!
I am giving the story five stars because ... well everybody seems to do it, and I did it in my last story. Anyway, if you have any comments or criticism let me know. I hope you enjoy this fic...
I personally think that this is an incredible work of art. There are some bits and pieces that could use improvement, like Daphne said, Harry rants ALOT. Shortening them a bit would make this-in my opinion- much better. Take chapter 349 as an example, Harry repeatedly says that he wants to not be involved with Lily anymore, but practically the whole chap was him ranting at her and thinking how much he doesn't like her. This just makes me thinks that Lily has gotten in his head and Harry is no where near letting go of her. This just a small issue though and it can be easily improved. Just try your best and strive for more Author-kun! Overall this is a contender for my fav ff of all time
揭示劇透 Although the main character says he wouldn’t get involved in the Golden Trio’s adventures, he gets involved quite easily, up until the chapter I read. The character seems to get less intelligent as the story progresses, and at times it seems like he either forgot he knew about the events beforehand or didn’t care enough about them. But the story is well-written.
one of the best HP fanfic available with surprisingly with more than 800k words. I love how author uses HP's magical talent & family legacy. I hope author explores HP universe more.
Too much of a cat and mouse game. Every arc I've read (up to chapter 100, because I have run out of patience) so far is like that. Too many layers, like Ghost grandpa in the crest and OP horcruxes? It's a good read, but you get tired of it. Character developement from chap 1 to 20: he gets a few friends, he's not alone anymore. From 20 to 100: nothing.
揭示劇透 can you write a fanfiction in asoiaf world as an immortal with harry potter magic at the time of the conqueror, like more magical support and swordsman academy, magic college. mix more fantasy elements and becoming a god like story i don't know there is not much a quality asoiaf world novel. you can look tatered dragon fanfiction its good i don't know asoiaf is a great sandbox
One of, if not the best Harry Potter Fanfics I have ever read, I struggle to find appropriate words to describe how good this is so I will simply leave it with this: Thanks for an amazing read!
w story properly hashed characters and everyone acts 3 dimensionally. The only downside is how realistic it is – that literally every character has a story
A very good novel based on HP story. I've read a few so far, and it's one of the best.
This is one of the best or the best book on here there is only one book that can compare. But about the book its's amazing and really fun to read. The writer is amazing, the grammar is perfect (at least to me because i couldn't find grammar problems). I absolutely love the MC it's so fun to try to predict what he will do and see if you guessed correctly. I would definitely recommend this book to everyone who likes harry potter because this is definitely the best harry potter book on webnovel
In fact, I find it wonderful how the author added his own additions to the original world, or rather how the entire world is based on Harry not being the child of prophecy, some difference but fun, and he did not limit himself to some kind of closed reference, sometimes I find that MC's actions may drive me crazy, but I liked how he developed his character without forgetting the rest of the characters and developing the world. I liked how the author explained the characters' feelings and made me live all their joys, sorrows and even their difficulties, and I find that he delivered this message in a creative way. How the author made the character face challenges and did not make him too strong, but he also did not make him weak all the time, you will find sometimes that the character is weak and that he cannot win in a simple situation and sometimes he wins in extremely difficult situations, I liked the idea of moving to the original dimension, although it is somewhat repetitive, the author formulated it in his own style and I cannot wait to complete the rest of the chapters of the alternate universe
揭示劇透 Nice. Hope he has fun here lol. Instead of obsessing over dumbledore. Lol........... ............................................................
揭示劇透 I liked the story at first, but honestly with so many different povs it becomes a chore to read and the mc has just become some Mary sue who never actually loses anything with real meaning, and when he does lose they do some Mary sue shenanigans where they actually won and played their opponents all along. It’s just become some face slapping power fantasy story.
I swear, the word “Shrugged” is the author’s favorite. There is not a single chapter where it does not appear. It really drives me crazy. There's also the protagonist with his terribly random “adult” monologue that he tries to instill in the kids from time to time. They also instill it in adults. Is there really a person who can talk like that? I don't believe it, but the author seems to believe it. If the narrative is improved a little more by reducing... no, ELIMINATING that annoying “Shrugged” and the strange monologues of the protagonist along with a good polishing of his personality, the novel would become an almost perfect story.
i don't know. i like this story but I don't think it's incredible either. It has many points against it and many points going for it. Finally, this is a question for the author. Is this a crossover with the fate universe? Or did you just adapt it's magic system? I am around chapter 80.
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hope the author will see this review. too much pov, you're killing the story and breaking the pace constantly. it's becoming a hassle to read frankly, and that's sad because the story is interesting. also, Harry is too lame, almost no real evolution of his caractere. even if you are emotionally stupid if you are as smart as him and curious when people constantly make the same comments you'll start to think. so him and daph, boring
Massive W imo. Love it. Keep it up arthur. .................................. Cant wait when dumbledore dies but that will probably be in end of this fic.
揭示劇透 Ok, this is disappointing to read. If you were going to completely change Harry's roots and his family history, you should have just created a different character who was fresh. The Potter family can be traced back to Linfred of Stinchcombe, a 12th-century wizard who was a celebrated potion-maker and the original source of the family’s wealth. He was affectionately known as "the Potterer," which eventually became "Potter." I'm up to chapter 22, and it feels disappointing. I hate that Harry Potter fanfics always try to force their MC to go to school for absolutely no reason.
Came for a witty character and an interesting spin on the series. Left with a depressed little emo and the same shenanigans as the first-year story. Despite all the changes the author likes to pretend happened, the end result is the same. And sure, maybe things won't change immediately, but expecting their readers to endure 60+ chapters before they actually get there makes them a clown.
It is very very well written and very well developed. overall, it is a fantastic fic, but if you are not a fan of constant POV changes, you might go insane. I don't remember If the earlier chapters follow the same pattern, but in the later chapters every single chapter is a POV change, and it can get pretty jarring at times.
This fanfic is not bad, it's just too boring. I love fanfics that are easy to read, not too rigid and cumbersome. This fanfic here is too logical, the MC doesn't feel like he is the MC. Just a normal person who reincarnated into Harry Potter world and started to learn about magic. He isn't talented and he doesn't have any Golden Finger or anything else to help him, he works hard to get anywhere. If it was only that, it would have been okay, but the problem is that the MC honesty doesn't get anywhere even with all his hard work, since as I said before this is a very logical fanfic, and not everyone can get as strong as Dumbledore and Voldemort through hard work... How many wizards dedicated themselves to studying and practicing magic but still didn't amount to much? A lot... I don't know what happens later on in this fanfic, but the first 100 chapters are very very boring and I honestly couldn't continue past it. So it is a 3 star review from me.
I dare to say this is one of the best Harry Potter fanfiction I ever read and I read a lot this character development and the storyline Ward background everything is so good in my opinion this is your five stars so give it a shot and I am going to tell you you will not regret it
After 230 chapters. This is the only book that has amazing background work, amazing characters, and great storytelling. BEST Harry Potter novel ever. The complexity of the world and Harry's influences is well detailed. Author PLS, dont drop it.
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It is one of the best Storys I have ever read. Writing Quality ist almost perfect (like one mistake per chapter on average) Story Development is nice; we first follow mainly the Canon events (for Character development) but leave them behind the farther the story continues. Character design is quite good but a little bit too much focus on magical development (can be a bit dull if you bench read 200 chapters) Update stability is good World Backgraund is done masterfully. Many explanations abound Wizarding history as well as personal information about important side characters.
This ff is a great read, the author has a captivating way of telling a story that you just want to keep reading! It's just a pretty heavy read so if you want something light to pass the time this isn't for you but if you're searching for a serious ff this is it!
I am giving the story five stars because ... well everybody seems to do it, and I did it in my last story. Anyway, if you have any comments or criticism let me know. I hope you enjoy this fic...