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Reseña de un español: Bueno, para empezar súper decepcionado. Estuve leyendo la historia antes de que hiciera el reinicio, leí la historia después del reinicio, he terminado de leer la historia. Tenía buena pinta, era una historia decente, pero el constante desdén del autor por los lectores, las pausas enormes sin avisar y el hecho de que decida dejar la historia apenas llegando a los 30 episodios, ha echo que esta lectura sea sólo una pérdida de tiempo. Si me hubiera visto de nuevo el anime de arifureta, que es basura en comparación a la novela, habría aprovechado mejor mi tiempo. No aporta NADA nuevo esta historia es casi un copia pega del original cambiando el nombre del prota y dándole dos habilidades diferentes. Una auténtica decepción, esta historia brilla por su idea, no por el autor.
I don't know how to rate this ff. It's plot, updates and charater design are good but the way you describe the story just frustrates me for example: At some point it looks like you know alot about the OG but at some point you miss to add the basic details of the story purposely or not. At some points you give to many details that it looks like it's a slow burn ff but at some point you don't even mention the most basic things happeing in the story and rush past all of them mostly in his leveling up arc currently ongoing in the abss.
Let's start this.First of all, your writing quality is good, the world background is decent, the updating stability is nice.And then we get to the character design. MC was a good character through and through until the latest chapters (25 to current). Your MC became worser than Hajime, might be better to compare him to a ded dove on the streets.He becomes a bad edge Lord.
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The writing quality is nice, I haven't really noticed grammatical or spelling error but I wasn't really looking fot it anyway.The story development is okay but feels like a rewrite except this time the mc replaces hajime. I was kinda disappointed honestly. Due to the MC being clueless to the world of Arifureta I predicted that maybe they will fall together in the labrynth but get seperated and only meet in the deeper floors after a bit of character development from both of them. Or maybe hajime will fall as per the original and the mc finally had enough went on his seperate way. It's till to early to tell maybe the author different has plans for hajime and the mc I just hope that it won't be the mc replacing hajime in the story because that was already a story that was told before.Character design is nice it's like a copy paste of Sung Jin-woo from solo leveling. Although he hasn't use much of his powers but there isn't much opportunity to use it anyway.
I really like the way the story progressed, not too slow and not too fast. I hope don't drop this cuz it became one of my fav fan fic. I can't wait for the next chap (currently on chapter 19). Deserves all of my power stones.
Brother, the fic that you are creating from beginning to end is really beautiful, you have left me with complete emotion and I am looking forward to the new chapters that you will publish
Nice story so far, I hope the author does an update as soon as possible. Well, hoping that mc won't have a harem and just take shizuku as his love interest.
Love it~❤️. You should make a Pokémon fanfic! Or Blue Lock! There aren’t many of those and the ones that are here in WebNovel are discontinued.
although I don't dislike your work but it would have been more interesting if our MC knew about the future. what do you think
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I've never seen a rewrite done before. So when I saw that it was "dropped" with no chapters I was so disappointed 😔. Anyways hope this one is even better than the last
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Author’s Shameless Review! This is my first time writing so I hope you can be lenient when giving reviews. If I make any major mistakes such as illogical plot and the like, please comment here so I can improve on mistakes. Thanks!
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Reseña de un español: Bueno, para empezar súper decepcionado. Estuve leyendo la historia antes de que hiciera el reinicio, leí la historia después del reinicio, he terminado de leer la historia. Tenía buena pinta, era una historia decente, pero el constante desdén del autor por los lectores, las pausas enormes sin avisar y el hecho de que decida dejar la historia apenas llegando a los 30 episodios, ha echo que esta lectura sea sólo una pérdida de tiempo. Si me hubiera visto de nuevo el anime de arifureta, que es basura en comparación a la novela, habría aprovechado mejor mi tiempo. No aporta NADA nuevo esta historia es casi un copia pega del original cambiando el nombre del prota y dándole dos habilidades diferentes. Una auténtica decepción, esta historia brilla por su idea, no por el autor.
I don't know how to rate this ff. It's plot, updates and charater design are good but the way you describe the story just frustrates me for example: At some point it looks like you know alot about the OG but at some point you miss to add the basic details of the story purposely or not. At some points you give to many details that it looks like it's a slow burn ff but at some point you don't even mention the most basic things happeing in the story and rush past all of them mostly in his leveling up arc currently ongoing in the abss.
Let's start this.First of all, your writing quality is good, the world background is decent, the updating stability is nice.And then we get to the character design. MC was a good character through and through until the latest chapters (25 to current). Your MC became worser than Hajime, might be better to compare him to a ded dove on the streets.He becomes a bad edge Lord.
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The writing quality is nice, I haven't really noticed grammatical or spelling error but I wasn't really looking fot it anyway.The story development is okay but feels like a rewrite except this time the mc replaces hajime. I was kinda disappointed honestly. Due to the MC being clueless to the world of Arifureta I predicted that maybe they will fall together in the labrynth but get seperated and only meet in the deeper floors after a bit of character development from both of them. Or maybe hajime will fall as per the original and the mc finally had enough went on his seperate way. It's till to early to tell maybe the author different has plans for hajime and the mc I just hope that it won't be the mc replacing hajime in the story because that was already a story that was told before.Character design is nice it's like a copy paste of Sung Jin-woo from solo leveling. Although he hasn't use much of his powers but there isn't much opportunity to use it anyway.
I really like the way the story progressed, not too slow and not too fast. I hope don't drop this cuz it became one of my fav fan fic. I can't wait for the next chap (currently on chapter 19). Deserves all of my power stones.
Brother, the fic that you are creating from beginning to end is really beautiful, you have left me with complete emotion and I am looking forward to the new chapters that you will publish
Nice story so far, I hope the author does an update as soon as possible. Well, hoping that mc won't have a harem and just take shizuku as his love interest.
Love it~❤️. You should make a Pokémon fanfic! Or Blue Lock! There aren’t many of those and the ones that are here in WebNovel are discontinued.
although I don't dislike your work but it would have been more interesting if our MC knew about the future. what do you think
I like it take this meme._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
I've never seen a rewrite done before. So when I saw that it was "dropped" with no chapters I was so disappointed 😔. Anyways hope this one is even better than the last
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Great story .................................................................................................................................
Author’s Shameless Review! This is my first time writing so I hope you can be lenient when giving reviews. If I make any major mistakes such as illogical plot and the like, please comment here so I can improve on mistakes. Thanks!
honestly mid the story is super super drag out 😒😒