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A vampire and a werewolf story, a nice book I would say but First! I believe the first chapter needs work. It had errors and was moving too fast. The second chapter was good grammar wise and I enjoyed it a bit I believe it is a good read but it also needs polishing. You all should give it a try
I usually try to at least read the first 10 chapters of a book before reviewing it. However, i couldn’t bring myself to do so with this one( i stopped at chapter 2). The reasons are : - The book is too fast paced . I have the feeling that the author is constantly jumping from actions to actions at a lightning speed, which makes it difficult to process the things that are happening. - The grammar is terrible. I'm myself not a native english speaker. I also recognize that it's difficult not to make mistakes while writing. However, there are so many mistakes in this book that it's just too painful to read it . - I, as a reader, didn’t feel the emotions that the author tried to convey . It's supposed to be sad that the Mc's parents died. However, it was so quickly told and dealt with that i didn't get to feel the emotions the author tried to convey . It also didn’t help that we were directly plunged in an action right in the beginning of the story, while not knowing the Mc or his family at all. - The first chapters didn’t answer these basic questions : who is the Mc ( personality and morality)? Why should i follow his adventures ? ( his goal , his motivations or something intriguing / interesting about him ) - The writing itself is problematic. The formulations, the structure of the sentences, the almost absent and/ or confusing punctuation, the badly done descriptions( when there are proper descriptions to speak of) , the dialogues... i know it's an app on which there are many aspiring authors. However , it's not an excuse for neglecting these basic problems which might make a book with a good story to tell, so distasteful that people simply don’t want to read it. All in all , the first chapters of a book are like its showcase . So , please author , try to write them correctly in your next works.
The story consists of vempire and different species which cool to read the World building the tales author till now is done very nicely i loved the way the character were designed and how they behave in different situations . i binged read it so i don't know what to say about the update stability rest overall a very great read keep going author
I like how the story develops and like the story background, it's a not for newbie readers though...but a many readers will surely enjoy it. A great mixture powers and good characters. Great effort...Keep writing!
Being that person who likes to give reviews. I kinda like the plot and the world background on which the story is built. It's nice and gives me the vibes that I want. Keep up
Will be popular one day... 💓💓amazingly written. Werewolf and Vampire, the War. The nice concept too. I liked this so far😇💓💓✨✨✨
The story seems to revolve around the theme of the struggle to overcome a difficult childhood and the search for a sense of normalcy and belonging. It has the potential to be a poignant and inspiring tale. One potential piece of advice for the author is to focus on developing the characters and their motivations. The protagonist's desire for a normal life is clear, but it would be beneficial to explore why this is so important to them and what drives them to keep pushing forward despite the challenges they face. Additionally, the author may want to consider incorporating descriptive language to create a vivid and immersive setting that complements the emotional depth of the story. Overall, the premise of the story is intriguing and has the potential to resonate with readers. With some additional character development and attention to detail, the author could create a compelling and unforgettable narrative. Good Luck...
man, I'll love to give more credit. But your work needs polishing... i know its'shard but bro, it's quite rough, to reread a chap to understand it... y'know you read it during free time so having to do some mental work while reading again is quite troublesome. But trust me, there's room for improvement. The work is quite raw, unrefined, so it's quite hard for the reader. I'll love to tell you the truth 🙏. So good luck in improving 🙏😉🤓
I love the story development. love that it's different from the usuals. Keep writing author 💌
I love the plot and the writing style is way easier to understand compared to other novels I read so far. Keep up the good work author.
Your story will one day get the contract there, no doubt about it. keep on writing, and don't stop.
I know I haven't gave this book enough of a chance I like the begining of it but truly it hops dates to much for me to keep up with but I like the overall layout of this novel
Well-deserved 5-star rating. Went back to the first chapter, that was what captivated me the most. Keep soaring author ,❤️🔥🔥❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
A werewolf, A vampire , electrokinesis and telekinesis all in one person. It's a nice novel which is worthy anyone's time. Come one, come all let's support the author
Hi everyone here I come again. Thanking everyone that gives thier time to my novel I really appreciate This time let me take this as A&Q you can ask me anything you want. ready to answer
The writing quality started out not too bad but trust me it gets better after the second chapter. The concept is a little weird but I like it.
A werewolf. A vampire. With electrokinesis and Telekinesis. All in one person. What could possibly go wrong? should be interesting to see where the author takes this tale
A vampire and a werewolf story, a nice book I would say but First! I believe the first chapter needs work. It had errors and was moving too fast. The second chapter was good grammar wise and I enjoyed it a bit I believe it is a good read but it also needs polishing. You all should give it a try
I usually try to at least read the first 10 chapters of a book before reviewing it. However, i couldn’t bring myself to do so with this one( i stopped at chapter 2). The reasons are : - The book is too fast paced . I have the feeling that the author is constantly jumping from actions to actions at a lightning speed, which makes it difficult to process the things that are happening. - The grammar is terrible. I'm myself not a native english speaker. I also recognize that it's difficult not to make mistakes while writing. However, there are so many mistakes in this book that it's just too painful to read it . - I, as a reader, didn’t feel the emotions that the author tried to convey . It's supposed to be sad that the Mc's parents died. However, it was so quickly told and dealt with that i didn't get to feel the emotions the author tried to convey . It also didn’t help that we were directly plunged in an action right in the beginning of the story, while not knowing the Mc or his family at all. - The first chapters didn’t answer these basic questions : who is the Mc ( personality and morality)? Why should i follow his adventures ? ( his goal , his motivations or something intriguing / interesting about him ) - The writing itself is problematic. The formulations, the structure of the sentences, the almost absent and/ or confusing punctuation, the badly done descriptions( when there are proper descriptions to speak of) , the dialogues... i know it's an app on which there are many aspiring authors. However , it's not an excuse for neglecting these basic problems which might make a book with a good story to tell, so distasteful that people simply don’t want to read it. All in all , the first chapters of a book are like its showcase . So , please author , try to write them correctly in your next works.
The story consists of vempire and different species which cool to read the World building the tales author till now is done very nicely i loved the way the character were designed and how they behave in different situations . i binged read it so i don't know what to say about the update stability rest overall a very great read keep going author
I like how the story develops and like the story background, it's a not for newbie readers though...but a many readers will surely enjoy it. A great mixture powers and good characters. Great effort...Keep writing!
Being that person who likes to give reviews. I kinda like the plot and the world background on which the story is built. It's nice and gives me the vibes that I want. Keep up
Will be popular one day... 💓💓amazingly written. Werewolf and Vampire, the War. The nice concept too. I liked this so far😇💓💓✨✨✨
The story seems to revolve around the theme of the struggle to overcome a difficult childhood and the search for a sense of normalcy and belonging. It has the potential to be a poignant and inspiring tale. One potential piece of advice for the author is to focus on developing the characters and their motivations. The protagonist's desire for a normal life is clear, but it would be beneficial to explore why this is so important to them and what drives them to keep pushing forward despite the challenges they face. Additionally, the author may want to consider incorporating descriptive language to create a vivid and immersive setting that complements the emotional depth of the story. Overall, the premise of the story is intriguing and has the potential to resonate with readers. With some additional character development and attention to detail, the author could create a compelling and unforgettable narrative. Good Luck...
man, I'll love to give more credit. But your work needs polishing... i know its'shard but bro, it's quite rough, to reread a chap to understand it... y'know you read it during free time so having to do some mental work while reading again is quite troublesome. But trust me, there's room for improvement. The work is quite raw, unrefined, so it's quite hard for the reader. I'll love to tell you the truth 🙏. So good luck in improving 🙏😉🤓
I love the story development. love that it's different from the usuals. Keep writing author 💌
I love the plot and the writing style is way easier to understand compared to other novels I read so far. Keep up the good work author.
Your story will one day get the contract there, no doubt about it. keep on writing, and don't stop.
I know I haven't gave this book enough of a chance I like the begining of it but truly it hops dates to much for me to keep up with but I like the overall layout of this novel
Well-deserved 5-star rating. Went back to the first chapter, that was what captivated me the most. Keep soaring author ,❤️🔥🔥❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
A werewolf, A vampire , electrokinesis and telekinesis all in one person. It's a nice novel which is worthy anyone's time. Come one, come all let's support the author
Hi everyone here I come again. Thanking everyone that gives thier time to my novel I really appreciate This time let me take this as A&Q you can ask me anything you want. ready to answer
The writing quality started out not too bad but trust me it gets better after the second chapter. The concept is a little weird but I like it.
A werewolf. A vampire. With electrokinesis and Telekinesis. All in one person. What could possibly go wrong? should be interesting to see where the author takes this tale