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gostei bastante, o poder é creativo mas não muito e a protagonista é legal, so não gostei do fim abrupto.
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2.6 / 5 Why so low? This is basically canon. It's nearly identical to canon... of course it neither has the charm, nor the art of the original which makes it feel extremely cheap and shallow. What are the differences? MC has a power that makes no sense, even by OP standards and has a devilfruit that is so OP it should not exist. Still author manages to make it incredibly weak. Overall MC barely adds anything worthwhile to story... just some extra comments but at the same time she constantly plays dumb and nothing drastically changes.
The best one so far. Thank you for writing this. Its so good i finish reading in 2 days.
Una buena historia, bastante interesante. Una pena que decidiera dejar el fanfic. --------------------------------------- --------------------------- ----------------
I just finished reading to chapter 308 and decided to stop here and wait for more chapters to stack up, really good story so far, I think this is one of my favorite joining the straw hats type of story, it isn't just reading one piece with an extra character standing at the side, the story has a lot of differences from the original especially after time skip, the characters are captured beautifully, it is funny, it is interesting, I have a lot of good things to say about this story, I can't believe that it barely has people reading it and voting for it, the uploads are also great with like 1 per day. Anyway, I will stop it here, I highly recommend giving this a read if you have the time, it's worth it.
got to chapter 80 or so, thriller bark arc. mc gets way too strong for no reason (she looks at the 6 martial arts from the CP0 and copies it in the next chapter just cuz) and basically just rolls through everyone they face. otherwise its basically a canon cope paste novel. overall its just boring more than anything. there always the inner monologue of the mc scheming so things dont change from canon, like she lets robin go with enis lobby even though she could have easily stopped it. at that point its not even a story, its just a robot that is trying to keep things on script.
I love it It’s one piece but alot different it’s like reading a new one piece story [img=sad][img=recommend]
One of the best one piece fanfics that i've read, Vivi was an interesting choice, at first i was worried that it's gonna be one of those where the mc is just there not interfering but i love the changes that happened, i absolutely love it, highly recommend it 10/10.(chapter 208)
Thank you author for writing this fanfic. this really made my day, definitely recommended!!!! please update author!!!! I'm excited to read more about their adventures and fight!!! especially about Vivi and Nami!!!
Fairly original concept, and the mystery behind Vivi’s powers is intriguing. Good work so far, however the grammar leaves something to be desired at times. Overall, would recommend for OP fans 👍
I just don’t feel like this need 140+ chapters could easily be 50, other than that it’s just kinda boring
i plan on reading this but have not yet however it deserves 5 stars for the description alone especially the last sentence needs 5 stars for that alone i have no choice to be honest i hate people that do what i am doing but this truly deserves my hypocrisy and 5 stars any slice of life that misses a key point of life ...... (literally the second most important emotion is love scienctificly proven backed my FACTS) (p.s. the first is authenticity/(directed truth and honesty with a hint of want for mutual empathy(if u dont know)))
Really liked the story. Normally the direction of the fights and their results are what I dislike but with how you incoporate its necessity it made me liked the story even more. Lastly, after reading the latest chapters, it made me want to read it even more. Will recommend this to everyone who likes reincarnation/isekai One Liece stories.
For a fanfiction, this is actually good. There are some things I disliked, but all in all, I would recommend giving it a try. Now, for things that may turn some off. First, the main points of the Strawhat's journey remain the same, but Vivi does have an impact. She starts off slow as she is weak, but in the later chapters she does change the way some conclusions are reached. As she is with the Strawhats, the conclusions will inevitably be the same as Canon. They always win in canon so they will here too. Something that I greatly dislike about this is Vivi's power. She presumes that it's Water logia, but it's so weak that it can only be a Water Paramecia.(Her body is water and she can control her body. That's it). Somehow I think and it's implied that there is more to her power but after 125 chapters we are still at the assumption that it's a water logia... Vivi also doesn't seem to train. She has some broken regeneration and she doesn't train her body...she only gets stronger by fighting.
Love it does far, cant wait to keep reading it. Love how flirty Vivi is, would love to see more between Robin and her but in general I really like it so far.
I'm not usually fastidious but this story is really boring. It's nothing but a copy-paste version of the canon, and Vivi got a Water water fruit, seriously?
Good book author knows what he’s doing guve it a try it gets way better after the first chapter almost like a different person started writing it.
Really good book I’ve never seen a vivi book before and honestly it’s incredible. Reading this book made my day thanks a bunch author!
Well the story is pretty great! I like the pacing, update frequency and the little butterfly effects from Vivi decisions very much. I'm always happy to see a new chapter almost everyday. It's also pretty nice to see more fictions about Vivi. Thanks for great work autor. [img=recommend]
Great one piece fanfiction where the author really takes the time to flesh out a real character that has an actual personality.
I like the story quite a bit. For one Vivi isn´t often used, but when she is, it is as a trophy wife without much character development. Now having the MC reincarnate as her is a novel aproach for Vivi. That she has some unknown power inside her body, which can be seen by high level marine personel adds a new element to the story, which I find quite entertaining. Can recomend. Written at chapter 110
Amazing and underrated book. Very interesting choice as I never thought of someone reincarnating into vivi. Only thing is, WE NEED MORE SUPPORT. pls, read.
Well, it's very boring, it's basically a copy/pasta of the canon with an additional character posing as the mc. Once Vivi left Arabasta with the Straw Hats she lost any impact she had previously, every events still remains exactly the same and Vivi has barely 1 or 2 sentences per chapter, everything is so fast paced and emotionless that you can't begin to be interested in the characters or the actions the take. Don't waste your time on this fanfic, there's nothing interesting or thrilling to read here, it will just bore you to death.
i like how vivi change from a princess that still has formality and manner, now in latest arc she losing some of that, well i think you can make her middle ground between nami and robin on how she act around the strawhat pirate good job! a good read! 👍
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It's not a bad one piece fic so far, though it's not the best. The fact that sticking to the plot throughout the journey of the straw hats, is honestly the only thing that makes it... I'm not sure what else to say than boring, I get it though, writing from the plot is easier and mixing and matching different actions that ends up having the same results won't make the story deviate from the main plot, but it robbed your story of actually having something fresh and appealing. That said, superb writing, a few small errors here and there but it's better than 90% of this platform.
I hope some people like it. I haven't yet seen a fic about Vivi so I wanted to write one. I know some people will complain that she is too weak. But, trust me, she will get powerful later on.
Brillant Story [img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it] Can't actually rate the update stability cause this amazing adventure of a story was already finished when I had the luck to discover it, so I rated it five stars regardless. Love how casually she keeps killing lol Thanks for the amazing Story Author
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gostei bastante, o poder é creativo mas não muito e a protagonista é legal, so não gostei do fim abrupto.
揭示劇透 2.6 / 5 Why so low? This is basically canon. It's nearly identical to canon... of course it neither has the charm, nor the art of the original which makes it feel extremely cheap and shallow. What are the differences? MC has a power that makes no sense, even by OP standards and has a devilfruit that is so OP it should not exist. Still author manages to make it incredibly weak. Overall MC barely adds anything worthwhile to story... just some extra comments but at the same time she constantly plays dumb and nothing drastically changes.
The best one so far. Thank you for writing this. Its so good i finish reading in 2 days.
Una buena historia, bastante interesante. Una pena que decidiera dejar el fanfic. --------------------------------------- --------------------------- ----------------
I just finished reading to chapter 308 and decided to stop here and wait for more chapters to stack up, really good story so far, I think this is one of my favorite joining the straw hats type of story, it isn't just reading one piece with an extra character standing at the side, the story has a lot of differences from the original especially after time skip, the characters are captured beautifully, it is funny, it is interesting, I have a lot of good things to say about this story, I can't believe that it barely has people reading it and voting for it, the uploads are also great with like 1 per day. Anyway, I will stop it here, I highly recommend giving this a read if you have the time, it's worth it.
got to chapter 80 or so, thriller bark arc. mc gets way too strong for no reason (she looks at the 6 martial arts from the CP0 and copies it in the next chapter just cuz) and basically just rolls through everyone they face. otherwise its basically a canon cope paste novel. overall its just boring more than anything. there always the inner monologue of the mc scheming so things dont change from canon, like she lets robin go with enis lobby even though she could have easily stopped it. at that point its not even a story, its just a robot that is trying to keep things on script.
I love it It’s one piece but alot different it’s like reading a new one piece story [img=sad][img=recommend]
One of the best one piece fanfics that i've read, Vivi was an interesting choice, at first i was worried that it's gonna be one of those where the mc is just there not interfering but i love the changes that happened, i absolutely love it, highly recommend it 10/10.(chapter 208)
Thank you author for writing this fanfic. this really made my day, definitely recommended!!!! please update author!!!! I'm excited to read more about their adventures and fight!!! especially about Vivi and Nami!!!
Fairly original concept, and the mystery behind Vivi’s powers is intriguing. Good work so far, however the grammar leaves something to be desired at times. Overall, would recommend for OP fans 👍
I just don’t feel like this need 140+ chapters could easily be 50, other than that it’s just kinda boring
i plan on reading this but have not yet however it deserves 5 stars for the description alone especially the last sentence needs 5 stars for that alone i have no choice to be honest i hate people that do what i am doing but this truly deserves my hypocrisy and 5 stars any slice of life that misses a key point of life ...... (literally the second most important emotion is love scienctificly proven backed my FACTS) (p.s. the first is authenticity/(directed truth and honesty with a hint of want for mutual empathy(if u dont know)))
Really liked the story. Normally the direction of the fights and their results are what I dislike but with how you incoporate its necessity it made me liked the story even more. Lastly, after reading the latest chapters, it made me want to read it even more. Will recommend this to everyone who likes reincarnation/isekai One Liece stories.
For a fanfiction, this is actually good. There are some things I disliked, but all in all, I would recommend giving it a try. Now, for things that may turn some off. First, the main points of the Strawhat's journey remain the same, but Vivi does have an impact. She starts off slow as she is weak, but in the later chapters she does change the way some conclusions are reached. As she is with the Strawhats, the conclusions will inevitably be the same as Canon. They always win in canon so they will here too. Something that I greatly dislike about this is Vivi's power. She presumes that it's Water logia, but it's so weak that it can only be a Water Paramecia.(Her body is water and she can control her body. That's it). Somehow I think and it's implied that there is more to her power but after 125 chapters we are still at the assumption that it's a water logia... Vivi also doesn't seem to train. She has some broken regeneration and she doesn't train her body...she only gets stronger by fighting.
Love it does far, cant wait to keep reading it. Love how flirty Vivi is, would love to see more between Robin and her but in general I really like it so far.
I'm not usually fastidious but this story is really boring. It's nothing but a copy-paste version of the canon, and Vivi got a Water water fruit, seriously?
Good book author knows what he’s doing guve it a try it gets way better after the first chapter almost like a different person started writing it.
Really good book I’ve never seen a vivi book before and honestly it’s incredible. Reading this book made my day thanks a bunch author!
Well the story is pretty great! I like the pacing, update frequency and the little butterfly effects from Vivi decisions very much. I'm always happy to see a new chapter almost everyday. It's also pretty nice to see more fictions about Vivi. Thanks for great work autor. [img=recommend]
Great one piece fanfiction where the author really takes the time to flesh out a real character that has an actual personality.
I like the story quite a bit. For one Vivi isn´t often used, but when she is, it is as a trophy wife without much character development. Now having the MC reincarnate as her is a novel aproach for Vivi. That she has some unknown power inside her body, which can be seen by high level marine personel adds a new element to the story, which I find quite entertaining. Can recomend. Written at chapter 110
Amazing and underrated book. Very interesting choice as I never thought of someone reincarnating into vivi. Only thing is, WE NEED MORE SUPPORT. pls, read.
Well, it's very boring, it's basically a copy/pasta of the canon with an additional character posing as the mc. Once Vivi left Arabasta with the Straw Hats she lost any impact she had previously, every events still remains exactly the same and Vivi has barely 1 or 2 sentences per chapter, everything is so fast paced and emotionless that you can't begin to be interested in the characters or the actions the take. Don't waste your time on this fanfic, there's nothing interesting or thrilling to read here, it will just bore you to death.
i like how vivi change from a princess that still has formality and manner, now in latest arc she losing some of that, well i think you can make her middle ground between nami and robin on how she act around the strawhat pirate good job! a good read! 👍
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It's not a bad one piece fic so far, though it's not the best. The fact that sticking to the plot throughout the journey of the straw hats, is honestly the only thing that makes it... I'm not sure what else to say than boring, I get it though, writing from the plot is easier and mixing and matching different actions that ends up having the same results won't make the story deviate from the main plot, but it robbed your story of actually having something fresh and appealing. That said, superb writing, a few small errors here and there but it's better than 90% of this platform.
I hope some people like it. I haven't yet seen a fic about Vivi so I wanted to write one. I know some people will complain that she is too weak. But, trust me, she will get powerful later on.
Brillant Story [img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it] Can't actually rate the update stability cause this amazing adventure of a story was already finished when I had the luck to discover it, so I rated it five stars regardless. Love how casually she keeps killing lol Thanks for the amazing Story Author